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The Devil Fights Back

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Challenges in the pharmaceutical field

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Comment from Ric Myworld
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I like how you use the family times to slow the pace on all the things we know are happening in the background. When in reality, the dip situation is the forefront, and the family happenings are the background. And of course, you still let a little of Marie's unlikeable side show through.
Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2025


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
    Thanks, Ric. A couple more chapters of Marie's development, then it's back to the action with Dipraxa. Her part in the story really grew with the telling, and I didn't anticipate when I started writing it how much time I would devote to it, but her role becomes quite important by the end as it turns out.
reply by Ric Myworld on 18-Jan-2025
    I figured there was a reason you kept going back to her and her role might grow. Have a wonderful weekend!
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
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Dana is well meaning but overzealous; can we compare her actions here to stealing the golf suit? Always wanting to take charge and be out in front of the rest, even if it means cheating a little.

I love the Walter White sweatshirt! I watched that show two times through, even thought it was better the second time around. And I watched Saul, who was my favorite character from 'Breaking Bad'. I always felt he was really a damn good lawyer in an unfortunate circumstance.

Damn, if I don't like Marie more every time I read about her. She and I could be friends, I love sarcasm and women who speak their mind.

A good chapter, Jim.

xo

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2025


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
    Thanks, Pam. Yes, a tiger can't really change its stripes completely. Dana may have developed some morals, but her personality is still much the same as in earlier stories.

    Breaking Bad and Better Call Saul are probably my two favorite series of all time. We've watched each one several times. I agree with you about Jimmy McGill--excellent lawyer if he didn't always get in his own way.

    Marie really grew on me too as I developed her character. I'll be exploring her a great deal more in the next two chapters, which are devoted entirely to her.
reply by Pam Lonsdale on 18-Jan-2025
    Yea! More Marie!!
Comment from Karen Cherry
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Very well done. This moves along very well, it has a good flow. What is your weather like there? All our snow melted off, but Tammy says more is coming.:-( Karen



 Comment Written 18-Jan-2025


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
    Thanks, Karen. The calm before the storm here in NC. Supposed to get really cold next week. That means the cat will have to stay indoors, and he will be bugging me all day to let him out.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
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I really enjoyed how your story kept me on the edge of my seat! Your characters feel real. And I can picture the whole scene with Johnny. You did a great job making me care about what happens next - even with all the challenges Fran is facing. Keep up the amazing work!

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 Comment Written 18-Jan-2025


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
    Thanks very much, Michael. This will end up being an ethical dilemma for Fran, and I think she'll always wonder if the ends justify the means.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
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I think Fran would give a lot of thought to dropping Dana altogether - more trouble that she would be worth.
Thanks for the *Heisenberg note. I was lost. Never saw 'Breaking Bad'.
Nice chapter. I still can't imagine Brian and Julia building this house, though. (smiley face of a poor man)
Have you read Patrick Bernardy's piece on reviewing?
Best wishes.

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 Comment Written 18-Jan-2025


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
    We'll see if Dana gets the message from Fran to cool it or if she's just paying lip service to it.

    No, I hadn't read Patrick's piece, but I did once you mentioned it. I thought it was really good. Thanks for mentioning it.