Rudolf's Christmas
Rudolf tries to find his way home.13 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written Christmas Flash story you have penned for the writing prompt contest. You used great descriptive words about Santa and Rudolph the reindeer. You used great imagery also. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2024
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This is a very well written Christmas Flash story you have penned for the writing prompt contest. You used great descriptive words about Santa and Rudolph the reindeer. You used great imagery also. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 16-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2024
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Thank you very much!
Comment from Avery Daniel
Some of this vocabulary is likely too difficult for children, but the story was really good! I don't mean to act like I know better, but there were several examples in which I thought your vocabulary needed to be more... adjusted for youth. The word "resonate" likely won't be in a young child's vocabulary.
I also think you should revise the "needy children" bit... has bad undertones.
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reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Some of this vocabulary is likely too difficult for children, but the story was really good! I don't mean to act like I know better, but there were several examples in which I thought your vocabulary needed to be more... adjusted for youth. The word "resonate" likely won't be in a young child's vocabulary.
I also think you should revise the "needy children" bit... has bad undertones.
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Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Thanks!
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Thanks!
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I changed it to general fiction instead of children.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Such a fun little 'take off' on the children-favorite, Rudolph! ;) Could easily be split and turned into a children's book... Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
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reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Such a fun little 'take off' on the children-favorite, Rudolph! ;) Could easily be split and turned into a children's book... Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
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Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Thank you so much!