Hotoke
A free verse25 total reviews
Comment from Begin Again
I'm not a poet so my thoughts simply go to the words... your imagination brought me to a loved one who has passed and standing there watching their soul embrace the freedom and what life is yet to bring them. Very well done.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2024
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I'm not a poet so my thoughts simply go to the words... your imagination brought me to a loved one who has passed and standing there watching their soul embrace the freedom and what life is yet to bring them. Very well done.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 25-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2024
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Thanks so very much Carol for your lovely comments and review.
Luv&stuff
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Katie,
This is a new word for me. It seems like this is a metaphoric poem of love of nature or grief over the loss of flowers when Winter comes.
It can be literal in that it describes the scene well. I like the origami sky.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a good rest of the week.
Joan
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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Hi Katie,
This is a new word for me. It seems like this is a metaphoric poem of love of nature or grief over the loss of flowers when Winter comes.
It can be literal in that it describes the scene well. I like the origami sky.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a good rest of the week.
Joan
Comment Written 24-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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Thanks so very much Joan for your lovely comments and review.
So glad you liked it!
Take care
Luv&stuff Katiemaedead
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No problem, Katie.
Joan
Comment from jake cosmos aller
nicely done hotoke poem dealing with the loss of someone close and imagining hearing and seeing their spirit soar into the sky. When my sister died we scattered her ashes over the ocean on a beach near her house. Just as we did so a huge rogue wave came splashing ashore and I felt her spirit soaring into the waves and disappearing.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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nicely done hotoke poem dealing with the loss of someone close and imagining hearing and seeing their spirit soar into the sky. When my sister died we scattered her ashes over the ocean on a beach near her house. Just as we did so a huge rogue wave came splashing ashore and I felt her spirit soaring into the waves and disappearing.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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That's a beautiful story Jake. Thanks so very much for reviewing.
Luv&stuff Katiemaedead
Comment from estory
I loved the rhythm of the free verse, haphazard and yet patterned, and the imagery was magical. All these origami pandas and birds that seem to crystalize out of the cold air and the snow, like dreams of life in this time of hibernation and stillness. There was a great oriental feel to it, a surreal feel, and a well developed sense of style and how to use it to convey the connections between the conscious mind and the subconscious one. estory
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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I loved the rhythm of the free verse, haphazard and yet patterned, and the imagery was magical. All these origami pandas and birds that seem to crystalize out of the cold air and the snow, like dreams of life in this time of hibernation and stillness. There was a great oriental feel to it, a surreal feel, and a well developed sense of style and how to use it to convey the connections between the conscious mind and the subconscious one. estory
Comment Written 24-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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Thanks so very much estory for such a lovely, super review! I'm so glad you liked it.
Luv&stuff Katiemaedead
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and presentation, Katiemae.
-Thanks for the notes.
-You did a good job with the poem.
-Very good imagery creates a good word picture
beginning with the first verse and the
comparison of trees being like "cut outs."
-I like the idea of creating clouds in the
following verses, along with your "origami sky."
-Very good closing lines for a poem
filled with your imagination.
-Very well done.
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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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-Very nice artwork and presentation, Katiemae.
-Thanks for the notes.
-You did a good job with the poem.
-Very good imagery creates a good word picture
beginning with the first verse and the
comparison of trees being like "cut outs."
-I like the idea of creating clouds in the
following verses, along with your "origami sky."
-Very good closing lines for a poem
filled with your imagination.
-Very well done.
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Comment Written 24-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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Hi Pam. Thanks for such a splendid and most thorough review!
Luv&stuff
Katiemaedead
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You are very welcome, Katiemae.
Comment from Sanku
Dirt white winter sky is an interesting description I too love to make shapes out of clouds and watch the shape disappear and change inot something else ..Very imaginative poem..Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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Dirt white winter sky is an interesting description I too love to make shapes out of clouds and watch the shape disappear and change inot something else ..Very imaginative poem..Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 24-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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Thanks so very much for your lovely comments and review Sanku.
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I love the way you create another dimension here with your artistry. I could immediately see those paper cut-outs of trees in a line and shapeless clouds folded into fascinating creatures. The world is your object to fashion from it what you will and delight the soul with freedom and imagination. Well done, Katherine, and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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I love the way you create another dimension here with your artistry. I could immediately see those paper cut-outs of trees in a line and shapeless clouds folded into fascinating creatures. The world is your object to fashion from it what you will and delight the soul with freedom and imagination. Well done, Katherine, and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 23-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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Thanks ever so much Debbie for your super review! So glad you liked it!
Luv&stuff Katiemaedead
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Katiemae,
Your free verse poem is so creative. I can picture this fantasy place in my mind; it's truly a great escape. It takes a sting out of the winter doldrums.
Great poetry, Katie,
Cindy
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Katiemae,
Your free verse poem is so creative. I can picture this fantasy place in my mind; it's truly a great escape. It takes a sting out of the winter doldrums.
Great poetry, Katie,
Cindy
Comment Written 23-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Thanks so very much Cindy. Glad you liked it.
Take care!
Luv&stuff Katiemaedead
Comment from Shanbreen
Well written, Katie.
I can crease and tear them
to roll across my origami sky
You do have a wonderful imagination--from playful Pandas to dragons breathing cloud fire.
All the best for the free verse contest.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Well written, Katie.
I can crease and tear them
to roll across my origami sky
You do have a wonderful imagination--from playful Pandas to dragons breathing cloud fire.
All the best for the free verse contest.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much Shanbreen!
Luv&stuff Katiemaedead
Comment from mermaids
There is a light feel and flow to your words. I like the mention of playful pandas and dragons, it gives a whimsical feel to your words, like origami unfolding. Excellent free verse form that takes the reader to another place.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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There is a light feel and flow to your words. I like the mention of playful pandas and dragons, it gives a whimsical feel to your words, like origami unfolding. Excellent free verse form that takes the reader to another place.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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Thanks so very much mermaids for your lovely comments and review.
Luv&stuff