On Enjoying Haiku
A Story/Lecture43 total reviews
Comment from mumsyone
The closing quotation mark at the end of this paragraph is what I was referring to omitting. When the same person's dialogue continues to the next paragraph, no quotation mark is used at the end of the first paragraph, or until they are done speaking:
"You see," Hiromi says, "You didn't personify nature, but you observed it. Your first haiku was all about your feelings, Alvin-san. You are so Western. You must be calm." (Omit this end quotation mark because Hiromi continues to speak in the next paragraph. End qotation mark is not used until she is done speaking.)
Hi Alvin,
I enjoyed the way you put this lesson in a story, and I always enjoy your humor when it comes to Bruce. Also liked your examples of haiku.
We don't speak Japanese(.)
"(omit " here because Hiromi is still speaking) Be calm, like Bruce-san and I were when we were breathing," Hiromi continues
"Come with me, Bruce(,) and we shall write wonderful haiku."
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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The closing quotation mark at the end of this paragraph is what I was referring to omitting. When the same person's dialogue continues to the next paragraph, no quotation mark is used at the end of the first paragraph, or until they are done speaking:
"You see," Hiromi says, "You didn't personify nature, but you observed it. Your first haiku was all about your feelings, Alvin-san. You are so Western. You must be calm." (Omit this end quotation mark because Hiromi continues to speak in the next paragraph. End qotation mark is not used until she is done speaking.)
Hi Alvin,
I enjoyed the way you put this lesson in a story, and I always enjoy your humor when it comes to Bruce. Also liked your examples of haiku.
We don't speak Japanese(.)
"(omit " here because Hiromi is still speaking) Be calm, like Bruce-san and I were when we were breathing," Hiromi continues
"Come with me, Bruce(,) and we shall write wonderful haiku."
Comment Written 21-May-2012
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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I can't find "omit"; where is it? And can you show me the rest of your corrections? I have read through the piece three times.
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Sorry, my notes were not as clear as they should have been. I hope this is clearer; I'm not on my own computer right now; quite a disadvantage.
Comment from Val Crisson
Another very clever and informative ad for your class. I found this one very informative, and cannot resist yor character Bruce. I believe he has been in other works of your's
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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Another very clever and informative ad for your class. I found this one very informative, and cannot resist yor character Bruce. I believe he has been in other works of your's
Comment Written 21-May-2012
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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Thanks; yes, he has. Will I see you in a course sometime? Thanks for an excellent review.
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Thanks; yes, he has. Will I see you in a course sometime? Thanks for an excellent review.
Comment from Christina 201
Hi, thanks for the entertaining lesson on Haiku. I had trouble keeping up with what was going on at times between the lesson though. I agree with cleared being a past tense verb, but not sure of the point of the argument.
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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Hi, thanks for the entertaining lesson on Haiku. I had trouble keeping up with what was going on at times between the lesson though. I agree with cleared being a past tense verb, but not sure of the point of the argument.
Comment Written 21-May-2012
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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Thanks for an excellent review. Haiku should always be written in the present tense; they should have an immediacy about them. ("cleared" here is an adjective, not a verb--if you translated it as "cleared rain", it shows up better.) I cover this in the introductory course to the shorter Japanese forms that starts in June, if you are interested.
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Thanks for an excellent review. Haiku should always be written in the present tense; they should have an immediacy about them. ("cleared" here is an adjective, not a verb--if you translated it as "cleared rain", it shows up better.) I cover this in the introductory course to the shorter Japanese forms that starts in June, if you are interested.
Comment from James crofoot
Very cool, thanks for the humorous little lecture. I am a big fan of this poetry so this was great. I wish i could sign up for the class, but alas funds are tight right now. I am however, going to save this for later reading though. Thanks and peace
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Very cool, thanks for the humorous little lecture. I am a big fan of this poetry so this was great. I wish i could sign up for the class, but alas funds are tight right now. I am however, going to save this for later reading though. Thanks and peace
Comment Written 21-May-2012
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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I hope to see you in a class some day. Thanks for a great review.
Comment from Chris Tee
Alvin this "On Enjoying Haiku" is an absolutely marvelous and interesting read here old boy. Well done indeed with a bit of info here that can help. I have refered some poets to you already.
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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Alvin this "On Enjoying Haiku" is an absolutely marvelous and interesting read here old boy. Well done indeed with a bit of info here that can help. I have refered some poets to you already.
Comment Written 21-May-2012
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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Thanks, Chris. I appreciate the review Can I interest you in course? I am so subtle...
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Thanks, Chris. I appreciate the review. Can I interest you in course? I am so subtle...
Comment from robina1978
Good morning. I read about Jane Reichhold yesterday. And I know Japanese is so different from English, that the rules of the site should not always stand. Pity if you do it correctly, it won't be allowed by the site. Thanks for sharing this information. A course, no thanks.
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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Good morning. I read about Jane Reichhold yesterday. And I know Japanese is so different from English, that the rules of the site should not always stand. Pity if you do it correctly, it won't be allowed by the site. Thanks for sharing this information. A course, no thanks.
Comment Written 21-May-2012
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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I am not sure what you mean by if one does it correctly, it won't be allowed by the site...one can still write 5/7/5 haiku poems, but they do sound long to the Japanese ear. How are your courses with Brooke going? Thanks for an excellent review.
Comment from MAMONIA
My dear Alvin-san, this is a lovely message
for all of us and a very revealing piece of
you.
I enjoyed reading this and wish haiku were
as simple as senryu. Somehow I have difficulty
with haiku when I think I've done a great job.
Thanks for all this informative stuff. Looking
forward to learning, learning some more.
Your Marie-san
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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My dear Alvin-san, this is a lovely message
for all of us and a very revealing piece of
you.
I enjoyed reading this and wish haiku were
as simple as senryu. Somehow I have difficulty
with haiku when I think I've done a great job.
Thanks for all this informative stuff. Looking
forward to learning, learning some more.
Your Marie-san
Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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Oh, was that you? Thanks for a good reivew on this piece.
Comment from Cindy Warren
complicated poem
designed to drive me crazy
with too many rules
Oops, that's awful, it's not about nature and it shouldn't complain. Who knew the haiku was so complex? Anyway, I think I may have learned something.
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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complicated poem
designed to drive me crazy
with too many rules
Oops, that's awful, it's not about nature and it shouldn't complain. Who knew the haiku was so complex? Anyway, I think I may have learned something.
Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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Thanks for a great review; it's best to think of haiku directives as descriptive and not as rules. Are you thinking of taking the course next month?
Comment from judiverse
Entertaining as well as informative. I enjoyed the humor, especially the references to cockroaches. This will give me a better understanding of haiku. You illustrate the importance of observing nature. Glad I had the chance to read. judiverse
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Entertaining as well as informative. I enjoyed the humor, especially the references to cockroaches. This will give me a better understanding of haiku. You illustrate the importance of observing nature. Glad I had the chance to read. judiverse
Comment Written 09-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Thanks for your kind words.
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Hi, Alvin, you're welcome, and this was a blast from the past. I looked it up and saw my review was November 2011. judiverse
Comment from Jean Lutz
A delightful read. I don't know if I can write or read better haiku, but my lungs got a great early morning work-out. I hope to spend time in your poetic garden this week preparing my own soil to receive the seeds of Religious Texts/Poetry in May.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2011
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A delightful read. I don't know if I can write or read better haiku, but my lungs got a great early morning work-out. I hope to spend time in your poetic garden this week preparing my own soil to receive the seeds of Religious Texts/Poetry in May.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2011
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Thank for a great review; I'll be in touch the first part of next week to set chat times for Religious Texts/Poetry.