The Journey
How will I journey to Christmas this year?20 total reviews
Comment from Trina Layne
This piece encourages deep reflection. I could appreciate what you were trying to do with the formatting, that staircase effect. I think it was fairly useful and strengthened the overall impact of the writing. Congratulations on your work!
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2024
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This piece encourages deep reflection. I could appreciate what you were trying to do with the formatting, that staircase effect. I think it was fairly useful and strengthened the overall impact of the writing. Congratulations on your work!
Comment Written 23-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Trina, for your read and very thoughtful review.
-Bill
Comment from royowen
I think for all of, when I came to Christ, or rather He came to me, I wasn't expecting it, my life reached new depths and concerns, but He turned my mourning into dancing, my despair into hope, my downward flight unto the mountain top. May the peace and love of God in Christ Jesus be with you and yours at this auspicious time Nill,, to you and yours from me and mine, blessings Roy.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2024
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I think for all of, when I came to Christ, or rather He came to me, I wasn't expecting it, my life reached new depths and concerns, but He turned my mourning into dancing, my despair into hope, my downward flight unto the mountain top. May the peace and love of God in Christ Jesus be with you and yours at this auspicious time Nill,, to you and yours from me and mine, blessings Roy.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2024
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I was worried you wouldn't read this. i've been busy entering contests this week. Another just a few minutes ago. Thank you, Roy. You have no idea what it means to me to have you review what I write and post. Only about one out of 30 writes is made public. But this one was very personal. A blessed Christmas. BTW, I'm going to Dallas for Christmas. Oh, dear. -Bill
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I receive all your work Bill, your a favourite with me, Merry Christmas
Comment from Teri7
Bill, This is a beautiful and well written poem! As I am reviewing this poem I am listening to Oh Holy Night! One of my favorite Christmas songs. Great wording and lovely imagey. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Bill, This is a beautiful and well written poem! As I am reviewing this poem I am listening to Oh Holy Night! One of my favorite Christmas songs. Great wording and lovely imagey. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 23-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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When I get a six from a seasoned FS member and reviewer, I pay attention. Thank you, Teri. A six from you is very special to me. -Bill
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You are so welcome Bill. I always enjoy your writing. It blesses me! Teri
Comment from estory
This poem seemed to pick up steam as it went along. You start with an image of the manger, and the wise men and shepherds standing around it, and then you get carried away on this staircase to your own approach to the manger by God. It ends up being a very personal and individual connection to God. It illustrates how God works with each individual story to bring you to paradise. estory
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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This poem seemed to pick up steam as it went along. You start with an image of the manger, and the wise men and shepherds standing around it, and then you get carried away on this staircase to your own approach to the manger by God. It ends up being a very personal and individual connection to God. It illustrates how God works with each individual story to bring you to paradise. estory
Comment Written 23-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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You caught it. I didn't think anyone would but you were able to see the outline to the poem. Nice going. -Bill
Comment from Begin Again
For each of us the journey is different. Some may find the pathway difficult and to others it's a simple walk. Regardless, the ultimate reward is to keep moving forward and enter the door ...His light will lead us there if we climb the stairs.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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For each of us the journey is different. Some may find the pathway difficult and to others it's a simple walk. Regardless, the ultimate reward is to keep moving forward and enter the door ...His light will lead us there if we climb the stairs.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 23-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Carol, for your read and review. I was attempting to validate our own way to the manger. However that is for each of us, to not make the journey is the tragedy. -Bill
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and presentation, William.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-I like the style of your poem and the thoughts you share.
-A very good opening verse, followed by your thoughts
for "love, peace, and hope."
-A very good image about God's "secret stairway..."
and a good conclusion to your poem.
-Have a very Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year!
-A good entry for the contest; good luck and hope you do well.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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-Very nice artwork and presentation, William.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-I like the style of your poem and the thoughts you share.
-A very good opening verse, followed by your thoughts
for "love, peace, and hope."
-A very good image about God's "secret stairway..."
and a good conclusion to your poem.
-Have a very Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year!
-A good entry for the contest; good luck and hope you do well.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Pam, for your read and review. I was most appreciative of your evaluation of the writing style for this poem. Merry Christmas. =Bill
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You are very welcome, Bill. I appreciate your reply and Merry Christmas to you, too.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a beautifully written, Christmas poem, man I enjoyed reading it very much. Your presentation is very nice. We all have to come to that point where we realize that Jesus indeed was the virgin, born son of Mary and that he was sent by God himself to be Savior in our Lord. Once we realize that then we can also come to the foot of the Cross and place our lives in the hands of our Lord and Savior.Patricia.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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This is a beautifully written, Christmas poem, man I enjoyed reading it very much. Your presentation is very nice. We all have to come to that point where we realize that Jesus indeed was the virgin, born son of Mary and that he was sent by God himself to be Savior in our Lord. Once we realize that then we can also come to the foot of the Cross and place our lives in the hands of our Lord and Savior.Patricia.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Pat, for your read and review. -Bill
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is such a gently spoken and humble verse that touches the heart. Its introspection is honest and soul-searching and, with the graphics of the stairway, it makes a complete and original read. Well done and good luck, William. Warm wishes Debbie
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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This is such a gently spoken and humble verse that touches the heart. Its introspection is honest and soul-searching and, with the graphics of the stairway, it makes a complete and original read. Well done and good luck, William. Warm wishes Debbie
Comment Written 23-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Debbie, for your read and review. This piece is getting the attention of some serious and seasoned reviewers and I am grateful. -Bill
Comment from karenina
New journey or old, there is always room for a faithful soul searching for his way home!
Nice "stairs" at the end of your poem...
There surely are "many ways to the manger..."
Amazing Grace awaits!
Karenina
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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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New journey or old, there is always room for a faithful soul searching for his way home!
Nice "stairs" at the end of your poem...
There surely are "many ways to the manger..."
Amazing Grace awaits!
Karenina
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Comment Written 23-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Karenina, for your read and review. -Bill
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You are most welcome!
Comment from Sanku
This is an interesting work I liked the way you organised your words. The stairs ix symbolic too. This is the night we think.of Him up there.
Happy Christmas to you
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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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This is an interesting work I liked the way you organised your words. The stairs ix symbolic too. This is the night we think.of Him up there.
Happy Christmas to you
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Comment Written 23-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Sammy, and your Christmas journey.