Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Chapter 15; part two"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from N.K. Wagner
I think you've resolved that final conflict well. Of course Joe shouldn't have made any of those decisions by himself, but his job demands that he do those kinds of things (they're called "command decisions"). It's part of his character. Joe would have assigned others to carry out the tasks - that's how things work in his world. He'll need a little retaining to be a less controlling husband, but he's motivated. He'll mess up, but it'll be out of love. Well done. Nancy
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2011
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I think you've resolved that final conflict well. Of course Joe shouldn't have made any of those decisions by himself, but his job demands that he do those kinds of things (they're called "command decisions"). It's part of his character. Joe would have assigned others to carry out the tasks - that's how things work in his world. He'll need a little retaining to be a less controlling husband, but he's motivated. He'll mess up, but it'll be out of love. Well done. Nancy
Comment Written 09-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from nora arjuna
Hi Barb, looks like I came in to read the ending. Sorry I've been held up with other things, work mainly, and haven't got the time to be here reading. Anyway, I'm glad I'm not too late. Well, I think it's quite romantic of Joe to do that. I wouldn't be mad if I were Sara, except for the adoption part. That one he needs to discuss with her.
Congrats on finishing another story. The sixer is for your overall effort. Hope your health has improved. :)
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2011
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Hi Barb, looks like I came in to read the ending. Sorry I've been held up with other things, work mainly, and haven't got the time to be here reading. Anyway, I'm glad I'm not too late. Well, I think it's quite romantic of Joe to do that. I wouldn't be mad if I were Sara, except for the adoption part. That one he needs to discuss with her.
Congrats on finishing another story. The sixer is for your overall effort. Hope your health has improved. :)
Comment Written 09-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2011
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Thank you for your kind reveiw and I always appreciate hearing from you.
Comment from fictionwriter
What a great story. I love the happy ending. I was frightened that Sara would let him walk away, but I'm glad she didn't. Well done.
You heard right on both accounts. Col. Joe Barnes, I love you and I forgive you." She smiled. "But don't make it a habit of making all the decisions. This is the new me. I plan on standing up for myself." (need paragraph break here)
"Believe me, I won't. You've taught me a lesson. I won't make the same mistake twice." He closed his eyes and took a deep breath. "Would you like to go bowling?"
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2011
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What a great story. I love the happy ending. I was frightened that Sara would let him walk away, but I'm glad she didn't. Well done.
You heard right on both accounts. Col. Joe Barnes, I love you and I forgive you." She smiled. "But don't make it a habit of making all the decisions. This is the new me. I plan on standing up for myself." (need paragraph break here)
"Believe me, I won't. You've taught me a lesson. I won't make the same mistake twice." He closed his eyes and took a deep breath. "Would you like to go bowling?"
Comment Written 08-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Scornwell
I thought this was as well written as usual. The characters remain strong and the dialog continues to sound realistic and seem natural for the characters. Nice ending.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2011
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I thought this was as well written as usual. The characters remain strong and the dialog continues to sound realistic and seem natural for the characters. Nice ending.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from eliz100
This was a great read from beginning to end, as usual. Is this really the end of the book. I will miss reading it in installments.
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This was a great read from beginning to end, as usual. Is this really the end of the book. I will miss reading it in installments.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from vtsfic
I like the way you intermingle your dialogue with action. There does seem to be an awful lot of dialogue here. Maybe you can break it up with some introspection and reflection. Your sentence structure is fine, by the way. I don't really have any corrections or changes to show you.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2011
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I like the way you intermingle your dialogue with action. There does seem to be an awful lot of dialogue here. Maybe you can break it up with some introspection and reflection. Your sentence structure is fine, by the way. I don't really have any corrections or changes to show you.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I prefer to use dialogue because it shows and doesn't tell the story.
Comment from ejebb1951
Yipee!!!!!I just knew it. I am so happy. I love it and I was right there with the happy couple. I needed an ending like this on this chilly morning. Whew!! You've just made my day GF. This is great. Thank you.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2011
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Yipee!!!!!I just knew it. I am so happy. I love it and I was right there with the happy couple. I needed an ending like this on this chilly morning. Whew!! You've just made my day GF. This is great. Thank you.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words.
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You are so welcome Barbara. Edie
Comment from jmshumate
Very well written. I have a feeling Joe is in for a rude awaking after he marries this girl. She really has him wrapped around her finger. I guess that is what makes the world go round though. Good work on capturing a realistic scene between two a man and woman, pre-married.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2011
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Very well written. I have a feeling Joe is in for a rude awaking after he marries this girl. She really has him wrapped around her finger. I guess that is what makes the world go round though. Good work on capturing a realistic scene between two a man and woman, pre-married.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I believe you are right about Sara.
Comment from wiskas677@yandex.ru
I like your work. I like the tension between the two characters. I like the fact that a Lt.Col would take charge...my uncle Paul is a Lt.Col.Rtd and gives orders as naturally as breathing. Good job.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2011
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I like your work. I like the tension between the two characters. I like the fact that a Lt.Col would take charge...my uncle Paul is a Lt.Col.Rtd and gives orders as naturally as breathing. Good job.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2011
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Thank you for your kind review,
Comment from Gungalo
Oh you've made my night girl, she said yes. And of course he had to do it all in grand style. I loved this story and reading it. You did a splendid job of it and considering the difficulties you had along the way, you deserve a wonderful final ranking for all your efforts. Just wonderfully told and penned. Congratulations on its completion!!!
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2011
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Oh you've made my night girl, she said yes. And of course he had to do it all in grand style. I loved this story and reading it. You did a splendid job of it and considering the difficulties you had along the way, you deserve a wonderful final ranking for all your efforts. Just wonderfully told and penned. Congratulations on its completion!!!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and encouraging remarks.