Scarred children.
A poem.16 total reviews
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
There is no deeper cut than one that goes to the bone. Children are abused in so many ways now, and I consider ignoring children to also be abuse. I see parents on their phones while their children sit ignored all the time. It breaks my heart.
In the third stanza you use the word "wealth" at the end of the first two lines, which is slightly off-putting (for me). Could one line end with "health"?
Thanks for sharing, Roy.
xo
Pam
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There is no deeper cut than one that goes to the bone. Children are abused in so many ways now, and I consider ignoring children to also be abuse. I see parents on their phones while their children sit ignored all the time. It breaks my heart.
In the third stanza you use the word "wealth" at the end of the first two lines, which is slightly off-putting (for me). Could one line end with "health"?
Thanks for sharing, Roy.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
Comment from GWHARGIS
You are exactly right. Youth is a tough time to begin with. Mistakes are made, we don't truly know who we are and we are trusting. Giving grace to ourselves and others is the key. Great poem. Gretchen
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You are exactly right. Youth is a tough time to begin with. Mistakes are made, we don't truly know who we are and we are trusting. Giving grace to ourselves and others is the key. Great poem. Gretchen
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
Comment from Rick Gardner
This touches me deeply. Penetrates to my soul. Children are our future, will have to take care of us. A child's hug is one of the best things that can happen to you. Nothing even comes close.
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This touches me deeply. Penetrates to my soul. Children are our future, will have to take care of us. A child's hug is one of the best things that can happen to you. Nothing even comes close.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Roy,
This is a great poem, if not a sad one. I grew up in a home where mother always blamed stuff on me and her words were harsh. One thing she said that I will never forget is this, "You were named after your father French whore" That was one among many degrading things she said to me. I suffered from self-esteem issues for a better part of my life because of her harsh words.
Cecilia
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Roy,
This is a great poem, if not a sad one. I grew up in a home where mother always blamed stuff on me and her words were harsh. One thing she said that I will never forget is this, "You were named after your father French whore" That was one among many degrading things she said to me. I suffered from self-esteem issues for a better part of my life because of her harsh words.
Cecilia
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Roy,
This poem reminds us that kindness and understanding are needed to move a child forward with strong self assurance. Bulling, name calling and undermining a child scars for life and needs to stop. It can lead to the blood you mention because of suicide.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a wonderful rest of the day and weekend.
Joan
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Hi Roy,
This poem reminds us that kindness and understanding are needed to move a child forward with strong self assurance. Bulling, name calling and undermining a child scars for life and needs to stop. It can lead to the blood you mention because of suicide.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a wonderful rest of the day and weekend.
Joan
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Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Roy,
This is a wonderful heart-felt poem.
It reminds me of the war in Gaza. Children on both sides are scarred by this bloodbath; they'll grow up hating the other side and what does that say for the world's future.
Children are indeed the world's wealth.
Excellent poem, Roy.
Blessings,
Have a nice Spring day,
Cindy
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Roy,
This is a wonderful heart-felt poem.
It reminds me of the war in Gaza. Children on both sides are scarred by this bloodbath; they'll grow up hating the other side and what does that say for the world's future.
Children are indeed the world's wealth.
Excellent poem, Roy.
Blessings,
Have a nice Spring day,
Cindy
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Comment Written 21-Nov-2024