Bewitching Path
An evening walk21 total reviews
Comment from BethShelby
This is a very prettty form of poetry and I love the subject of taking a walk down a long winding path as night starts to fall and all the creature and fairies you encounter along the way. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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This is a very prettty form of poetry and I love the subject of taking a walk down a long winding path as night starts to fall and all the creature and fairies you encounter along the way. Nicely done.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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Thank you. Wouldn't it be nice if we could find that place?
Comment from Wendy G
With the atmosphere you created and the vivid imagery, both sight and sound, I was able to walk with you and see this scene, and hear the birds for myself - the skill of a fine poet. Well done!
Wendy
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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With the atmosphere you created and the vivid imagery, both sight and sound, I was able to walk with you and see this scene, and hear the birds for myself - the skill of a fine poet. Well done!
Wendy
Comment Written 10-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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I'm so glad you enjoyed our walk. Thanks so much, Wendy. Hugs to Sunny.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Great meter and rhyme in this poem about your walk on an enchanted path as night began to fall. You saw so many things one would not find normally. Great imagination Yvonne. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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Great meter and rhyme in this poem about your walk on an enchanted path as night began to fall. You saw so many things one would not find normally. Great imagination Yvonne. Nancy:)
Comment Written 10-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Nancy. Sometimes, my imagination works overtime. hahaha
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed your walk here Yvonne and felt I was with you as the sight and sounds filled your poem with magic. Those ancient trees and the wildlife in the sky and on the ground add to our experience when we go outside and enter the forest, a fine write, love Dolly x x.x
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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I enjoyed your walk here Yvonne and felt I was with you as the sight and sounds filled your poem with magic. Those ancient trees and the wildlife in the sky and on the ground add to our experience when we go outside and enter the forest, a fine write, love Dolly x x.x
Comment Written 10-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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Thank you. Walking in a forest is magical in its own way.
Comment from June Sargent
I enjoyed this fantastic journey into the enchanted woods where tiny folk danced as whippoorwills crooned. A magical experience that inspired me to try out this unique and complicated format. Not sure I'll succeed...
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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I enjoyed this fantastic journey into the enchanted woods where tiny folk danced as whippoorwills crooned. A magical experience that inspired me to try out this unique and complicated format. Not sure I'll succeed...
Comment Written 09-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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You will do it beautifully. I'm so glad you enjoyed my imaginary world.
Comment from aryr
This was a wonderful Lauranelle, damommy. The picture was great in that it enticed one to walk along the path. Your words took on a majikal sense of a deliberate one. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessings n Hugs!!
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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This was a wonderful Lauranelle, damommy. The picture was great in that it enticed one to walk along the path. Your words took on a majikal sense of a deliberate one. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessings n Hugs!!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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Thank you for this. Blessing and hugs to you as well.
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You are so welcome, Yvonne.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did an awesome job, Yvonne, with your club poem.
I loved reading it. Your words were well thought out and
painted a great picture for readers even if one hadn't been
included. Your rhymes worked perfectly. Great job, too, on
the smooth flow of words and lines. The repeated refrain fit in
seamlessly. I liked all the critters you encountered on this walk.
I liked the way you wrote whip-poor-wills. The inclusion of
the fairies added a whimsical element that was fun. You did a
great job with a complex style.
Thanks for participating, Jan
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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You did an awesome job, Yvonne, with your club poem.
I loved reading it. Your words were well thought out and
painted a great picture for readers even if one hadn't been
included. Your rhymes worked perfectly. Great job, too, on
the smooth flow of words and lines. The repeated refrain fit in
seamlessly. I liked all the critters you encountered on this walk.
I liked the way you wrote whip-poor-wills. The inclusion of
the fairies added a whimsical element that was fun. You did a
great job with a complex style.
Thanks for participating, Jan
Comment Written 09-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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Well, you know I live in my own little world. Thank you so much for taking that walk with me.
Comment from lyenochka
You did a super job with this Lauranelle poem! You made it tangible in so many ways like the sounds of whippoorwills and the texture of the forest " woods' thick velvet cloak," and sight of the moon and fairy folk!
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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You did a super job with this Lauranelle poem! You made it tangible in so many ways like the sounds of whippoorwills and the texture of the forest " woods' thick velvet cloak," and sight of the moon and fairy folk!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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Thank you. I appreciate that.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
I thought your poem was very well written. It had a good rhyming pattern, as you expected in the Authors note; I enjoyed reading it. I might try that pattern myself. You used descriptive language effectively. I felt like I was there. Great writing gets the most stars I have left! :))
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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I thought your poem was very well written. It had a good rhyming pattern, as you expected in the Authors note; I enjoyed reading it. I might try that pattern myself. You used descriptive language effectively. I felt like I was there. Great writing gets the most stars I have left! :))
Comment Written 09-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much for this. Yes, do try the form. You'll enjoy doing it. Thank you for the last of your stars. Makes them extra special.
Comment from royowen
It takes a lot of concentration to write these, particularly if it's not as normal as the commoner villanelle, it confused me at first to see incomplete lines, but well done, I don't thing think this worked as well a others, I'm not sure it fits a story style poem, well done for tackling it, blessings Roy
Typo, Some brush to see (an) enchanting...
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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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It takes a lot of concentration to write these, particularly if it's not as normal as the commoner villanelle, it confused me at first to see incomplete lines, but well done, I don't thing think this worked as well a others, I'm not sure it fits a story style poem, well done for tackling it, blessings Roy
Typo, Some brush to see (an) enchanting...
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Comment Written 09-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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Thanks, Roy.
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Welcome