Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Crazy Critters"A collection of my children's poems
69 total reviews
Comment from Lise Deangelo
This is an awesome poem, and congratulations on your win. I seemed to have completely missed seeing this prompt. What wonderful rhyme you have in this one. Love it :) Lise
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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This is an awesome poem, and congratulations on your win. I seemed to have completely missed seeing this prompt. What wonderful rhyme you have in this one. Love it :) Lise
Comment Written 12-May-2011
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Thank you.
We're all even, because I didn't notice your clever story 'Stolen Kiss', so congrats on that!
Comment from R. K. Alan
Wonderful children's poem. I hope you are volunteering to stay up with them all night as it will probably scare the begebbers out of them. Nicely done and congrats on the win. Ray aka R. K. Alan
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Wonderful children's poem. I hope you are volunteering to stay up with them all night as it will probably scare the begebbers out of them. Nicely done and congrats on the win. Ray aka R. K. Alan
Comment Written 12-May-2011
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Yeah, maybe this is one to read them in the bright noonday sun, so they will have got over it by bedtime.
Thanks for the kind words.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Crazy Critters' is an extremely entertaining piece full of truly wonderful creatures. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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'Crazy Critters' is an extremely entertaining piece full of truly wonderful creatures. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.
Comment Written 12-May-2011
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Thank you, Duchess.
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kiwsteveh, you're more than welcome.
With my best wishes, the Duchess
Comment from ameen786
Wow! What a superb composition my friend, the rhyming and the rhythm, every single stanza is a marvel, great flow and what fun--even for adults, congratulations!
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Wow! What a superb composition my friend, the rhyming and the rhythm, every single stanza is a marvel, great flow and what fun--even for adults, congratulations!
Comment Written 12-May-2011
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Thank you for the enthusiastic review and the six stars. Maybe the last stanza was for adults...
Comment from MENNIPLOSS
PRETTY POEM, WITH BEAUTIFUL WORDS AND MANY BEAUTIFUL VERSES. IT HAS GOOD RATE, IT IS A WRITTEN GOOD WORK AND IT SHOWS A GREAT QUALITY. I SEND A HUG TO YOU AND I CONGRATULATE.
menniploss
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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PRETTY POEM, WITH BEAUTIFUL WORDS AND MANY BEAUTIFUL VERSES. IT HAS GOOD RATE, IT IS A WRITTEN GOOD WORK AND IT SHOWS A GREAT QUALITY. I SEND A HUG TO YOU AND I CONGRATULATE.
menniploss
Comment Written 11-May-2011
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Gracias!
Comment from Des Beirne
The child in me really enjoyed tittering my way through this wonderful poem.I hope lots of children get to read or hear this it is a real treat.
A very worthy winner, congratulations.
Des
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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The child in me really enjoyed tittering my way through this wonderful poem.I hope lots of children get to read or hear this it is a real treat.
A very worthy winner, congratulations.
Des
Comment Written 11-May-2011
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Thank you for the kind words - I am glad you enjoyed my bit of fun.
Steve
Comment from Kokopelli
I can't say I give 6 stars easily. We all have a limit we can give out and I've been saving mine - not for poetry - rather shorts. But!!!!! Your's did it. It brought me right to the brink... Click off - go to another selection my head was saying...But wait there's still another line.
Gawd, a month or so ago, I was asleep in my bed - peaceful - and something woke me. I turned on the light - and on the wall - headed directly toward me - a Georgia Scorpian. They are not as big as the western ones...But from what I'm told...Give a hell of a bite - and it hurts.
Geez. Right there in my bedroom - for all to see - for all to "RUN" from. I hate the little critters - all of them - and now that I've read your poem - I'm sure there are dozens waiting for me tonight.
Thanks. RUUUUUUUNNNNNNNNN.
David
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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I can't say I give 6 stars easily. We all have a limit we can give out and I've been saving mine - not for poetry - rather shorts. But!!!!! Your's did it. It brought me right to the brink... Click off - go to another selection my head was saying...But wait there's still another line.
Gawd, a month or so ago, I was asleep in my bed - peaceful - and something woke me. I turned on the light - and on the wall - headed directly toward me - a Georgia Scorpian. They are not as big as the western ones...But from what I'm told...Give a hell of a bite - and it hurts.
Geez. Right there in my bedroom - for all to see - for all to "RUN" from. I hate the little critters - all of them - and now that I've read your poem - I'm sure there are dozens waiting for me tonight.
Thanks. RUUUUUUUNNNNNNNNN.
David
Comment Written 11-May-2011
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Now I didn't mention scorpions - all my critters were benevolent and sweet. Worst we get here is geckos, unless a snake comes slithering in.
Anyway, thank you for the six stars - like you I'm stingy with them, so I appreciate getting it.
Comment from misscookie
Wow!
That's some poem and the story line is great.
I love how the poem flow it had my attention from the first line to the last
thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Wow!
That's some poem and the story line is great.
I love how the poem flow it had my attention from the first line to the last
thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 11-May-2011
reply by the author on 12-May-2011
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Thank you for your kind words.
Steve
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You are very welcome, take care.
Comment from ulster3
Hello kiwisteveh...
I can see why this one was the winner. The allusions, rhyme and rhythm are superb. Further, it is completely sustained all the way through. This is a children's poem that adults may also enjoy.
Warmly, Rebecca
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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Hello kiwisteveh...
I can see why this one was the winner. The allusions, rhyme and rhythm are superb. Further, it is completely sustained all the way through. This is a children's poem that adults may also enjoy.
Warmly, Rebecca
Comment Written 11-May-2011
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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Thank you - just twisted enough to garner votes... although that last stanza was a risk and it did put some people off.
Comment from Nydariem
Absolutely terrifying - I love it completely. Great imagination with the names of the critters and your last stanza tells me that you may have been, like most of us, 'asked' to help with some baby sitting at an unexpected moment or two.
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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Absolutely terrifying - I love it completely. Great imagination with the names of the critters and your last stanza tells me that you may have been, like most of us, 'asked' to help with some baby sitting at an unexpected moment or two.
Comment Written 11-May-2011
reply by the author on 11-May-2011
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Thanks for your review and welcome aboard the good ship FanStory!