Pup Tent Love
tasteful, aesthetic eroticism16 total reviews
Comment from Scarlettdreams
Is this a true story Alvin? This seems like a difficult form to attempt, and like always you make it look easy. smiles. Bravo Bravo
reply by Anonymous Member on 10-Jun-2008
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Is this a true story Alvin? This seems like a difficult form to attempt, and like always you make it look easy. smiles. Bravo Bravo
Comment Written 10-Jun-2008
reply by Anonymous Member on 10-Jun-2008
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No, and this is one of the most difficult historically true forms there are (the paradelle, which is harder, was created by someone as a joke.) It's not true but I wish it were! Thanks for a great review.
Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea
well...i'll say job well done and then perhaps go and take a cold shower...very scorching stuff here alvin. you're like me in that you can write about Jesus in one poem and turn around do something entirely the opposite in your next creation.
very well done.
penny
reply by Anonymous Member on 10-Jun-2008
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well...i'll say job well done and then perhaps go and take a cold shower...very scorching stuff here alvin. you're like me in that you can write about Jesus in one poem and turn around do something entirely the opposite in your next creation.
very well done.
penny
Comment Written 10-Jun-2008
reply by Anonymous Member on 10-Jun-2008
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Yes, we are well integrated people, don't you think? Thanks for a great review.
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yes, i think so.
penny
Comment from Judian James
Very provocative and passionate Al. I love the way you introduce me, a novice to poetry, to all these new and different forms. Your poem is very erotic and beautifully stated with much emotion throughout. Clever title as well. Very well done. The photo was stunning. A friend of yours??
reply by Anonymous Member on 10-Jun-2008
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Very provocative and passionate Al. I love the way you introduce me, a novice to poetry, to all these new and different forms. Your poem is very erotic and beautifully stated with much emotion throughout. Clever title as well. Very well done. The photo was stunning. A friend of yours??
Comment Written 10-Jun-2008
reply by Anonymous Member on 10-Jun-2008
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No, I found that on FanArtReview. But the guy who is the model in the haiga you bookmarked ("inside the cabin") IS a very good friend of mine. Thanks for a great review.
Comment from babylonia
definitely an intense piece. lots of good erotica without it being pornographic. always nice. easy to read and follow. no spaggies do i see. imagery is excellent. the picture is good as well. stanzas are well written. keep up the good work~
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2008
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definitely an intense piece. lots of good erotica without it being pornographic. always nice. easy to read and follow. no spaggies do i see. imagery is excellent. the picture is good as well. stanzas are well written. keep up the good work~
Comment Written 10-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2008
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Thanks. you "caught" the tone I wanted to convey. Thanks also for a good review.
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LOL it did make an impact. i have seen two pornographic movies i liked. both had the same thing going ... it was more about the actual story than the sex. i see the same here. it is about the story. sex is the side line. good job.
barbara
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Well, what were the names of the movies?
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LOL one was a film about these gamblers in new orleans in the 1800s. they were trying to win a virgin. the other one escapes me for the minute. the one with the virgin, i saw in 1990.
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LOL one was a film about these gamblers in new orleans in the 1800s. they were trying to win a virgin. the other one escapes me for the minute. the one with the virgin, i saw in 1990.
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LOL one was a film about these gamblers in new orleans in the 1800s. they were trying to win a virgin. the other one escapes me for the minute. the one with the virgin, i saw in 1990.
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LOL one was a film about these gamblers in new orleans in the 1800s. they were trying to win a virgin. the other one escapes me for the minute. the one with the virgin, i saw in 1990.
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Well, I would enjoy the NOLA part....
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i wouldn't mind seeing it again myself. it was funny watching all those men playing cards and drinking hard. at the end, it was between a sixty something man and one in his early thirties, maybe late twenties. the old man actually won but he gave the girl to the younger man. during the game, the young woman kept opening and closing her legs and playing with a strand of pearls. the older man said he was done with the cards and already done in his pants. that was hilarious to me.
Comment from honeytree
Pup Tent Love.
The presentation was fine.
Very hot words here Alvin. I liked the way how you have written your words and how they combined to form your poem.
Great work.
honeytree.
honeytree
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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2008
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Pup Tent Love.
The presentation was fine.
Very hot words here Alvin. I liked the way how you have written your words and how they combined to form your poem.
Great work.
honeytree.
honeytree
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Comment Written 10-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2008
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Thanks for a great review.
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I am so glad you liked this review. Keep the good work up.
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I am glad you liked this review.I am glad to help you always. honeytree.
Comment from Gypsymooncat
This was tastefully done I thought. I enjoyed the subtlety within the lines of it, and yet the combination of that subtlety with a real excitement of the "first time". I saw this also as an experimental write about the purity, yet oft-times fumbling, of virginal sex-play. I found this enjoyable for its structure and content, but also for its diversion away from the usual written erotica. Well said Alvin xoxoxo
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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2008
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This was tastefully done I thought. I enjoyed the subtlety within the lines of it, and yet the combination of that subtlety with a real excitement of the "first time". I saw this also as an experimental write about the purity, yet oft-times fumbling, of virginal sex-play. I found this enjoyable for its structure and content, but also for its diversion away from the usual written erotica. Well said Alvin xoxoxo
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Comment Written 09-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2008
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Yes, that innocence and purity and a proper coming of age sexually is exactly what I wanted to portray. You are very astute. Thanks for a great review.