The Pills
A takeoff on The Bells by Edgar Allen Poe22 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
I'm not familiar with Poe's poem but you have done a great job with this. Your reading voice is so naturally poetic and brings this right to life.
I can imagine an audience, like us, relating very well to this excess of pills.
Very well done. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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I'm not familiar with Poe's poem but you have done a great job with this. Your reading voice is so naturally poetic and brings this right to life.
I can imagine an audience, like us, relating very well to this excess of pills.
Very well done. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 14-May-2024
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Thanks so much, Gloria for your very kind review and for the 6 stars. Many in the FanStory family seem to be of an age to understand and appreciate the subject of this poem. And those who don't probably will some day.
Comment from lyenochka
I know that Poe poem and always liked it but his is gloomy and yours is lots of fun with its humor for us seniors. I love your reading voice! Thanks for this fabulous poem and reading! Super job!
I now have pill box because I forgot NOT to take my calcium just before my bone test. So now I fill those boxes, too.
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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I know that Poe poem and always liked it but his is gloomy and yours is lots of fun with its humor for us seniors. I love your reading voice! Thanks for this fabulous poem and reading! Super job!
I now have pill box because I forgot NOT to take my calcium just before my bone test. So now I fill those boxes, too.
Comment Written 14-May-2024
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Thanks so much, Helen. You're right; "The Bells" ends up rather gloomy. I guess that's the reason for taking all these pills--so we don't have a similarly gloomy ending. You know you're getting old when you have to start using a pill box.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha, this is hilarious Jim, I loved it! So many pills to take to keep us alive for a little while longer as we battle with the ravages of age! If only there was just one magical pill to keep us going forever! Alas we all succumb in the end as the reaper grabs us by the throat! I loved the humour here Jim, your well chosen rhymes like (curtailment) and (derailment) to get your point across. A fun read from skilled pen, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Ha ha ha, this is hilarious Jim, I loved it! So many pills to take to keep us alive for a little while longer as we battle with the ravages of age! If only there was just one magical pill to keep us going forever! Alas we all succumb in the end as the reaper grabs us by the throat! I loved the humour here Jim, your well chosen rhymes like (curtailment) and (derailment) to get your point across. A fun read from skilled pen, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 14-May-2024
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Thanks so much, Dolly. I guess taking pills is better than dying young like our ancestors used to do, and because we live longer, we have more aches and pains than they used to when their muscles and soft tissues and bones were younger and in better shape. I'm envious of those my age who don't have as many ailments and don't need all these pills, but it's certainly better than the alternative.
Thanks also for the 6 stars. Very much appreciated!
Comment from jmdg1954
Jim... jeez. When you're not writing a novel you entertain us with your humor and this time in a rhyme.
I consider myself fortunate that at 69 (years old) I'm only on one pill. God willing it continues.
Great post, that shill has me smiling.
John
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Jim... jeez. When you're not writing a novel you entertain us with your humor and this time in a rhyme.
I consider myself fortunate that at 69 (years old) I'm only on one pill. God willing it continues.
Great post, that shill has me smiling.
John
Comment Written 14-May-2024
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Thanks, John. I'd say you are pretty lucky to only be taking one pill. I hope it stays that way for you.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Wow! I had no idea you could put it to audio.
Just one Q, are there pills for tinnitus?
onomatopoeic - You did an Ohmie on us, didn't you? Made up your own word. Good job. I approve! (smiley face here)
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Wow! I had no idea you could put it to audio.
Just one Q, are there pills for tinnitus?
onomatopoeic - You did an Ohmie on us, didn't you? Made up your own word. Good job. I approve! (smiley face here)
Comment Written 14-May-2024
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Yeah, it's part of the special features button options. You can include any sort of audio up to 3 MB size.
I guess there are some tinnitus pills, though I don't know how well they work. Fortunately, that isn't one of my many ailments.
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lucky you!
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lucky you!
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
I really do love this. Old Edgar Alan knew what he'd started. I did one based on "The Bells," but right now I can't remember what it was - I guess I need to take a memory pill.
