Santa's Christmas Carol
The beginning...42 total reviews
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Terry, a truly enchanting and delightful story of the beginning of Santa Claus. I enjoyed reading.
I have one thought, at the beginning you included a boy and girl. Do you need these?
The next paragraph carried the story of the quality of the toys.
Just a thought.
Good luck in the contest. You have a contender here.
Mary
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Terry, a truly enchanting and delightful story of the beginning of Santa Claus. I enjoyed reading.
I have one thought, at the beginning you included a boy and girl. Do you need these?
The next paragraph carried the story of the quality of the toys.
Just a thought.
Good luck in the contest. You have a contender here.
Mary
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Mary, thank you for your review and your observation. My thought on the boy and girl was to try to bring it down to an individual and personal level to a kid. You are right. I may not have needed it, but if a grandmother (and one told she did), read it to a grandchild, I thought it might connect better. Thanks again, Terry.
Comment from Sarah Robin
I enjoyed your story. It almost made me believe in Santa! You have a great imagination. The piece is very well written. Good luck in the contest. Sarah
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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I enjoyed your story. It almost made me believe in Santa! You have a great imagination. The piece is very well written. Good luck in the contest. Sarah
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Sarah, thank you for the kind and fun (you should believe) review and the six stars!! Terry.
Comment from BethShelby
You have written and amazing story and at the beginning, I was believing every word of it. It is perfect for the fantasy writing contest and after reading this I won't be entering that contest because this fun story would be almost impossible to bear. It was such a fun story to read. You have a fantastic imagination and the ability to make sound believable.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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You have written and amazing story and at the beginning, I was believing every word of it. It is perfect for the fantasy writing contest and after reading this I won't be entering that contest because this fun story would be almost impossible to bear. It was such a fun story to read. You have a fantastic imagination and the ability to make sound believable.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Beth, you are so kind, and thank you for the review and the six stars! Terry.
Comment from strandregs
Fantastic fantasy.
A winner.
A a great story of immigration and integration and so full of heart warming moments. Exquisite.
Nice touch making the Jewish guy a nice guy.
And the father of father Christmas. Very appropriate.
:-))Z.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Fantastic fantasy.
A winner.
A a great story of immigration and integration and so full of heart warming moments. Exquisite.
Nice touch making the Jewish guy a nice guy.
And the father of father Christmas. Very appropriate.
:-))Z.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thank you for the wonderful review and the six stars! Terry.
Comment from Sanku
I thought I was reading the history behind a famous toy store like Hamleys
but later realised that i have been carried into the realms of fantasy and this is the story behind Santa Claus. Thank you very much for a different type reading experience.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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I thought I was reading the history behind a famous toy store like Hamleys
but later realised that i have been carried into the realms of fantasy and this is the story behind Santa Claus. Thank you very much for a different type reading experience.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thank you for very kind review and the six stars! Terry.
Comment from pome lover
well, that is some story. They're what I call, movers and shakers! whirlwind decisions, and voila! it all worked out.
Very interesting story, with dates, from the beginning. Great imagination and story and character development. Very good.
Katharine
I just reread this (9/28/2023)
What an imagination, and also the dates and tying everything together. Amazing. A wonderful fantasy entry. You deserved to win and also win All Time Best.
Katharine, again.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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well, that is some story. They're what I call, movers and shakers! whirlwind decisions, and voila! it all worked out.
Very interesting story, with dates, from the beginning. Great imagination and story and character development. Very good.
Katharine
I just reread this (9/28/2023)
What an imagination, and also the dates and tying everything together. Amazing. A wonderful fantasy entry. You deserved to win and also win All Time Best.
Katharine, again.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Katharine, I am delighted you enjoyed the story. Thank You. Terry.
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is a really good Christmas story. I enjoyed it very much. In fact, until I got to the part where John was the new Santa Clause, I thought I was reading an historical piece. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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This is a really good Christmas story. I enjoyed it very much. In fact, until I got to the part where John was the new Santa Clause, I thought I was reading an historical piece. Excellent work.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Mary, thank you for your wonderful review and for the six stars! Terry
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You are welcome.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Well, I must say, this is certainly a different type of fantasy story. It is very creative and skillfully written. It is rather long but worth taking the time to read. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Well, I must say, this is certainly a different type of fantasy story. It is very creative and skillfully written. It is rather long but worth taking the time to read. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Thank you for reading.
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, a retelling of the origin of Santa Claus, set years later in a world where Christmas exist, and giving toys on Christmas exists, but Santa does not. Which raises the question of why Santa would be needed? But, a very interesting tale. A bit long, after the reveal, things seemed to keep going.
Overall, I think the FanStory readers will enjoy, Religion was removed from the tale, and you touched on equity, which older folk like.
Good entry. Perhaps, the winning entry.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Hmm, a retelling of the origin of Santa Claus, set years later in a world where Christmas exist, and giving toys on Christmas exists, but Santa does not. Which raises the question of why Santa would be needed? But, a very interesting tale. A bit long, after the reveal, things seemed to keep going.
Overall, I think the FanStory readers will enjoy, Religion was removed from the tale, and you touched on equity, which older folk like.
Good entry. Perhaps, the winning entry.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Thank you for your review and the six stars! Terry
Comment from Julie G1
This is great! The writer has chosen a much loved character. The choice of apt and effective language and imagery has created an evocative and quite magical, but plausible, approach to Santa. Magic is in the air. This reader would appreciate reading more stories such as this.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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This is great! The writer has chosen a much loved character. The choice of apt and effective language and imagery has created an evocative and quite magical, but plausible, approach to Santa. Magic is in the air. This reader would appreciate reading more stories such as this.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Thank you I will see what I can do. Terry