The Myth of Andrasta
The conception and birth of the Cerberus ...22 total reviews
Comment from DonandVicki
The amount of thought, time, effort, and research that you put into this powerful poem deserves a six. I loved the flow of your work. An epic poem if I have ever saw one.
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The amount of thought, time, effort, and research that you put into this powerful poem deserves a six. I loved the flow of your work. An epic poem if I have ever saw one.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Don! I am so happy you enjoyed the poem, and I really appreciate your exceptional rating.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Wow! I hardly know what to say. I avoid most poetry like the plague. Not knowing the first thing about it, and honestly, in most cases, unwilling to try and decipher what would be much easier to understand and appreciate in prose. But all I can say about this piece is that it's FANTASTIC!
Sorry I don't have a much deserved six.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Wow! I hardly know what to say. I avoid most poetry like the plague. Not knowing the first thing about it, and honestly, in most cases, unwilling to try and decipher what would be much easier to understand and appreciate in prose. But all I can say about this piece is that it's FANTASTIC!
Sorry I don't have a much deserved six.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Ric! It's awesome that you took a gander at this considering how much you tend to shy away from poetry, as you've said. I really do appreciate you patronizing my work like you do.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Patrick,
An oustanding epic and masterful poem. I find ancient Greek legends intriguing. I love mythological. I can relate, I like to write about tragic love and loss.
When I was young, I performed spoken word poems. Performing on stage made the poems stronger for better effect. I was part of a group of poets called "conundrum". For a show, each of us had to chose a goddess, mine was Aphrodite -- the Greek goddess of love, beauty, pleasure.
Excellent entry for the Share A Story In A Poem contest. Good luck!
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Hello, Patrick,
An oustanding epic and masterful poem. I find ancient Greek legends intriguing. I love mythological. I can relate, I like to write about tragic love and loss.
When I was young, I performed spoken word poems. Performing on stage made the poems stronger for better effect. I was part of a group of poets called "conundrum". For a show, each of us had to chose a goddess, mine was Aphrodite -- the Greek goddess of love, beauty, pleasure.
Excellent entry for the Share A Story In A Poem contest. Good luck!
Comment Written 28-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Gypsy! 😊 That is awesome that you were a part of that poet's group. I never got the pleasure. My interest in poetry didn't occur until I was nearly 40 years old. I never wrote it or attemped to understand it very much until I started reviewing it over and over again on Writing.com. The good and the bad and forcing me to explain what was good and bad about them gave me great footing in my own poetry. I firmly believe that this is the key for all great prose writers who are afraid of poetry. There are an awful lot of those on this site. I hope they can be like me and just work at it day by day until they understand exactly what poetry is, what it is supposed to do, and that it is only a craft that one can improve at. Talk to you again soon!
Patrick
Comment from jake cosmos aller
a masterful retelling of ancient Greek legends. I am taking the Great Course lecture series on the Roman Empire so this poem resonates with me. Very well done.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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a masterful retelling of ancient Greek legends. I am taking the Great Course lecture series on the Roman Empire so this poem resonates with me. Very well done.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Jake! Hope you are doing well! 😊 And I subscribe to Great Courses Plus as well!
Comment from jim vecchio
This poem, its form, and the mythological imagery and personages proves that you are a much better poet than I, and this may encourage others to pursue some of the ancient myths.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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This poem, its form, and the mythological imagery and personages proves that you are a much better poet than I, and this may encourage others to pursue some of the ancient myths.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Jim! 😊
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Patrick, I'll be frank, I've read your epic verse three times and am still trying to absorb all the rich wealth of details. What is so remarkable is your amazingly fluent poetry which is so fitting and well-suited to this particular genre, almost as though you're narrating from ancient times. The story recounts a love that is lost and a yearning so strong to be reunited that Andrasta agrees to Aphrodite's plan for her, firstly, to give birth to Cerberus (perhaps a footnote:)) before her prayers are answered. In short, horror with a happy ending. I'm no student of classics so I hope I haven't disgraced myself. Your impressively crafted poetry is an education, inevitably a very worthy contender (and much more, including a virtual six) and I wish you luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Patrick, I'll be frank, I've read your epic verse three times and am still trying to absorb all the rich wealth of details. What is so remarkable is your amazingly fluent poetry which is so fitting and well-suited to this particular genre, almost as though you're narrating from ancient times. The story recounts a love that is lost and a yearning so strong to be reunited that Andrasta agrees to Aphrodite's plan for her, firstly, to give birth to Cerberus (perhaps a footnote:)) before her prayers are answered. In short, horror with a happy ending. I'm no student of classics so I hope I haven't disgraced myself. Your impressively crafted poetry is an education, inevitably a very worthy contender (and much more, including a virtual six) and I wish you luck! Debbie
Comment Written 28-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Hey Debbie!
