The Checkup
A frightening dental experience38 total reviews
Comment from jenintorre
An excellent poem and entry for the competition. It should surely win. Some very witty and clever rhymes. Most enjoyable. Good luck and best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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An excellent poem and entry for the competition. It should surely win. Some very witty and clever rhymes. Most enjoyable. Good luck and best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Jen. Sometimes traumatic experiences give rise to great poems.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is great and very picturesque. Reminds me of my Death Camp trained hygienist. You must have visited her also. I love your rhythm and you are great at rhyming.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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This is great and very picturesque. Reminds me of my Death Camp trained hygienist. You must have visited her also. I love your rhythm and you are great at rhyming.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Carol. Probably my night school graduate is more qualified than your Death Camp trained hygienist.
Comment from Gloria ....
I got quite a charge out of this exaggerated (I hope) and highly entertaining painful visit to the dental hygienist.
Hammer and chisel has it about right, and a reader can imagine the plaque flying like brick mortar into the complex of metal artillery.
Wishing you much luck with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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I got quite a charge out of this exaggerated (I hope) and highly entertaining painful visit to the dental hygienist.
Hammer and chisel has it about right, and a reader can imagine the plaque flying like brick mortar into the complex of metal artillery.
Wishing you much luck with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Gloria. I was really glad for the eye protection. The plaque was really flying around.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Nicely done, Paul. The rhymes are clean, fit well, and are unforced.
I really like the poems that tell a complete story as this one did. Fantastic!
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Nicely done, Paul. The rhymes are clean, fit well, and are unforced.
I really like the poems that tell a complete story as this one did. Fantastic!
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Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
Comment from Teri7
Paul, I am so sorry you had such a frightening dental experience. An experience like that would give me nightmares for quite a while my friend. You used very good descriptive words that made it seem so real. Blessings, teri
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Paul, I am so sorry you had such a frightening dental experience. An experience like that would give me nightmares for quite a while my friend. You used very good descriptive words that made it seem so real. Blessings, teri
Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Thank you, Paul, for sharing this very amusing story of your experience in the dental chair. It really seems to be the case that, after being scared stiff as child by these sadistic actions, then getting more used to them as a grown-up, we end up reverting in our mature years to our natural and understandable, complete aversion to dentists and hygienists! Your fear and discomfort are familiar and palpable in your well-crafted heptameter verse which is a joy to read. Good luck, Paul! Debbie
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Thank you, Paul, for sharing this very amusing story of your experience in the dental chair. It really seems to be the case that, after being scared stiff as child by these sadistic actions, then getting more used to them as a grown-up, we end up reverting in our mature years to our natural and understandable, complete aversion to dentists and hygienists! Your fear and discomfort are familiar and palpable in your well-crafted heptameter verse which is a joy to read. Good luck, Paul! Debbie
Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
Comment from Shanbreen
Well-written poem. I could see myself sitting in the chair being tortured. One thing, though: I thought hygienist were people who cleaned teeth.
" With hammer and a chisel she then mounted an attack,"
Wouldn't her using hammer and chisel be a dentist's job? Just wondering. Thanks for sharing your story through a rhyming poem.
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Well-written poem. I could see myself sitting in the chair being tortured. One thing, though: I thought hygienist were people who cleaned teeth.
" With hammer and a chisel she then mounted an attack,"
Wouldn't her using hammer and chisel be a dentist's job? Just wondering. Thanks for sharing your story through a rhyming poem.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
Comment from Ulla
Oh dear, that sounds ominous. I would have been terrified and have bolted. I hate going to the dentist, but that kind of treatment would have ensured I'd never gone back. All the best of luck. Ulla:)))
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Oh dear, that sounds ominous. I would have been terrified and have bolted. I hate going to the dentist, but that kind of treatment would have ensured I'd never gone back. All the best of luck. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
Comment from harmony13
The author words are humorous, descriptive and creative. This long poem
kept me reading right to the end - each stanza convinced me to read on and made smile. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork goes well with these words. Great Poem, Paul!
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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The author words are humorous, descriptive and creative. This long poem
kept me reading right to the end - each stanza convinced me to read on and made smile. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork goes well with these words. Great Poem, Paul!
Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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Thanks, Maria. My dental experiences are much better today than they were years ago.
Comment from DonandVicki
I just love the humor in your well rhymed poem. I assume this is fiction ? If it is a real experience then I guess I would be horrified. Just kidding, a master work of poetic rhythm and rhyme.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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I just love the humor in your well rhymed poem. I assume this is fiction ? If it is a real experience then I guess I would be horrified. Just kidding, a master work of poetic rhythm and rhyme.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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Thanks Don and Vicki. I have had some scary moments, but not as bad as I have portrayed.