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Another Pretty Face

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Can love survive small town gossip?

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Comment from patmedium
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I'd love too, but I need to speak with your mom
[I'd love to,]

Great ... nicely fraught with tension, dear. I've gotta fly ... getting the house readfy for an invalide ... with luck, I'll have him back in about thirty hours. xxx

 Comment Written 30-Dec-2010


reply by the author on 30-Dec-2010
    Good. I hope things work out for you. My prayers are with you.
Comment from Rama Rao
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A Fine chapter which made absorbing reading. However, I failed to understand Sara's sudden fear of Joe. How could she forget what all he had done for her and her daughter. If that involved some violence she has to accept it. A job in a task force and a carrer in the Army go with a knd of violence. She should have known that before starting a relationship with Joe. What was the pint of rasing it at this late stage? Do you have a twist in the tale coming in the next xhapter?

 Comment Written 30-Dec-2010


reply by the author on 30-Dec-2010
    We shall see if I have a twist or not. There is a difference in knowing something and once your faced with it truly knowing it. Sara is now faces with having to accept it.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
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It's amazing what different perspectives and failure to complete communications will do. I keep thinking if they'd just finish their conversation

Matt walked over [to] Cassie's bed,

"You allow your wife to be a secret agent, so you must hire women. Are there many women agents?["]

"Hi[,] Cassie, I'm glad you're out of the

Have you tried batting[] yet?"

"Hello[] to you too. I moved it to the table so I could put your clean laundry in it without

"Now that Cassie's safely home[,] we can work on our relationship."

Frustrated, Joe picked up the bag. "Here[,] look."

Roberta

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2010


reply by the author on 30-Dec-2010
    Thank you for your kind review and I will take a look at those areas of conern.
Comment from marym224
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Another interesting episode, Barbara.I think poor communcation can be held responsible for a lot of problems between people, groups, even countries. But none can deny that it is a masterful device when used in story-telling. Joe and Sara's relationship is left with a cliff-hanger again, which is good, and I will certainly look forward to reading more. Happy New Year.

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2010


reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
    I agree lack of communication causes all sorts of problems. Thank you for the kind review and words of wisdom.
Comment from write hand blue
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I award you 5 stars for a well writen story..... Writen with feeling and well executed word flow.....Kind regards ..Mel.

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2010


reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Nylsaj
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I must confess I have not reviewed a chapter in a book for a long time, especially fiction, therefore the beginning was a bit fuzzy. I wanted to go to the start of the book and begin from there. As I continued reading the recent events began to unfold with the rescue of the main character. This soon became integrated with the relational aspects of life. I soon find myself enraptured with what could be a typical authentic scene. At the end of the chapter I began to have a severe thirst of finding what will happen next.
This is what excellent writers do time and time again. You become addicted to their writing and you just can't wait to pickup their next book. Excellent work.

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2010


reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from sizemore0409
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I enjoyed reading this engaging story-segment, which was crafted quite well, grabbing and maintaining the reader's interest from start to finish. The thoughts, emotions, action, character-depictions and interactions, descriptions and dialogue all flowed quite nicely through a seamless time-line. Good job! Andy

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2010


reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from bowls
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Glad to see Cassie's safe, but problems with her mom and Joe. Oh, dear, I do hope they end up together! Nice job, once again. Just one little thing: Matt walked over Cassie's bed. That would be a bit messy! Hope all's going well with you.

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2010


reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
    Thank you for your kind review. I will recheck that area.
Comment from nora arjuna
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hi, barb. like joe, i could be losing patience with sara too, lol. i find her a bit childish, but that's the character you want her to be. :)

just a couple of observation:

Joe peeked into Cassie's hospital room before the morning light [entered the sky]. - i thought that phrase sounds a bit odd. how about 'illuminated' or 'lit up the sky'?

He grinned as he watched Sara asleep in a chair - how about 'smiled' instead? unless he thought it was a funny scene he had to grin.


Matt should be here by the time she's released, we'll ask," he teased.



 Comment Written 29-Dec-2010


reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
    Thank you for your eagle eye. I will look at those areas.
Comment from CodyJack
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I need to read more chapters because this held my interest from start to finish. Very interesting story. The imagery and word usage is very good. Keep up the nice writing. Your friend, Cody

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2010


reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
    Thank you for your kind review.