Lessons Learned and Spiritual
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Chasing Mr Ego"Do good and feel good poems
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Comment from ImaginosBuzzardoDesdinova
The ego of a narcissist is a potential mate's most annoying enemy. It gets in the way of a good relationship and blinds the one they care for from seeing all the positive and negative things in their relationship.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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The ego of a narcissist is a potential mate's most annoying enemy. It gets in the way of a good relationship and blinds the one they care for from seeing all the positive and negative things in their relationship.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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I thank you for the awesome review and kind comments for my
poem. I love the challenge of alternating only two rhymes, a little twist at the end, and "Respect" is a must. Thanks so much, my dear friend
Comment from Faith Williams
Congratulations on your win, Debi! I like that line, 'big egos don't correct', and I suspect he will not understand no matter how many times he listens to Aretha. Thanks for sharing. Again, congratulations.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Congratulations on your win, Debi! I like that line, 'big egos don't correct', and I suspect he will not understand no matter how many times he listens to Aretha. Thanks for sharing. Again, congratulations.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Hi Faith, you are so sweet and I appreciate the congrats. I also thank you for the awesome review and kind comments for my poem. I love the challenge of alternating only two rhymes, a little twist at the end, and "Respect" is a must. Thanks so much, my dear friend
Comment from June Sargent
Oh, I knew exactly which song you referred to and what type of men this poem described so perfectly. They sail through life causing shipwreck wherever they connect. Sooner or later, their callousness will come back to bite them. Meanwhile, we steer clear of them...
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Oh, I knew exactly which song you referred to and what type of men this poem described so perfectly. They sail through life causing shipwreck wherever they connect. Sooner or later, their callousness will come back to bite them. Meanwhile, we steer clear of them...
Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Hi June, I thank you for the awesome review and kind comments for my
poem. I love the challenge of alternating only two rhymes, a little twist at the end, and "Respect" is a must. Thanks so much, my dear friend
Comment from Kate McLennan
I love Aretha Franklin I really enjoyed everything about this poem! I loved the consistent rhythm throughout and loved the style of your rhyming scheme.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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I love Aretha Franklin I really enjoyed everything about this poem! I loved the consistent rhythm throughout and loved the style of your rhyming scheme.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Hi Kate, I thank you for the awesome review and kind comments for my.
poem. I love the challenge of alternating only two rhymes, a little twist at the end, and "Respect" is a must. Thanks so much, my dear friend
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Great artwork and nice presentation.
-You wrote a very good poem with
effective imagery, meter, and rhyme.
-You also tell a good story.
-You give good insight into her thoughts,
like "she would never qualify
For his high intellect."
-Very good comparison in the next line
with the fly.
-A very good concluding verse and
also addressing Aretha and her song.
-Very well done; good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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-Great artwork and nice presentation.
-You wrote a very good poem with
effective imagery, meter, and rhyme.
-You also tell a good story.
-You give good insight into her thoughts,
like "she would never qualify
For his high intellect."
-Very good comparison in the next line
with the fly.
-A very good concluding verse and
also addressing Aretha and her song.
-Very well done; good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Pam, I thank you for the awesome review and kind comments for my poem. I loved the challenge of alternating only two rhymes, a little twist at the end, and "Respect" is a must. I appreciate that you liked those parts of it too.
Thanks so much, my dear friend.
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You are very welcome, Debi. There are a number of forms with only two rhymes, and it is a challenge, but you made it work, along with "Respect!"
Comment from Gloria ....
Author this is a most interesting examination of two equally deceitful people. She pretended to be more shy than she actually was, and yet he, alone was held accountable for her deviousness.
I love Motown, and Aretha Franklin had a most interesting history herself. That was such a fascinating time in musical history.
Wishing you the best of luck in the voting booth.
Gloria
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Author this is a most interesting examination of two equally deceitful people. She pretended to be more shy than she actually was, and yet he, alone was held accountable for her deviousness.
