Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "Chapter 14; part two"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from Paula Andrea Pyle
What a wonderfully composed and written romantic love story! All of the elements are tucked in the right places. It's tight, tense, sweet and endearingly alluring.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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What a wonderfully composed and written romantic love story! All of the elements are tucked in the right places. It's tight, tense, sweet and endearingly alluring.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
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Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
The post looks fine to me, in fact it works very well and the reservations Sarah is expressing are realistic ones I think most of us can identify with.
Well done, I hope the chemo doesn't take much more out of you!
Patrick
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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Hi Barbara,
The post looks fine to me, in fact it works very well and the reservations Sarah is expressing are realistic ones I think most of us can identify with.
Well done, I hope the chemo doesn't take much more out of you!
Patrick
Comment Written 19-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Tellis
"You're right. I don't want you to (unnecessarily worry)."
I was thinking that these two words should be reversed. Just my opinion though. Excellent chapter.
Tellis
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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"You're right. I don't want you to (unnecessarily worry)."
I was thinking that these two words should be reversed. Just my opinion though. Excellent chapter.
Tellis
Comment Written 19-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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You may have a point. I will check it out. Thank you for your eagle eye.
Comment from Ted T
Hi Barbara :)
Good chapter with nice dialogue exchanges. There's a sense of winding down which is okay you're reaching the ending.
[interrupted Sara.] -- You don't need the tag. The "M"-dash is an interrupt.
The chapter does seem a bit "fluffy" but that's the way of most formula romance.
I look forward to the closing.
Ted
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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Hi Barbara :)
Good chapter with nice dialogue exchanges. There's a sense of winding down which is okay you're reaching the ending.
[interrupted Sara.] -- You don't need the tag. The "M"-dash is an interrupt.
The chapter does seem a bit "fluffy" but that's the way of most formula romance.
I look forward to the closing.
Ted
Comment Written 19-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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I thought I corrected that, I will get on it right away. Thank you for your review.
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Okay :)
Good luck with your ending.
Ted
Comment from Warrior Priestess
Thank you for the short background info so that someone like me who is totally new to the story can fill in and carry on with the story. Excellent dialogue. One can just picture the date, natural, easy give and take. You have a true gift with writing. And to do all this and be going through chemo too? Goodness knows many people in that situation can hardly go through the basic motions of a day and you write an outstanding piece. I trust that your writing energizes you. Keep up the good work and I hope your treatments are successful.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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Thank you for the short background info so that someone like me who is totally new to the story can fill in and carry on with the story. Excellent dialogue. One can just picture the date, natural, easy give and take. You have a true gift with writing. And to do all this and be going through chemo too? Goodness knows many people in that situation can hardly go through the basic motions of a day and you write an outstanding piece. I trust that your writing energizes you. Keep up the good work and I hope your treatments are successful.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and encouragement.
Comment from Gungalo
Oh I wish she would just give in and get married to him. He's a great guy and I know she loves him, just been independent for too long, me thinks. I agree with the strawberries for an opener girl!!! Love this story but have missed a few.
Hope you are doing well!!!
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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Oh I wish she would just give in and get married to him. He's a great guy and I know she loves him, just been independent for too long, me thinks. I agree with the strawberries for an opener girl!!! Love this story but have missed a few.
Hope you are doing well!!!
Comment Written 18-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
I'm sorry you are not feeling well. You are in my thoughts and prayers. This is a good chapter-I see no major concerns. Take it easy. I've had many blood transfusions and they aren't all that bad. They can make you feel much better within a matter of hours. Debbie
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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I'm sorry you are not feeling well. You are in my thoughts and prayers. This is a good chapter-I see no major concerns. Take it easy. I've had many blood transfusions and they aren't all that bad. They can make you feel much better within a matter of hours. Debbie
Comment Written 18-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. You may be right, the thought of a blood transfusion is scary.
Comment from BethShelby
I didn't see any errors. It looks like things are going well for this pair. Whatever Sara has Joe has an answer for it. This is mostly dialogue but it isn't hard to tell which character is speaking. You story is very interesting and upbeat at this point. I'm sorry the chemo is making you tired. Hopefully the added iron will kick in and do the job of bringing the energy levels up.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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I didn't see any errors. It looks like things are going well for this pair. Whatever Sara has Joe has an answer for it. This is mostly dialogue but it isn't hard to tell which character is speaking. You story is very interesting and upbeat at this point. I'm sorry the chemo is making you tired. Hopefully the added iron will kick in and do the job of bringing the energy levels up.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from animatqua
This chapter echos the work in the others. It picks up the story well, and leaves the reader with questions at the end.
Other than that, I'm hoping your iron issues don't stomp on you too badly.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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This chapter echos the work in the others. It picks up the story well, and leaves the reader with questions at the end.
Other than that, I'm hoping your iron issues don't stomp on you too badly.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from JW
Hmm. While in a way I can understand Sara viewpoint, I personally think she is making too much of a deal out of it.
You did a good job. This was an excellent addition to your story.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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Hmm. While in a way I can understand Sara viewpoint, I personally think she is making too much of a deal out of it.
You did a good job. This was an excellent addition to your story.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.