Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
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Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading your wonderful and beautiful poem. It is interesting and entertaining to read. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good job! I like it. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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I have enjoyed reading your wonderful and beautiful poem. It is interesting and entertaining to read. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good job! I like it. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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Thanks!
Comment from Liz Westfall
I liked this! Sonnets are usually not my cup of tea. However, I think you are a great writer. Perhaps there could be less "fluff" regarding word choice, but overall it was a smooth read. Nice.
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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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I liked this! Sonnets are usually not my cup of tea. However, I think you are a great writer. Perhaps there could be less "fluff" regarding word choice, but overall it was a smooth read. Nice.
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Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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Thanks!
Comment from Gloria ....
Excellent sonnet here. Your metre is very good as is the formation of the sonnet, with an excellent turn and concluding couplet.
Of course the theme is always an important reminder to us all.
One question is this a sonnet a week from 2020, or this year? I think it's a grand personal challenge.
Thank you for sharing. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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Excellent sonnet here. Your metre is very good as is the formation of the sonnet, with an excellent turn and concluding couplet.
Of course the theme is always an important reminder to us all.
One question is this a sonnet a week from 2020, or this year? I think it's a grand personal challenge.
Thank you for sharing. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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Hi Gloria, thank you for your validation. I am, in my sophomoric sonnet writing mode, attempting to hone my skill in this poetic genre the remainder of 2022. I am a free verser first and foremost and have struggled with meter - so I thought why not tackle the most challenge of metric poetry?
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a philosophical Shakespearean sonnet about judgment and sin. Sometimes errors are accidental, not chosen. The third goes from human to Divine thought
Did you mean expunged and not oppunged?
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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This is a philosophical Shakespearean sonnet about judgment and sin. Sometimes errors are accidental, not chosen. The third goes from human to Divine thought
Did you mean expunged and not oppunged?
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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Hi Joan, in some respects either word could be functional.
I used oppunged as past tense: oppugned; call into question the truth or validity of something or someone.
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James,
That word is oppugned not oppunged.
Joan
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Joan, myy bad phat fingers typo --however, fortunately the poem was correctly written. Have a rainbows and lollipops kind of Friday! Jim
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Hey Jim, I have the same problem, especially when I am using my phone.
Same to you.
Joan
Comment from Anne Johnston
Whereas, in fact, we 'oft judge this and that;
yet me, nor he or she like tit for tat."
Your sonnet is well done and the picture you have chosen is perfect. It is so easy for us to judge others without knowing what really is going on in their lives, but usually the faults we find in others can be found in us as well.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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Whereas, in fact, we 'oft judge this and that;
yet me, nor he or she like tit for tat."
Your sonnet is well done and the picture you have chosen is perfect. It is so easy for us to judge others without knowing what really is going on in their lives, but usually the faults we find in others can be found in us as well.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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Anne thank you for your affirming my effort.
Comment from royowen
You're absolutely right, how many of us don't obey that simple commandment, "do unto others as you would have them do unto you" happy to see others defamed, but when it comes on us, we protest innocence, or, "I'm only human". Beautifully written Jim, articulate and wonderfully worded, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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You're absolutely right, how many of us don't obey that simple commandment, "do unto others as you would have them do unto you" happy to see others defamed, but when it comes on us, we protest innocence, or, "I'm only human". Beautifully written Jim, articulate and wonderfully worded, blessings Roy
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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Roy, thank you for affirming my effort.
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Welcome
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
-Excellent poem about judgement. God is the final judge.
-- your last paragraph is funny.
-Your descriptive words flow well expressing a clear mental image. Well done!
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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-Excellent poem about judgement. God is the final judge.
-- your last paragraph is funny.
-Your descriptive words flow well expressing a clear mental image. Well done!
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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Thank you for affirming my effort!
Comment from Monica Chaddick
Your poem is well written and it flows beautifully. You chose a beautiful piece of artwork to go along with your poem. Not only does it go along with your poem, but it sends a message on its on, as well.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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Your poem is well written and it flows beautifully. You chose a beautiful piece of artwork to go along with your poem. Not only does it go along with your poem, but it sends a message on its on, as well.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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Monica, thank you for affirming my effort!
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
Such truth and insight in old English style of speech! The sonnet is not an easy kind of poem to write, but you write them well. You selected well you picture to illustrate your words.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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Such truth and insight in old English style of speech! The sonnet is not an easy kind of poem to write, but you write them well. You selected well you picture to illustrate your words.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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Verna thank you for affirming my effort.
Comment from lyenochka
You always have some very deep philosophical theme to your poems which make them a pleasure to read. I think this sonnet gives us pause to consider about judging others and remembering God as ultimate judge and merciful to us. The ending couplet is humorous to point out human penchant for "tit for tat."
Your meter has improved so much. Some words may be stressed differently by our different speech. Here are words which are trochaic and not iambic to me: "mind you," "uproar," "high roads" and "always."
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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You always have some very deep philosophical theme to your poems which make them a pleasure to read. I think this sonnet gives us pause to consider about judging others and remembering God as ultimate judge and merciful to us. The ending couplet is humorous to point out human penchant for "tit for tat."
Your meter has improved so much. Some words may be stressed differently by our different speech. Here are words which are trochaic and not iambic to me: "mind you," "uproar," "high roads" and "always."
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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lyenochka, you are AWESOME, AMAZING, A WINNER. Thank you!
Corrective action is taken with much appreciation!