The Food Chain
Kill or be killed - survival of the quickest. (250 words)17 total reviews
Comment from Mary Vigasin
No doubt it is a thought-provoking well-written story.
Does killing one species justified to save another? Jessica enjoys killing off predators to save the birds. Where others may see it as the natural order of things. Animals kill for survival.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes
Mary
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No doubt it is a thought-provoking well-written story.
Does killing one species justified to save another? Jessica enjoys killing off predators to save the birds. Where others may see it as the natural order of things. Animals kill for survival.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
Comment from RodG
Lisa, I like this story a lot because (1) its setting is unique, somewhere in bushland (Australia?) where there is an eco center, (2) you characterize Jessica so well, tormented by guilt for a hit & run until she realizes she has done birds a favor, and (3) the ironical ending. Well-written in only 250 words! Good luck in the contest.
Rod
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Lisa, I like this story a lot because (1) its setting is unique, somewhere in bushland (Australia?) where there is an eco center, (2) you characterize Jessica so well, tormented by guilt for a hit & run until she realizes she has done birds a favor, and (3) the ironical ending. Well-written in only 250 words! Good luck in the contest.
Rod
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
Comment from Pantygynt
You present us with a tangle of moral values in this little piece. It was a great read but my view, for what it is worth is that we should not try to attribute human morality to animals, wild or tame.
Jessica should have stopped after running over the cat in case it needed putting down. I do not find her love for her own cat contradictory at all.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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You present us with a tangle of moral values in this little piece. It was a great read but my view, for what it is worth is that we should not try to attribute human morality to animals, wild or tame.
Jessica should have stopped after running over the cat in case it needed putting down. I do not find her love for her own cat contradictory at all.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Yes, she should've gone to check the feral cat, and if she's that concerned about the bird population perhaps she shouldn't own a cat herself. I bet her Siamese cat has dined on the odd avian.
Comment from dellsworthpoet
An interesting read. The flow is good. The narrative stays on point. The story is a strange tell of going to the dark side, but in animal husbandry sense. The serial killer reveal is a neat twist at the end.
Thanks for a good read.
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An interesting read. The flow is good. The narrative stays on point. The story is a strange tell of going to the dark side, but in animal husbandry sense. The serial killer reveal is a neat twist at the end.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
Comment from Wendy G
Isn't it funny - we can love animals so much, but then we are happy when predators get killed, so that they don't kill others eg birds. It seems such a contradiction within ourselves. I hate to think of animals suffering, and experiencing fear when they go to the abattoirs - but I still eat meat. Your story is well-written, and raises similar questions. "Torn between devastation and delight" seems to be an apt summary of this internal paradox. Well written, and best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Isn't it funny - we can love animals so much, but then we are happy when predators get killed, so that they don't kill others eg birds. It seems such a contradiction within ourselves. I hate to think of animals suffering, and experiencing fear when they go to the abattoirs - but I still eat meat. Your story is well-written, and raises similar questions. "Torn between devastation and delight" seems to be an apt summary of this internal paradox. Well written, and best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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I tried to concentrate on portraying that contradiction in my story.
I'm like you concerning meat - it's too tasty to give up but I hate the thought of animals suffering.
Comment from royowen
It's funny how we look at things, and it's true that these introduced animals are wreaking in a neighbourhood environment they were never meant to exist in, with very few enemies of their own, beautifully written Jenny, blessings Roy
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It's funny how we look at things, and it's true that these introduced animals are wreaking in a neighbourhood environment they were never meant to exist in, with very few enemies of their own, beautifully written Jenny, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
Whew! I wasn't expecting a story like this. The visual you displayed makes one think she is an animal lover. However, that last line reveals an unexpected callousness~She smiled, adding another dead predator to her list of 'kills'.
I like that the story is written in large font. It made it easier to read. It is a well-written but disarming story.
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Whew! I wasn't expecting a story like this. The visual you displayed makes one think she is an animal lover. However, that last line reveals an unexpected callousness~She smiled, adding another dead predator to her list of 'kills'.
I like that the story is written in large font. It made it easier to read. It is a well-written but disarming story.
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Comment Written 18-Jun-2022