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The Japanese Aesthetic

A Lecture

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Comment from honeytree
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I really liked reading your words here Alvin about
"The Japanese Aesthetic."

I find Japanese poetry very peaceful, and like a very small prayer sometimes.

Let me know when you start this program.

Great writing as always.

Honey tree

Annie

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2011


reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
    Thanks for the exceptional review; I am truly appreciative. The course starts the beginning of April and is available for registration now. Just click on Classes on the toolbar above, then click on Available Classes, and then click on Shorter Poetic Forms. I would love to have you in the class.
Comment from Caeric il produttore
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Especially wonderful insight into the Japanese method, for that matter, poetry in general. I always find your writings to be enlightened and wish myself to more lucrative futures when I can afford to take some of your classes.

Il Produttore

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2011


reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
    Thanks. I look forward to you being in one of my classes.
Comment from Gungalo
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Oh I am so glad to see this, Al!!! Yes about your dinner too for it shows your fortitude and adventurous nature combined. One that knows what it likes and likes what it knows.

The haiku info is invaluable and may serve to answer many questions here. Then again, who k nows. LOL. Still would have liked to have seen a bit more on the classic haiku as that is what most here write.

Love the knowledge you have and appreciate to very much your sharing it!!!!

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2011


reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
    Thanks for a good review. If you take my class on Shorter Poetic Forms in April (a shameless promotion here), we shall discuss classical haiku. Actually, they are not necessarily about nature and do not involve a 5/7/5 syllabic structure. (The class is available for registration now.)Thanks again for a great review.
reply by Gungalo on 13-Feb-2011
    It is a wonderful write Al and I'll consider that for all my first teachings on haiku have been blown to tiny little bits here. LOL.
Comment from TheBritsWife
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Hey Teach, Thank you so much for this informative lecture on Japanese short forms! I love the insight you've shared with us. I really believe you've unlocked some of the mysteries that surround our Western perceptions. I'm so glad that more poets will learn that haiku is not simply about counting syllables and thinking up pretty satori lines. This is an extremely in-depth subject, yet you've explained the concept of haiku in terms that are easily understandable. Thanks so much for posting! - Karen :-)

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2011


reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
    Thanks for an exceptional review; I truly appreciate it. Tom wants me to post more classes. I am offering this class again in April--tell your friends! One seat is already filled. I shall probably offer a coures on haiku alone in April. Does that work for you? Thanks again for this exceptional review (Oh, you need to mark the assignment as completed.)
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
    I mean course, of course.
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hi Alvin looks like you are getting ready for your haiku course.
I'm going to print you excellent essay about haiku
And I really like how you uses food to give and perfect example of how and why to write a haiku

I watch the waves flow
seaweed covers the bear rocks
the sun goes down

Gert

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2011


reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
    Thanks for an exceptional review. That's a great posmodern haiku. You could omit the definite articles (the is used three times.) Do you mean bare? Thanks again.
reply by Gert sherwood on 13-Feb-2011

    You are welcome Alvin

    Okay see how it looks and sounds now--

    I watch vast waves flow
    seaweed covers barren rocks
    radiant sun fades

    Gert

reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
    Yes, I like that much better. It is still a postmodern haiku; it has three separate thoughts.
reply by Gert sherwood on 13-Feb-2011
    Thank you Alvin
reply by Gert sherwood on 13-Feb-2011
    Thank you Alvin
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
    Here is a suggestion more in the haiku tradition:

    waves flow; seaweed is
    deposited on bare rocks
    radiant sun fades
Comment from c_lucas
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This is very well written and clears up some of the mystyque in writing Haiku. I appreciate when you post such essays as this one.

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 Comment Written 13-Feb-2011


reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
    Thanks. I truly appreciate this review. This was written for my Short Poetic Forms class. Perhaps you'll consider taking the class in April. It is now available for registration.
reply by c_lucas on 13-Feb-2011
    You're welcome, Alvin. Unfortunately, I am having to save my money for a series of medical tests this spring. Charlie
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
    Thanks for your reply, Charile. I hope the tests go well.
reply by c_lucas on 13-Feb-2011
    All of the are big, and long overdue.
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
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This has to be one of the most informative and well written posts I have read for a long time. I had no idea that haiku and senryu had so much depth and meaning. I always thought it was a couple of lines where the syllable count was the most important. Thank you for sharing this enjoyable piece.

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2011


reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
    Thanks for an exceptional review; I greatly appreciate it. I do teach haiku here on FanStory. I am offering a course called Shorter Poetic Forms in April. It covers haiku, senryu, tanka, and cinquains. Please consider signing up for it; it is now available for registration. I would love to have you in class; you have such an analytic mind!
Comment from Shirley B
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Great job, Alvin. Your writing is always so informative. I want to be in your next class of haiku. I hope it comes at a good time of year for me. As far as I am concerned you are the best when it comes to writing haiku. Thanks for sharing your knowledge, Shirley

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 Comment Written 13-Feb-2011


reply by the author on 13-Feb-2011
    I was just thinking of writing you! I am offering my Shorter Poetic Forms class in April and it is now available for registration. One seat has already filled up, so hurry! (I just released it last night!) Thanks for a great review.