An Ordinary Life
Reflections in free verse36 total reviews
Comment from Arkine
Hmmm, a very good point. A lot of us do long for more, more what? Money? Fame? Friends? Adventure? We tend to overlook the ordinary activities that we are gifted with. Spoiled, we forget how hard things once were. How simply surviving was and extraodinary feat. And, if our lives were different, if they were everything we imagined them to be, would we miss opportunities that don't come up in extraordinary lives? Nicely done!
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Hmmm, a very good point. A lot of us do long for more, more what? Money? Fame? Friends? Adventure? We tend to overlook the ordinary activities that we are gifted with. Spoiled, we forget how hard things once were. How simply surviving was and extraodinary feat. And, if our lives were different, if they were everything we imagined them to be, would we miss opportunities that don't come up in extraordinary lives? Nicely done!
Comment Written 24-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Arkine, once again thank you so very very much.I am actually enjoying this type of writing..free verse that is..it is just so much fun..jimi
Comment from mtngalofnc
Hi jimi,
Isn't it wonderful that we all are able in our ordinary lives to have those extraordinary moments when time stands still and is specifically special for us. These are the things I thought of as I read your poem. I love how you have shared these special times with us in your extraordinary poetry. Good job and thank you for sharing.
Becky
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Hi jimi,
Isn't it wonderful that we all are able in our ordinary lives to have those extraordinary moments when time stands still and is specifically special for us. These are the things I thought of as I read your poem. I love how you have shared these special times with us in your extraordinary poetry. Good job and thank you for sharing.
Becky
Comment Written 23-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Becky, once again thank you so very very much. I am always humbled by your reviews, humbled, I instantly thought of you as I was writing this poem. You do have an extraordinary blessed life..again thank you.jimi
Comment from JeJo
jlsavell, I love how you take the ordinary, put your spin to it, and out comes something extraordinary. Here you present so many "normal" events in life, the normal and regular emotions, in such a poetic manner. Very beautiful. I feel that some places could crossover to the spiritual realm, (such as: In the dawn of my ordinary life where the sun rises to birth my run), while you are describing the everyday occurrences of your life. You have really opened your life to us readers. Lovely word choices and alliteration. You make everything sound so beautiful, regardless if it is ordinary. I think that everyone has something extraordinary in their lives. Most people probably think their lives ordinary. I know I would. But when a few extraordinary people or things come into our lives, it changes our whole way of thinking, of living. I like the progression of your day, from dawn to dusk. The descriptions are amazing, as I could be in every place you describe. I love the repetition of the ordinary/extraordinary. Here are some of my favorite lines: "In the serenity of a magnificent sunset in my ordinary life, a new found freedom emerges, where time is not of essence and unpredictable predictability was not to be expected" and "Now in the untroubled still twilight of my rather ordinary life I found I had possessed something, something rather extraordinary." Beautiful picture, and lovely work. - JeJo
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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jlsavell, I love how you take the ordinary, put your spin to it, and out comes something extraordinary. Here you present so many "normal" events in life, the normal and regular emotions, in such a poetic manner. Very beautiful. I feel that some places could crossover to the spiritual realm, (such as: In the dawn of my ordinary life where the sun rises to birth my run), while you are describing the everyday occurrences of your life. You have really opened your life to us readers. Lovely word choices and alliteration. You make everything sound so beautiful, regardless if it is ordinary. I think that everyone has something extraordinary in their lives. Most people probably think their lives ordinary. I know I would. But when a few extraordinary people or things come into our lives, it changes our whole way of thinking, of living. I like the progression of your day, from dawn to dusk. The descriptions are amazing, as I could be in every place you describe. I love the repetition of the ordinary/extraordinary. Here are some of my favorite lines: "In the serenity of a magnificent sunset in my ordinary life, a new found freedom emerges, where time is not of essence and unpredictable predictability was not to be expected" and "Now in the untroubled still twilight of my rather ordinary life I found I had possessed something, something rather extraordinary." Beautiful picture, and lovely work. - JeJo
Comment Written 23-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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JeJo, I apologize for just responding.I have so much catching up to do. Your reviews mean a lot to me. You always have so much to say and so much insight. It tells me you truly read and take in and appreciate.. again thank you so much..jlsavell
Comment from RKagan
It is true that the most ordinary things are quite often the most extrodinary. I enjoyed your poem and share your sentiment. It is well written. good job
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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It is true that the most ordinary things are quite often the most extrodinary. I enjoyed your poem and share your sentiment. It is well written. good job
Comment Written 23-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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RKagan, thank you so very much. I am thrilled you enjoyed this poem. I apologize for just responding..jlsavell
Comment from honeytree
I think life would have been fantastic here living this "ordinary life."
