The Immortal Life of War
A dialogue only short story16 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this dialogue only contest entry with us. Yes, many of our soldiers probably have a similar conversation when they return. We, as a nation, don't do enough for them. Thank you for highlighting this. Good luck with the contest.
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Thank you for sharing this dialogue only contest entry with us. Yes, many of our soldiers probably have a similar conversation when they return. We, as a nation, don't do enough for them. Thank you for highlighting this. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2025
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This story is what so many soldiers carry with them throughout their life. It's no wonder many commit suicide. I can't imagine what it must be like to carry that little memory sitting on a shoulder reminding the soldier what he did. But that's what it's like. Soldiers are trained to do such things, if they didn't it might be them face down in the dirt. War is not nice. This is a very well written story. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xxx
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This story is what so many soldiers carry with them throughout their life. It's no wonder many commit suicide. I can't imagine what it must be like to carry that little memory sitting on a shoulder reminding the soldier what he did. But that's what it's like. Soldiers are trained to do such things, if they didn't it might be them face down in the dirt. War is not nice. This is a very well written story. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 14-Jan-2025
Comment from marilyn quillen
so heartbreaking and so devastating to so many lives, the little girl actually probably got thru it the easiest, it was done, over. the soldier on the other hand had to relive it all the days of his life, so sad. you are a heck of a storyteller tho, I felt everything he was going thru, great job
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so heartbreaking and so devastating to so many lives, the little girl actually probably got thru it the easiest, it was done, over. the soldier on the other hand had to relive it all the days of his life, so sad. you are a heck of a storyteller tho, I felt everything he was going thru, great job
Comment Written 14-Jan-2025
Comment from Abigail May
Holy heck, this piece is haunting. It had me eagerly reading through (the pacing helped immensely to this effect) mirroring the guilt and anxiety the narrator shares. This is something that will definitely last in my mind long after having read it. Truly excellent work!
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Holy heck, this piece is haunting. It had me eagerly reading through (the pacing helped immensely to this effect) mirroring the guilt and anxiety the narrator shares. This is something that will definitely last in my mind long after having read it. Truly excellent work!
Comment Written 13-Jan-2025
Comment from lancellot
Very interesting. A man, trapped with his eternal guilt, locked in a moment of time. A terrible prison. This is a solid entry. Good luck.
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That's when you ran back and took in exactly what you had done.["]
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"If I'd looked back right away, could I have helped? Would it have mattered? {Maybe,"}
-Maybe?"
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Very interesting. A man, trapped with his eternal guilt, locked in a moment of time. A terrible prison. This is a solid entry. Good luck.
notes:
That's when you ran back and took in exactly what you had done.["]
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"If I'd looked back right away, could I have helped? Would it have mattered? {Maybe,"}
-Maybe?"
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Comment Written 13-Jan-2025
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Wow, your story is incredibly intense. I really appreciate how you capture the inner turmoil and guilt of the narrator. The back and forth dialogue is so interesting. The moment when the narrator reflects on the body they left behind is deeply moving. You really draw the reader into the emotional and psychological impact of the situation. It's a powerful and thought provoking read!
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Wow, your story is incredibly intense. I really appreciate how you capture the inner turmoil and guilt of the narrator. The back and forth dialogue is so interesting. The moment when the narrator reflects on the body they left behind is deeply moving. You really draw the reader into the emotional and psychological impact of the situation. It's a powerful and thought provoking read!
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Comment Written 13-Jan-2025