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reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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I really do love this. Old Edgar Alan knew what he'd started. I did one based on "The Bells," but right now I can't remember what it was - I guess I need to take a memory pill.
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Comment Written 14-May-2024
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Thanks so much, Verna. Perhaps you do need a memory pill. One start means Poor, not Excellent!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I know you have heard we're going on vacation for 15 days. Well, I prepared my pills three weeks out so I would know if I needed to get any refills and would have time to do it. I casually mentioned this to my husband, hoping he'd get the message, without being accused of nagging. He did not. Yesterday, he decided to get his pills ready. Guess what? One of his prescriptions didn't have enough pills for the entire vacation. Hmmm? Luckily the pharmacy was kind enough to do an emergency refill. MEN!!!! I did enjoy reading.
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I know you have heard we're going on vacation for 15 days. Well, I prepared my pills three weeks out so I would know if I needed to get any refills and would have time to do it. I casually mentioned this to my husband, hoping he'd get the message, without being accused of nagging. He did not. Yesterday, he decided to get his pills ready. Guess what? One of his prescriptions didn't have enough pills for the entire vacation. Hmmm? Luckily the pharmacy was kind enough to do an emergency refill. MEN!!!! I did enjoy reading.
Comment Written 14-May-2024
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Why am I not surprised? Sounds like something I might have done too. And my wife would have been just as prepared as you! Such is the difference between women and men.
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Hey, I raised four boys, mostly by myself because my husband was active Army. So pretty much a geographic single parent. My line is I raised four boys, still working on my husband. LOL
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My wife is still working on me too. I think it's a lost cause!
Comment from shelley kaye
lol yea meds... happy pills, panic pills, blood pressure pills, cholesterol, pills... i felt this poem... in my throat... while gulping water LOL
fun little rhyme
thought-provoking and quick, smooth flow
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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lol yea meds... happy pills, panic pills, blood pressure pills, cholesterol, pills... i felt this poem... in my throat... while gulping water LOL
fun little rhyme
thought-provoking and quick, smooth flow
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 14-May-2024
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Hey, Shelley, thanks so much for reading and reviewing it. It appears I picked a subject many of us can identify with.
Comment from pome lover
That's very good! Not only that, but I can relate. I really dislike taking so many pills, especially capsules that are hard to swallow.
My brother told me his solution for hard to swallow pills, wash them down with V-8. He says it works well. I tried it and it does! But back to your poem - it is very clever and sticks to Poe's meter, and it's nice that you "appreciate what taking them fulfills!"
Katharine
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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That's very good! Not only that, but I can relate. I really dislike taking so many pills, especially capsules that are hard to swallow.
My brother told me his solution for hard to swallow pills, wash them down with V-8. He says it works well. I tried it and it does! But back to your poem - it is very clever and sticks to Poe's meter, and it's nice that you "appreciate what taking them fulfills!"
Katharine
Comment Written 14-May-2024
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Thanks for the great tip and for reviewing my poem, Katharine. I'll have to try that trick with the V-8 juice, especially for those pills that taste awful!
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some people don't like v-8, but it works for me. I don't use it all the time, though :)
Comment from Sally Law
Amen! I'm seeing the doctor today and refusing two prescriptions because of the side effects! As if I needed more ills, ills, ills, from those pills, pills, pills!! Good grief! Thanks for sharing, Dr. Wile. A fun one.
Sal :))
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Amen! I'm seeing the doctor today and refusing two prescriptions because of the side effects! As if I needed more ills, ills, ills, from those pills, pills, pills!! Good grief! Thanks for sharing, Dr. Wile. A fun one.
Sal :))
Comment Written 14-May-2024
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Thanks so much, Sally. Sometimes those side effects are worse than what the pills are trying to fix. And sometimes the side effect is from the interaction with another pill you might be taking, and it would be better to discontinue the other one instead. It can get very confusing!
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Yes, this old age stuff is a slippery slope. We do our best though. Blessings,
Sal :))