Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 65 "Mountain sights"Musings of an old man - 2022
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Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Oh how you made me long to get on the road and start traveling again.
This reminds me of our last trip west to the Redwoods and going north into Oregon and beyond! I also love the style of this poem, as the repeating in every stanza is so much fun to read. You words were so descriptive, rhyming was spot on and just a pleasure as the picture and the words went so beautifully together! Thank you for sharing this.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2022
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Oh how you made me long to get on the road and start traveling again.
This reminds me of our last trip west to the Redwoods and going north into Oregon and beyond! I also love the style of this poem, as the repeating in every stanza is so much fun to read. You words were so descriptive, rhyming was spot on and just a pleasure as the picture and the words went so beautifully together! Thank you for sharing this.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2022
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Debi Thank you, I pulled these from memories of growing up on the Northwest coast of Washington state, sights and sounds that still live on.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
I like this poem very much. You mastered the form! It seemed a bit of a challenge so far, I have not tried to write one, but I might, but you deserve a high vote for this one.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2022
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I like this poem very much. You mastered the form! It seemed a bit of a challenge so far, I have not tried to write one, but I might, but you deserve a high vote for this one.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2022
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Jake thanks, give a try. To help myself I built a template - that seemed to help me alot.
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i usually do a template when I try more formal poems, it helps a lot. Then I usually get the rhyming words down first then work the rest of the poem around the rhymes.
Comment from Sally Law
Beautifully penned and illustrated poem in this unique form. I so enjoyed reading this and the trip to the waterfall's edge.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the challenge,
Sal :))
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2022
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Beautifully penned and illustrated poem in this unique form. I so enjoyed reading this and the trip to the waterfall's edge.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the challenge,
Sal :))
Comment Written 24-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2022
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Hello dear Sal! Thank you. I image from your pasty you can draw the same visions. Thanks for your validation.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a beautifully written poem. The message is clearly presented, and the author's notes reaffirm what the poem has stated. The rhyme scheme works. Thanks for explaining in the author's notes this type of poem. It is new to me. The visual fits perfectly. The font size could be a bit larger for easier reading. Growing up near the mountains I know what you speak of, and I enjoyed your poem.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2022
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This is a beautifully written poem. The message is clearly presented, and the author's notes reaffirm what the poem has stated. The rhyme scheme works. Thanks for explaining in the author's notes this type of poem. It is new to me. The visual fits perfectly. The font size could be a bit larger for easier reading. Growing up near the mountains I know what you speak of, and I enjoyed your poem.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2022
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Sandra, thank you! I will watch the pica size of the font moving forward. I delight that you have memories embedded from your own mountain experiences. Be well!
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You are welcome. Be well too!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Whatever! Trijans may be remains a total pot of confusion. First lines to be the same??? but not necessarily. I applaud your taking on the challenge, and myself for leaving it to inquisitive minds like yours.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2022
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Whatever! Trijans may be remains a total pot of confusion. First lines to be the same??? but not necessarily. I applaud your taking on the challenge, and myself for leaving it to inquisitive minds like yours.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Tom, hot enough for you???
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As to the heat maybe a Training camp for life after death???
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Hee Hee, Roger that!
Comment from jaded831
Great imagery, great flow, an interesting form I am not familiar with, so I can't comment on your form. The picture you chose is perfect. Together they get a thumbs up. Well done and have a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2022
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Great imagery, great flow, an interesting form I am not familiar with, so I can't comment on your form. The picture you chose is perfect. Together they get a thumbs up. Well done and have a wonderful day.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2022
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jaded831, Thanks and you enjoy the best that life has to offer and just pass on all the rest....👍👍
Comment from Paul McFarland
Good job with an interesting form. Being from Maine, this is a common sight for me. Especially in northern Maine where there use to be log drives on the rivers. It was a common sight to see logs or pulp wood on the shores of many streams. The log drives disappeared over fifty years ago.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2022
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Good job with an interesting form. Being from Maine, this is a common sight for me. Especially in northern Maine where there use to be log drives on the rivers. It was a common sight to see logs or pulp wood on the shores of many streams. The log drives disappeared over fifty years ago.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2022
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Paul, yes I have seen the rugged northern Maine waterways, they remind me of many I have seen in the Pacific Northwest when I grew up.
Comment from dellsworthpoet
An interesting poetry form and it works well with the subject chosen. The flow is good. The poem stays on point. The presentation fits well with the poem.
Suggestion:
If I read the rhyme scheme right then I don't understand the starting a/b/a/b in verses 1 and 2. In both lines 1 & 3 don't seem to rhyme.
Thanks for an interesting read.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2022
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An interesting poetry form and it works well with the subject chosen. The flow is good. The poem stays on point. The presentation fits well with the poem.
Suggestion:
If I read the rhyme scheme right then I don't understand the starting a/b/a/b in verses 1 and 2. In both lines 1 & 3 don't seem to rhyme.
Thanks for an interesting read.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2022
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Dellsworth, gee whizzers! What a goof up, I change the first stanza at the eleventh hour and dropped the ball. Thanks!!!!!! I fixed it ... I am so very grateful!
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You are most welcome. Fresh eyes sometimes see things we don't notice. Peace.
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
I loved this poem with its splendid imagery for sight and sound. The onomatopoeia adds to the sounds when read aloud. The last stanza was my favorite.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2022
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I loved this poem with its splendid imagery for sight and sound. The onomatopoeia adds to the sounds when read aloud. The last stanza was my favorite.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2022
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Verna, I so appreciate your validation! I am honored to receive one of your six stars.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your club response read well, JLR. The picture is beautiful.
I like the details of your lines--they created great imagery
of this wonderful place. I like how you changed the first line
of each verse rather than a strict repeat.
Thanks for participating, Jan
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2022
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Your club response read well, JLR. The picture is beautiful.
I like the details of your lines--they created great imagery
of this wonderful place. I like how you changed the first line
of each verse rather than a strict repeat.
Thanks for participating, Jan
Comment Written 23-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2022
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Jan, thank you for your validation