I love Motown, and Aretha Franklin had a most interesting history herself. That was such a fascinating time in musical history.
Wishing you the best of luck in the voting booth.
Gloria
Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Hi Gloria, lol, I guess if you look at it from God's standards, then acting shyer than you are might be classified as equally deceitful, but I meant for it to show what desperation can do when a young girl gets caught in his evil
tradable be how everyone else saw it that way at all. And many just saw it for the challenging structure and the twist at the end with Aretha Franklin. However I - do love to hear all opiions.
Thank you so much for your thoughts on the poem.
Comment from Goodadvicechan
A cute picture! I like it.
It is hard to fall for someone who doesn't care for you but reject you.
She has tried to be soft. That doesn't help. Try to be shy, no use.
Try to cry as the last straw. That ends the relationship.
Although it is a sad ending, such fact is life.
Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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A cute picture! I like it.
It is hard to fall for someone who doesn't care for you but reject you.
She has tried to be soft. That doesn't help. Try to be shy, no use.
Try to cry as the last straw. That ends the relationship.
Although it is a sad ending, such fact is life.
Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 20-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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Hi Chan, it could have been any story but I mainly liked the lesson learned to demand respect and the challenge of the two sounds and a fun twist at the end w Aretha Franklin. Thanks dear friend.
Comment from Peitho
I enjoyed the progression and empowering and witty ending.
I appreciate how it illustrates how one can get sucked in and make sacrifices, like changing to fit a certain mold, without even realizing how detrimental it can be to their wellness. As an observer, it is so easy to judge and wonder why someone wouldn't demand respect or leave, but it isn't so simple. Or at least that's what I got out of it. :)
Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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I enjoyed the progression and empowering and witty ending.
I appreciate how it illustrates how one can get sucked in and make sacrifices, like changing to fit a certain mold, without even realizing how detrimental it can be to their wellness. As an observer, it is so easy to judge and wonder why someone wouldn't demand respect or leave, but it isn't so simple. Or at least that's what I got out of it. :)
Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 20-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Peitho, I thank you for the awesome review and kind comments for my poem. I love the challenge of alternating only two rhymes, a little twist at the end, and "Respect" is a must. Thanks so much, my dear friend
Comment from Paul McFarland
You have outlined the scenario that many women have gone through. You did a really good job with the repeat rhyme in each stanza. You should do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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You have outlined the scenario that many women have gone through. You did a really good job with the repeat rhyme in each stanza. You should do well in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Hi Paul, I thank you for the awesome review and kind comments for my poem. I love the challenge of alternating only two rhymes, a little twist at the end, and "Respect" is a must. Thanks so much, my dear friend
Comment from Aussie
A good lesson here. There will always be the haves and the have-nots. Depending on how one was brought up, respect for others or disdain for those thought to be beneath our intellect. Well done.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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A good lesson here. There will always be the haves and the have-nots. Depending on how one was brought up, respect for others or disdain for those thought to be beneath our intellect. Well done.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Hi Kay, I thank you for the awesome review and kind comments for my poem. I love the challenge of alternating only two rhymes, a little twist at the end, and "Respect" is a must. So I thank you for the six stars, respectfully, my dear friend.
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Hee, Hee, now we can see eye to eye!
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Haha! How are you doing?
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Still amazed at what I can see! The sharpness and the colours are amazing. How about you?
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One more eye to go but this
New lens on the first one is great! Its cool that.we are doing it together.
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"I see," said the blind man but he really didn't see at all! I do have a hole in the retina and would have to travel to the city. I am thinking about it. K xx
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Whatever you decide sweet friend, I am praying for you and if it helps, the retina part of mine on the first one went well. Hope that gives you hope sweet friend!
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I can see well without glasses now, just can't read fine print yet. Still thinking. I live in the country and would have a three-hour journey to the major hospital. I am traveling with you on our eye to eye trip! K xx