Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

And the ball is rolling so to speak. I can't wait to read more. You're doing a great job writing this and I couldn't find any way to improve this post. Thank you for sharing.

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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024

Thanks so much, Barbara. In the next chapter, we'll finally find out what Brian's plan is for stopping Dipraxa, with further details to come in chapter 20. It's kind of neat what they are planning.

reply by barbara.wilkey on 17-Dec-2024

I'm sure it is.

Comment from Pam Lonsdale

Excellent

Sounds like the players are just about all in place and the real action will begin. I'm really interested to see how you pull all this off, Jim - science, math, detective work. You have to know a lot about all these subjects to make them realistic in your story.

Then there's Marie:-)

I'll be taking time off in January to write the last two chapters of my book, but I will be reading the novels that I've begun, like yours.

See ya soon!

xo
Pam

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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024

Just one more team member to recruit--the programmer, but you can probably guess who it will be (not E.J., though).

You'll get the basics of the plan in the next chapter (16), but full details will come out in chapter 20.

I don't know as much about these subjects as you might think. Just enough to raise questions, which I get answered for their feasibility using my favorite AI bot. It's very cool really.

I start by asking a few basic questions based on a possible solution to Brian's problem I've thought of. For example: I might ask it: Are there any plants known to grow only in one place in the world?

When I have a few basic questions answered that reinforce my idea, I will tell the bot I'm writing a novel and I describe the plot situation. Then I will propose my possible solution to it, and ask it if this is at all feasible. He will tell me whether or not it might be and give suggestions on how--details I may want to include in the story. It maintains the entire context of the chat, and I can add further questions and it knows what I'm talking about.

When it knows you're writing a novel, it will often give additional plot ideas to consider. It's a very cool and fun process chatting with the bot. And it sure beats the hours of research time this would take trying to find answers to my questions simply using Google searches.

reply by Pam Lonsdale on 17-Dec-2024

I use chatgpt for research and to run text by to keep in correct tense - my weak spot. I still prefer grammarly for grammatical stuff.

Thanks for the details.

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

This is almost too good to be true but, with women in control, I can believe it! Taking on this massive security problem is a significant undertaking. But we know Abby is a genius and nothing daunts her. I wondered if Fran should expose her identity quite that freely over the phone (which might not be safe from interception) and, obviously, Abby will need to see proof of ID when she arrives. But another excellent and detailed chapter bringing everything up to date. Well done, Jim. Take care Debbie

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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024

Hey! Don't forget Brian is a big part of this too. :-)

I always like to find a way to bring Abby into my stories. She's my all time favorite character.

Ordinarily, an FBI agent wouldn't divulge their job in most conversations, but when trying to enlist someone's support she needed to. Her phone software encrypts her conversations, so she doesn't worry too much about being intercepted.

We'll get to see the rudimentary plan in the next chapter when the whole team is together. Can you guess who the programmer will be? (Hint: It won't be E.J.)

Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary

Excellent

Jim,

This is a great chapter. It seems like the clan is moving right along with their problem. Hopefully Abby can assist Brian with his math project.

Well done my friend.

Cecilia

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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024

Thanks so much, Cecilia. Abby is my all time favorite character and features in 7 of my 8 novels. It's a challenge to bring her in because my novels are not serialized, but it's always fun to figure out a way to do it. She has just a small role in this one, but it's an important one.

reply by Cecilia A Heiskary on 17-Dec-2024

You're welcome. Look forward to the next chapter.

Cecilia

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

They are fortunate that Aby is free to come at a moment's notice, but it does sound as if she will bve a good fit for their team. If she is an inventor she'll also have a creative mind as well as her mathematical abilities. Great chapter.
Wendy

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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024

Thanks, Wendy. Abby will make a great addition to the team, but I'll only be able to describe what her role will be in very basic terms because her knowledge of mathematics is way beyond mine. We'll get a feel for what she will do in the next chapter.

Comment from Wayne Fowler

Excellent

I don't know how you do it, write the details. My fingers would type 'They called Abby and arranged a meeting.' (smiley face here) But that's why so many of my projects end at 20K words.
Best wishes.

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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024

You cracked me up with this, Wayne! You did, however, point out something I continually struggle with, and that is the amount of detail and small talk to put in a chapter. Often, my first cut at some chapters is way too long, and I have to go back and severely trim the content.

I tend to write dialog the way I picture people speaking, which is often with more words than necessary, then I go back and edit it down to cut to the chase. But it's always a balancing act between making it realistic and getting to the point without too much fluff and repetition.

It's funny, because in real life, I'm much more succinct in my speech than my characters. I'm always amused when I go to a restaurant with my wife and her order will go something like this:

"I'll have the chef's special, but could you make sure the vegetables are sauteed rather than steamed, and could I substitute a baked potato rather than mashed potatoes? Could you also make sure the salad dressing is on the side and there's no black pepper in anything?"

My order will go like this: "I'll have the fish and chips."