Ice Skating
Ampeletum15 total reviews
Comment from Magics02
I admire this poem for I admire the skaters. It is also for me a calming feeling to watch them so gracefully slide across the ice. I could not make out the picture to associate with words. Perhaps it was the sequins?
I admire this just the same and think you did a wonderful job as the image came to my mind as I read this.
Blessings
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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I admire this poem for I admire the skaters. It is also for me a calming feeling to watch them so gracefully slide across the ice. I could not make out the picture to associate with words. Perhaps it was the sequins?
I admire this just the same and think you did a wonderful job as the image came to my mind as I read this.
Blessings
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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I love skating and used to skate. Now that I am disabled of course I can't,but watching others puts me into a trance. It is like nothing else in the world matters when I watch skating. Thank you for the kind review. I may write this as a non-fiction as there was just so much I had to leave out to put it into poetry form. Debbie
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Yes you do that Debbie. I would love to read this further. I too am in a trance watching them glide and flow so graciously alot of hard work for sure. xoxox
Comment from Mustang Patty
The ampeletum is a challenging form because the six syllables fill up fast! Your poem manages to keep the reader focused on your words and simply feel the flow. Well done. ~patty~
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The ampeletum is a challenging form because the six syllables fill up fast! Your poem manages to keep the reader focused on your words and simply feel the flow. Well done. ~patty~
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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Yes they do. I was surprised at hoe few words it actually took. Thanks for the review! Debbie
Comment from moyramouse
I enjoyed this poem, your rhythm seemed to mimic the skater's movements on the ice. Perhaps in stanza 3 you could choose a stronger verb than makes e.g. drives. I love to read this form of poem, the rhyme scheme is very satisfying as you so ably demonstrate. The alliteration and sibilant sounds throughout give the hiss of skates on ice. Lovely! x moyramouse
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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I enjoyed this poem, your rhythm seemed to mimic the skater's movements on the ice. Perhaps in stanza 3 you could choose a stronger verb than makes e.g. drives. I love to read this form of poem, the rhyme scheme is very satisfying as you so ably demonstrate. The alliteration and sibilant sounds throughout give the hiss of skates on ice. Lovely! x moyramouse
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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I appreciate you taking time to read and review.Debbie
Comment from CodyJack
Beautiful poem with that artwork too. I think you did great with imagery and detail so that the reader felt like they were there with you and watching this one skate. Great poem. Your friend, Cody
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Beautiful poem with that artwork too. I think you did great with imagery and detail so that the reader felt like they were there with you and watching this one skate. Great poem. Your friend, Cody
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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Thank you somuch for the kind review.Debbie
Comment from Gungalo
You did great with this one, girl. Love ice skaters and used to watch them all the tme before I threw out my television. LOL. Awesome imagery here you. Can see her now!!!
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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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You did great with this one, girl. Love ice skaters and used to watch them all the tme before I threw out my television. LOL. Awesome imagery here you. Can see her now!!!
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Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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Thank you for you kind review!Have a good evening. Debbie
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My pleasure Debbie. You enjoy your evening too!!!