Take Me Down
A Free Verse Love Poem21 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This contest entry is very tasteful and very sensual. I enjoyed reading. The metaphors fit perfectly with the meaning. Good use of them. Thank you for sharing this entry with us and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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This contest entry is very tasteful and very sensual. I enjoyed reading. The metaphors fit perfectly with the meaning. Good use of them. Thank you for sharing this entry with us and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much! Xo
Comment from Jim Wile
This was a beautifully done free verse poem, Jess. Very sensual, yet "tasteful" at the same time. I loved the metaphor of the ocean with the surface and the depths contrasting the different experiences of carnal love that are possible. What a beautiful picture of you and your husband at your wedding too. What an attractive couple! - Jim
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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This was a beautifully done free verse poem, Jess. Very sensual, yet "tasteful" at the same time. I loved the metaphor of the ocean with the surface and the depths contrasting the different experiences of carnal love that are possible. What a beautiful picture of you and your husband at your wedding too. What an attractive couple! - Jim
Comment Written 13-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much, Jim! I appreciate your encouraging comments.
Xo
Jess
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
It's too bad you have to put a flag on this for sexual content, as many won't read it for that reason. But your meanings are awash (can't get away from the water theme here) in metaphor, so nothing is blatant.
I think it's a beautiful tribute to your husband and the love you have found together. Not all couples have found the physical excitement you have - you're very blessed.
Good luck in the contest. Beautiful picture, by the way.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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It's too bad you have to put a flag on this for sexual content, as many won't read it for that reason. But your meanings are awash (can't get away from the water theme here) in metaphor, so nothing is blatant.
I think it's a beautiful tribute to your husband and the love you have found together. Not all couples have found the physical excitement you have - you're very blessed.
Good luck in the contest. Beautiful picture, by the way.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 13-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much, Pam. I truly appreciate you saying that. I would have to agree... but I never know what one may be uncomfortable with- "submerged" metaphors and all. Haha
I?m grateful to you, as always, for your thoughtful comments!
Xo
Jess
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A wonderful photograph Jessica, a maiden on the cusp of marital bliss. I enjoyed your sensual and erotic post, delivered in a subtle and rather wild sexual parade. I wish I had a six for you as this is magical, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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A wonderful photograph Jessica, a maiden on the cusp of marital bliss. I enjoyed your sensual and erotic post, delivered in a subtle and rather wild sexual parade. I wish I had a six for you as this is magical, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much, Dolly! That truly means the world! Xo
Jessica
Comment from Bill Schott
This love poem, Take Me Down, brings the poetic depiction into the description of that tussling discovery of each others secrets in the heights of intimacy. Nice.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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This love poem, Take Me Down, brings the poetic depiction into the description of that tussling discovery of each others secrets in the heights of intimacy. Nice.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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You give the best reviews! Thanks you!
Xo
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Wow, this is a goodie, Jessica! I like your rather cheeky put-down of those lovers who simply glide and drift, making a dramatic contrast with your much more emboldened and passionate dive into that "roaring sea." Your metaphor perfectly depicts your total immersion into this "tempestuous" experience and your all-consuming sense of total abandonment. Excellent and a strong entry! Well done, Debbie
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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Wow, this is a goodie, Jessica! I like your rather cheeky put-down of those lovers who simply glide and drift, making a dramatic contrast with your much more emboldened and passionate dive into that "roaring sea." Your metaphor perfectly depicts your total immersion into this "tempestuous" experience and your all-consuming sense of total abandonment. Excellent and a strong entry! Well done, Debbie
Comment Written 13-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much, Debbie! I'm thrilled you liked the cheekiness of that line. ;)
Xo
Jess
Comment from Lea Tonin1
You are such an amazing writer wow!
"In tempestuous tides" Stunning, actually liked it very much! Of course I like everything you write. Great picture too really nice!
Having said that, I see no issues with grammar esthetics sentence structor or spelling. I think you've done a good job with this. I like it of course you are a rockin writer so that totally helped!
You have followed the contest rules beautifully. You know, so it's a phrase got magic. I think it's a great submission. I wish you best luck. Hope you have an awesome night too!
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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You are such an amazing writer wow!
"In tempestuous tides" Stunning, actually liked it very much! Of course I like everything you write. Great picture too really nice!
Having said that, I see no issues with grammar esthetics sentence structor or spelling. I think you've done a good job with this. I like it of course you are a rockin writer so that totally helped!
You have followed the contest rules beautifully. You know, so it's a phrase got magic. I think it's a great submission. I wish you best luck. Hope you have an awesome night too!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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Lea you always make me smile! Thanks so much xoxo
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Comment from JSD
Saucy stuff but treated with subtlety and sensitivity through your utterly effective and engaging metaphor. Certainly not warranting all those warnings. Why deter adults from reading such a beautiful expression of love?
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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Saucy stuff but treated with subtlety and sensitivity through your utterly effective and engaging metaphor. Certainly not warranting all those warnings. Why deter adults from reading such a beautiful expression of love?
Comment Written 13-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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Haha thank you so much. I appreciate you saying that. I would love to do without the warnings- however, Ive found that some adults can be rather sensitive.
Thank you for your lovely comment, as always! Xo
Comment from kahpot
What an excellent read, your words give a beautiful and sexy image as your description of your love/love making is so vivid, very well written, gorgeous photo, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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What an excellent read, your words give a beautiful and sexy image as your description of your love/love making is so vivid, very well written, gorgeous photo, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 13-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much! Xo
Comment from Barry Penfold
Liked this a lot. The wording is perfect for the erotic setting. Well done and I hope it goes well in the contest. Take care and have a wonderful day . All the best
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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Liked this a lot. The wording is perfect for the erotic setting. Well done and I hope it goes well in the contest. Take care and have a wonderful day . All the best
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much! Xo