Comment from colin

Excellent

Well well well,what a cheeky piece;and I mean your writing as well as the photograph.
Knowing where you were when you took your shot leaves my mind bobbled,a touch of voyeurism maybe!Certainly opportunistic!!I like your 'catch',and your words suggest no harm done.
A good attempt at omitting the letter 's' and I hope you do well in the prompt competition,good luck....Colin.

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2009

Thanks Colin. Yes, very opportunistic and resourceful am I. LOL. Thanks for a wonderful review. - Thesis

Comment from dportwood

Excellent

Thesis,

Terrific job of avoiding the letter 's' and giving the reader a clear mental picture in title, artwork, and word art - all three.

Duane

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2009

Thanks Duane. The picture kind of brings it all to life. Visuals like that are quite inspiring. - Thesis

Comment from empire76

Excellent

It is often interesting how a good writer can make you not realise something is missing - like the Ss. Good job with the contest. At least she wasn't offended of your character would probably not be sharing the story.

Empi

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2009

Thanks Empi. You're right, my character loved the photo and actually posed for it. I'm glad you liked the story. It was a challenge without being able to use "s". - Thesis

Comment from epereira

Excellent

Thank you for writing something that gets internal ideas moving.
sounds very much like something that would be based on experience, it brought me"there".
thank you.

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2009

It was based on experience, and what an unforgettable experience it was. Kinda like having all the stars aligned, LOL. I'm glad the story sparked some ideas. - Thesis

Comment from Lynne

Excellent

Wow! Good job! Did that take long? I'm impressed! I think that you are doing a dis-service to yourself by labeling this with strong sexual content. Good write! Lynne~

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2009

Thanks Lynne. Actually, Tom changed it to the Mature category and sent me a note about it. The picture I think was the reason he wanted the category changed.

Thanks for your great review. I'm glad you liked the story. - Thesis

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I didn't miss the "s's" at all, as I was too busy imaging the view and glancing at the perfect picture accompaniment. I liked the "knowing glance" that makes the whole episode more provocative. Well done.

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2009

Thanks Joan, Yes that look said it all. It was very provocative and so sexy. I'll never forget it. I think that's what made it so special. - Thesis

Comment from Judian James

Excellent

Whoa! Did you take the photo? My goodness, now provocative! Well you managed to write a short piece that tells it like it is with no "s"s!! well done, bad boy.

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2009

Yes, actually a neighbor came over and read some of my stories, like she does every week-end. She left suddenly, saying: "I'll be right back," Within ten minutes, she was in my office, in the blue thong, asking if I wanted to use her picture as a visual.

What could I say? - LOL. It was a memorable Saturday. - Thesis

reply by Judian James on 12-Jul-2009

Sounds like your neighbor is quite neighborly!!

Comment from sibhus

Excellent

Great job putting this together with out S's. I had to laugh, bad dog, bad dog. Aren't we all add times. Nice piece the scene come across really well through your words and the picture only helped it along. I really enjoyed this, it gave me a chuckle.

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2009

LOL. Yes, bad dog is appropriate.

It was an unforgettable moment to say the least. Thanks for reviewing and your comments. - Thesis

Comment from darkgreennights

Excellent

Veeerrry nice lol. You packed a lot of sexy parking lot imagery into that short poem. I could almost feel the hot asphalt underneath their feet and the hotter glare from their eyes. Good work.

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2009

Thank you. Yes, she was quite hot. It's the kind of thing that happens once in a lifetime (more if you've been good).

I appreciate your comments and the great review. - Thesis

Comment from findingmyroom

Excellent

Well, this scenario can make the day more interesting! Nice flash fiction piece. I can envision a whole series of these little stories like pearls in a bracelet, little bits of voyeurism you could string together.

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2009

Now that is something to think about. What a hot little bracelet that would be. - Thesis

reply by findingmyroom on 12-Jul-2009

Indeed. 0:-)