I am pretty behind in answering my correspondence. Holidays in U.S.! You did great in your interpretation. There is a pretty straightforward narrative to it, but because it is in verse-form, it does make it harder to recognize and interpret. The main theme is this: all belief systems attempt to explain why the living MUST NOT interact with the dead. Andrasta attempts suicide to be with her love Damon. This is not allowed for mortals. So, Aphrodite decides to create a deterrent to this -- the Cerberus -- and at the same time, "punish" Andrasta for "your grasp in life for one that death has earned." In the end, Aphrodite feels bad about Andrasta's suffering and decides to give her the eternity with her love she always wanted anyway. I didn't add a footnote specifically about Cerberus, but I did add a note that wasn't there when you first saw it. Anyway, thank you so much for patronizing my work. I really appreciate you!
Patrick
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An amazing entry for the Share a Story in a Poem contest. Wow. Wow. and did I mention WOW!? Epic in every single sense of the word. You're getting my last six. I knew I kept it for a reason.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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An amazing entry for the Share a Story in a Poem contest. Wow. Wow. and did I mention WOW!? Epic in every single sense of the word. You're getting my last six. I knew I kept it for a reason.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Marilyn! I really appreciate your words and exceptional rating! 😊
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Patrick,
This poem is very deep in its meaning. It flows nicely all the way through and indeed tells a story about love and grief and the price you sometimes pay.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
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Patrick,
This poem is very deep in its meaning. It flows nicely all the way through and indeed tells a story about love and grief and the price you sometimes pay.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
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Comment Written 28-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Cecilia! 😊
Comment from patcelaw
This is beautifully written and very well presented. It looks very nice on the page. I love your illustration. May you have a wonderful and blessed day and may God richly bless your life. Patricia.
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This is beautifully written and very well presented. It looks very nice on the page. I love your illustration. May you have a wonderful and blessed day and may God richly bless your life. Patricia.
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Comment Written 28-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Patricia! I hope you are doing well! 😊
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
As I'm reading this, I'm continually thinking of how knowledgeable you are on this subject. Greek mythology has fascinated me since I was a child, and I love what you have done with its characters and myths.
Andrasta. What a tragic love story you've created. Cruel, jealous Aphrodite. And in the end Andrasta would end up with "a life to love and hate."
I suppose everyone got what they wanted, but what a cruel price to pay.
I wrote a flash fiction about Cerberus some time back. It was actually a humorous piece.
Patrick, this is outstanding. And now I know how the "devil's dog" came to be.
Best wishes for the contest. I don't think the committee knows quite what to do with your work, as it stands head and shoulders above anything else here.
xoxo
Pam
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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As I'm reading this, I'm continually thinking of how knowledgeable you are on this subject. Greek mythology has fascinated me since I was a child, and I love what you have done with its characters and myths.
Andrasta. What a tragic love story you've created. Cruel, jealous Aphrodite. And in the end Andrasta would end up with "a life to love and hate."
I suppose everyone got what they wanted, but what a cruel price to pay.
I wrote a flash fiction about Cerberus some time back. It was actually a humorous piece.
Patrick, this is outstanding. And now I know how the "devil's dog" came to be.
Best wishes for the contest. I don't think the committee knows quite what to do with your work, as it stands head and shoulders above anything else here.
xoxo
Pam
Comment Written 28-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Hi Pam! Thank you so much for your review and exceptional rating! And your comments about the committee humbles me. I am sure they will do just fine in their judgment.
Always great to hear from one of my most favorite people! I hope to get to your work in the next couple of days. I had my daughter her from university most of the week, and I got very little done in my reading/reviewing/writing. I am off pace a bit. I am reading "Uncle Tom's Cabin" right now and only on page 70. I should have finished it tomorrow, but definitely not going to happen. I have five books and 31 days. I will find the time somewhere! 😁
Talk to you again soon!
Patrick