Comment from LJbutterfly

Excellent

In this novel, your storytelling has moved up another notch. You've included the shock factor. The image of Rossi's hand in a box, and Rossi without a hand shocks the senses. It also lets me know that your imagination and creativity have developed far beyond that of a writer who writes simple one-event stories.

I love your stories because they stimulate the imagination of the reader. You can never guess what is going to happen next.

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2025

Thanks, Lorraine. It's been bothering me about the hand...because I usually tend to steer from the gruesome and the bus accident was more than enough...but I needed to show what kind of people we are dealing with...and they aren't your nice Sunday Go To Church kind.
Smiles, Carol

Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

This is really good. Miriam is missing, which sounds like an odd thing for a ghost, so that means there is an entire other thing that can happen to ghosts. And Doyle has disappeared, and no one knows where. They only know he didn't end up in their hands.

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2025

Thr ghosts can't be killed again but they can be captured...like the genie in the bottle sort of. At least that's what my imagination says...who am I to know? And now I have to start ramping up the story so we can unravel the mysteries.
Smiles, Carol

Comment from karenina

Excellent

That's some kind of message, cufflinks and all! Are you sure you never dubbed elbows with the MAFIA? You
nail these characters like their family!

+Just kidding+

What a mess! I'm not even going to try to guess who is,at the bottom of the jail break...

You're always ten steps ahead of me!

Karenina

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2025

I don't think I should admit to anything. Though my house was the center point of many parties where it was best to remain in my kitchen then in the dining room.... to be seen but not heard.
Thanks so much for the review and glad I have you guessing. I've got to get back into the writing mode now that I am home. My bubble kind of popped....
Smiles, Carol

reply by karenina on 07-Jan-2025

Glad you are home safely. I trust Johnny made it through your absence?

reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025

Gained another 30 pounds by eating all the butter, honey, frosting and anything else he could find in the house...but he's fine. Now I can start scrubbing the place,,, Such is life. Thanks for asking.

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

Carol, This is another great chapter you have penned. You are very good at writing this type of story. Very interesting and I can't wait until the next one! love and blessings, teri

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 Comment Written 04-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2025

Thanks so much Teri for the kind review and thoughts on my story. Appreciate you all the time.
Smiles, Carol

Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary

Excellent

Carol,

This was a great second chapter. You're right about having several plots to it. You have Miriam missing and now the mob is getting involved.

Great job my friend.

Love ya,

Cecilia

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 Comment Written 03-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2025

Thanks, sister.... I'm struggling to get back into the mode of writing but maybe today will be the day...or tomorrow.... Hope all is well with you.
Smiles, Carol