I loved the way how the everyday things we do within our lives were written. I loved the kettle that whistles, the birds singing and the list of many happenings within ones day.
I certainly loved the last few words after meeting an extraordinary man and life was more extraordinary than ordinary held.
Honey tree
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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I think life would have been fantastic here living this "ordinary life."
I loved the way how the everyday things we do within our lives were written. I loved the kettle that whistles, the birds singing and the list of many happenings within ones day.
I certainly loved the last few words after meeting an extraordinary man and life was more extraordinary than ordinary held.
Honey tree
Comment Written 23-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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honeytree, I apologize for just responding to this review. thank you so very much for stopping by to read this offering...jlsavell
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I am glad you liked the review. I enjoyed reading your words.
Honey tree
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I am glad you liked the review. I enjoyed reading them.
Honey tree
Comment from seewhatimwritingnow
Lovely poem, but I feel the 'extraordinary-ordinary' goes just a bit too far? The reader is stumped at what you are calling an 'ordinary' like that keeps changing to 'extraordinary'.. I think it would read better if you ran thought all of the 'ordinary' things of your 'ordinary' life- rounding up, at the end, finally, that you discover your life is 'extraordinary' ? Well written and beautiful messages, just too my 'ordinary/extraordinary' switching all throughout. Thanks for sharing. Betty
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Lovely poem, but I feel the 'extraordinary-ordinary' goes just a bit too far? The reader is stumped at what you are calling an 'ordinary' like that keeps changing to 'extraordinary'.. I think it would read better if you ran thought all of the 'ordinary' things of your 'ordinary' life- rounding up, at the end, finally, that you discover your life is 'extraordinary' ? Well written and beautiful messages, just too my 'ordinary/extraordinary' switching all throughout. Thanks for sharing. Betty
Comment Written 23-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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seewhatinwritingnow, now that is a pen name. I apologize for just responding to your comments and review. I havetaekn your suggestions into consideration. I appreciate the time you took to critique so throughly. again thank you so very very much..jlsavell
Comment from Twomoon
ok, I loved this one, it made the reader touch your heart and life using ordinary means!! smile..nothing ordinary about the way you put this one together! I adored the verses using parts of the day to transcend your most precious moments and how each day captures that ordinary day and turns it into daily messages that hold an extraordinary life enriched in daily blessings!! How beautiful are you, my dear friend!! loved it and your extraordinary way you write and view the world! much love twomoon
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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ok, I loved this one, it made the reader touch your heart and life using ordinary means!! smile..nothing ordinary about the way you put this one together! I adored the verses using parts of the day to transcend your most precious moments and how each day captures that ordinary day and turns it into daily messages that hold an extraordinary life enriched in daily blessings!! How beautiful are you, my dear friend!! loved it and your extraordinary way you write and view the world! much love twomoon
Comment Written 23-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Twomooon, once again I must apologize. thank you so very very much for such an exceptional review. You compliments of my work and I simply humble me..again thank you so very very much..jlsavell
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, a beautiful poem about the things we held most precious coming back in memories and reminding us that we had better things and better things are yet to come. spag alert. dreams at the altar, not alter
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, a beautiful poem about the things we held most precious coming back in memories and reminding us that we had better things and better things are yet to come. spag alert. dreams at the altar, not alter
Comment Written 23-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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sweetwoodjax, once again thank you so very much. thank you thank you.. I must look into your portfolio..I spend little time on the site, so catching up is a challenge for me..again thank you..jlsavell
Comment from grassroots08
Hidden behind the folds of our lives, in the corners of each ordinary day, lie ready waiting moments to discover. This was well penned and led me deeply into your living spaces. Thanks for sharing so much of yourself and family. Cheers, Don
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Hidden behind the folds of our lives, in the corners of each ordinary day, lie ready waiting moments to discover. This was well penned and led me deeply into your living spaces. Thanks for sharing so much of yourself and family. Cheers, Don
Comment Written 22-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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Don, thank you so very much. I apologize for just responding to this review. I know you know how it is.. now you go take on the day..jimi
Comment from donnadiann
This is a nice poem that compares ordinary that really is extraordinary. I like how you bring in the joys of your life - your family and the brilliant way worded when they left. Blessings to you and yours.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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This is a nice poem that compares ordinary that really is extraordinary. I like how you bring in the joys of your life - your family and the brilliant way worded when they left. Blessings to you and yours.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2010
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donnadiann, thank you so very much for such wonderful comments and review. I apologize for just responding to you..jlsavell