Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 46 "Flash of Lightning"Musings of an old man - 2022
24 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
I like how you show us the protective hawk sheltering her fledgling in the first part. Your bridge line gives us a rainbow which connects to the final part that shows us the blessings of enduring hope whether a hawk or a human.
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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I like how you show us the protective hawk sheltering her fledgling in the first part. Your bridge line gives us a rainbow which connects to the final part that shows us the blessings of enduring hope whether a hawk or a human.
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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lyenochka, thank you, I truly love the club prompts. They often expose me to new poetic styles that are so intriguing and tackle. Thank you for your review and comments.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
This is well written and creative. You did a great job with the prompt. I was unaware of this style of poetry, thanks for enlightening me. I respond positively to the flow , which is effortless.
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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This is well written and creative. You did a great job with the prompt. I was unaware of this style of poetry, thanks for enlightening me. I respond positively to the flow , which is effortless.
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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K.L. thank you! I truly love the club prompts. They often expose me to new poetic styles that are so intriguing and a test of skill to tackle. Thank you for your review and comments.
Comment from royowen
A beautifully written form I've never seen before, the middle works well, it's works a little like an envoi, a sort of statement that underlines the whole poem, it's great to see you being adventurous in your writing Jim, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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A beautifully written form I've never seen before, the middle works well, it's works a little like an envoi, a sort of statement that underlines the whole poem, it's great to see you being adventurous in your writing Jim, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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Roy, thank you! So intriguing and a test of skill to tackle.
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Well done
Comment from Sugarray77
Hello Jim. I enjoyed reading your verse and the cleverly crafted Puente form. I enjoy poems that use a certain criteria in content and form. It really challenges the writer to make it all happen. Great job.
Melissa
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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Hello Jim. I enjoyed reading your verse and the cleverly crafted Puente form. I enjoy poems that use a certain criteria in content and form. It really challenges the writer to make it all happen. Great job.
Melissa
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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Hi Mel! Great to read your comments. So intriguing and a test of skill to tackle, these prompts are true lessons I love.
Comment from QC Poet
Not familiar with the style of the poem structure but enjoyable poem to read and rate Thanks for Sharing your work and poetry in this poem format Blessings to you
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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Not familiar with the style of the poem structure but enjoyable poem to read and rate Thanks for Sharing your work and poetry in this poem format Blessings to you
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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QC, thank you.
Comment from estory
Nice use of this free verse form to give us this poem about perseverance, and overcoming the struggles of life to get into that space of light, hope. Life is tenacious. That's what this poem tells us. I like the natural sound of the voice here. estory
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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Nice use of this free verse form to give us this poem about perseverance, and overcoming the struggles of life to get into that space of light, hope. Life is tenacious. That's what this poem tells us. I like the natural sound of the voice here. estory
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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estory, thank you for your review. So intriguing and a test of skill to tackle, this poetic style was a great lesson to undertake..
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written poem you have penned for the Potlatch Poetry Club. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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This is a very well written poem you have penned for the Potlatch Poetry Club. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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Thank you Teri!
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
JLR:
Your excellent poem touts this hawk's strengths. This is a lovely chapter in the life of a noble bird.
I really like the 'bending,' not yielding phrase.
Excellent work.
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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JLR:
Your excellent poem touts this hawk's strengths. This is a lovely chapter in the life of a noble bird.
I really like the 'bending,' not yielding phrase.
Excellent work.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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Cindy, thank you! So intriguing and a test of skill to tackle, I very much enjoyed unpacking this. What a a fun lesson in our world of poetic styles that are seldom seen.
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You?re welcome.
Comment from Beck Fenton
I have difficulty with this poem as my mind tries to unite the two stanzas even though you told me they would be related but different feeling. Reading it finds me contemplating the identity of "her" in the second stanza. Keeping her anonymous intrigues me. Well done in this Puente offering.
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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I have difficulty with this poem as my mind tries to unite the two stanzas even though you told me they would be related but different feeling. Reading it finds me contemplating the identity of "her" in the second stanza. Keeping her anonymous intrigues me. Well done in this Puente offering.
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 22-May-2022
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Beck, that is the beauty in this style of poem. The "she" in the second stanza very well could be the hawk or it could be a little old woman in revery or a teen bursting through the challenges of young love.
Comment from JoannaN
You created a hauting image, of despair, fear, danger, which contrasts with the optimistic image of rainbow, as a symbol of hope. This bridge is well-done and creative.
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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You created a hauting image, of despair, fear, danger, which contrasts with the optimistic image of rainbow, as a symbol of hope. This bridge is well-done and creative.
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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JoannaN, Thank you. I enjoyed this writing prompt!