Pilgrimage to a park
a peaceful experience36 total reviews
Comment from mermaids
Nature is so healing and your story brings the reader out into nature with you. Listening to the birds and just taking in the peacefulness is good for the soul.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Nature is so healing and your story brings the reader out into nature with you. Listening to the birds and just taking in the peacefulness is good for the soul.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Yes, nature and its peacefulness are good for the soul. It is healing and reviving. Thank you for relating to my story and for the great comments.
Have a happy Halloween!
Jesse
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Thanks for the notes, Jesse, and for sharing the story.
-I enjoyed reading it. It flows well with vivid details of your say with your friend.
-I can only imagine what those Sequoia trees look like!
-I like the image you use to describe the experience:
"I knew I was home when I could smell the living spirit of the trees" and
"Birds trilled arpeggios singing songs about how nature came to be."
-I am glad you have this friendship and share things in common.
-A very good conclusion to your story, too.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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-Thanks for the notes, Jesse, and for sharing the story.
-I enjoyed reading it. It flows well with vivid details of your say with your friend.
-I can only imagine what those Sequoia trees look like!
-I like the image you use to describe the experience:
"I knew I was home when I could smell the living spirit of the trees" and
"Birds trilled arpeggios singing songs about how nature came to be."
-I am glad you have this friendship and share things in common.
-A very good conclusion to your story, too.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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Thank you, Pam, for this detailed and introspective review! I am thrilled to accept your sixer and glad you liked so much of what you read in this story. Have a wonderful weekend!
Jesse
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Jesse. You have a good rest of your weekend, too!
Comment from humpwhistle
I'm glad you're getting out, Jesse, and I'm also glad you have a friend like David. Nature itself is a balm. All living things share a harmony and a rhythm. Nature recharges our batteries.
I'm glad you're working toward your goal. I know you'll reach it. I hope David does, too.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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I'm glad you're getting out, Jesse, and I'm also glad you have a friend like David. Nature itself is a balm. All living things share a harmony and a rhythm. Nature recharges our batteries.
I'm glad you're working toward your goal. I know you'll reach it. I hope David does, too.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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Thanks for dropping by, Lee. You nailed it when you wrote that nature recharges our batteries! Have a great weekend!
Peace be with you,
Jesse
Comment from Mrs. KT
Good morning, Jesse!
I was with you and David on your adventure. How wonderful that the two of you were able to visit Freshwater Park. Sounds absolutely peaceful and welcoming.
My favorite paragraph:
Our shared friendship, and love of nature, keep us going back to where the trees, birds, and other creatures reach out to us and offer peace and tranquility.
Two little edits suggested:
I said to David(,) "can (Can) you hear the sweetness of the songs from the birds?" He answered sadly(,) "no, (No,) I can't." It was at this moment that I realized how we shared disabilities, he could not hear the birds and I could not walk.
Thank you for sharing!
"Nose to toes!" :)
diane
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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Good morning, Jesse!
I was with you and David on your adventure. How wonderful that the two of you were able to visit Freshwater Park. Sounds absolutely peaceful and welcoming.
My favorite paragraph:
Our shared friendship, and love of nature, keep us going back to where the trees, birds, and other creatures reach out to us and offer peace and tranquility.
Two little edits suggested:
I said to David(,) "can (Can) you hear the sweetness of the songs from the birds?" He answered sadly(,) "no, (No,) I can't." It was at this moment that I realized how we shared disabilities, he could not hear the birds and I could not walk.
Thank you for sharing!
"Nose to toes!" :)
diane
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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Good afternoon, Diane! I love your attention to detail and for choosing the parts you loved best! Thanks for the editing suggestions, I haven't gotten around to changing this yet. But I will!
Have a wonderful weekend!
Jesse
Comment from amahra
Talking about stopping and smelling the roses, you guys went up and beyond that. Thank you for this beautiful Ode to taking the time to enjoy nature.
"...smell the living spirit of the trees." [Love this line, very poetic.]
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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Talking about stopping and smelling the roses, you guys went up and beyond that. Thank you for this beautiful Ode to taking the time to enjoy nature.
"...smell the living spirit of the trees." [Love this line, very poetic.]
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much for the exceptional rating and for the fantastic review! I am happy you liked my romp in the park! Thanks for seeing the poetic in this story!
Jesse
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Good luck and hoping for the best on your recovery!
David sounds like a great friend.
Nature and the great outdoors , I think, has fabulous restorative powers.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Good luck and hoping for the best on your recovery!
David sounds like a great friend.
Nature and the great outdoors , I think, has fabulous restorative powers.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Yes, Wayne, nature has healing powers and David and I seek nature to cure all of our woes and sorrows from living on the edge.
David is a wonderful companion and friend.
Thanks for all your good wishes.
Jesse
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was about so much more than a walk in nature. It's about seeing the world through a different perspective. Yours is going places that are normally not wheelchair accessible. His is the world of silence. I really enjoyed this. Gretchen
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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This was about so much more than a walk in nature. It's about seeing the world through a different perspective. Yours is going places that are normally not wheelchair accessible. His is the world of silence. I really enjoyed this. Gretchen
Comment Written 24-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Thank you, Gretchen, for seeing the unique perspective of going to the grand outdoors and for David and me to enjoy it in our own way. I am happy you enjoyed this piece.
Have a wonderful day,
Jesse
Comment from LJbutterfly
I am so glad you wrote about a beautiful day in Freshwater Park. Your choice of words gives the feeling of peace, joy, and relaxation. Sitting on picnic benches under large Sequoia trees sounds so delightful. It's good you and David compliment each other. Hopefully you will soon be telling us you are walking. Best wishes on your healing journey.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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I am so glad you wrote about a beautiful day in Freshwater Park. Your choice of words gives the feeling of peace, joy, and relaxation. Sitting on picnic benches under large Sequoia trees sounds so delightful. It's good you and David compliment each other. Hopefully you will soon be telling us you are walking. Best wishes on your healing journey.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Thanks, LJ. I will keep you updated on my healing journey and look forward to walking at least with a walker very soon!
On Wednesday I will be walking with a walker down the hallway to the end. I cannot wait!
Thank you for your encouraging review and for hitting the nail on the head with this one. I am forever grateful for the support of so many of you here on Fan Story. Thanks!
Have a lovely evening.
Jesse
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Jesse,
David sounds like a good friend. I know the feeling you mentioned, I get it too. Also, when I go to the beach. The ocean has that effect on me. Well done.
Gypsy hugs
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Hello, Jesse,
David sounds like a good friend. I know the feeling you mentioned, I get it too. Also, when I go to the beach. The ocean has that effect on me. Well done.
Gypsy hugs
Comment Written 24-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Hi Gypsy.
Yes, David is a wonderful friend he and I enjoy the great outdoors including the beach. Thank you for your kind words.
I appreciate your lovely Gypsy hugs.
Jesse
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Jesse, this lovely piece of prose made me smile. I could feel your joy and sense of peace in every descriptive line. Isn't it wonderful that our differences can bring us together as much as our similarities?!
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Jesse, this lovely piece of prose made me smile. I could feel your joy and sense of peace in every descriptive line. Isn't it wonderful that our differences can bring us together as much as our similarities?!
Comment Written 24-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Hello Janice. Yes, we share so much in common and love the great outdoors on top of this. I am glad I made you smile.
It makes me happy that you could feel joy and a sense of peace in every line I wrote.
Have a wonderful rest of your week,
Jesse