Show, Don't Tell - part V
actions louder than words?21 total reviews
Comment from Spitfire
Hopefully, all writers on this site are aware of this rule. Excellent excellent examples. I like the point you make of not letting physical attributes do all the work. Also creating a cheat sheet. Psychiatrists always pay attention to a patient's voiceless signals.
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Hopefully, all writers on this site are aware of this rule. Excellent excellent examples. I like the point you make of not letting physical attributes do all the work. Also creating a cheat sheet. Psychiatrists always pay attention to a patient's voiceless signals.
Comment Written 01-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Observation is key. more folk should watch around them and become more attune. Sometimes things are written so unrealistically that I lose interest almost immediately.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Gareth, absolutely. Showing is the most important tool in a writer's arsenal, but it also one of the most difficult skills to get right. Thanks a lot for sharing this with us. Ulla:)))
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Hi Gareth, absolutely. Showing is the most important tool in a writer's arsenal, but it also one of the most difficult skills to get right. Thanks a lot for sharing this with us. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 01-May-2022
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Many thanks, Ulla. G
Comment from Earl Corp
I found this to be very a very helpful piece of work and have bookcased it for further use. I appreciate you sharing this with us here in Fanstory. Very nice job.
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I found this to be very a very helpful piece of work and have bookcased it for further use. I appreciate you sharing this with us here in Fanstory. Very nice job.
Comment Written 01-May-2022
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Glad you find it useful, Earl. G
Comment from K. Lang-Slattery
A great addition to the series about showing vs telling. I especially like the idea of the cheat sheet.
Suggestions:
. ". . has. It will fall flat as the reader won't care." I think the final sentence will be more powerful if you join it with the preceding as in: "If the reader isn't invested, it won't matter how action-packed the story is, or how many twists and turns it has, the reader won't care."
. The final line kind of hangs there. It's a good sentence, but perhaps could be better placed in another paragraph. Ending with the prompt is fine.
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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A great addition to the series about showing vs telling. I especially like the idea of the cheat sheet.
Suggestions:
. ". . has. It will fall flat as the reader won't care." I think the final sentence will be more powerful if you join it with the preceding as in: "If the reader isn't invested, it won't matter how action-packed the story is, or how many twists and turns it has, the reader won't care."
. The final line kind of hangs there. It's a good sentence, but perhaps could be better placed in another paragraph. Ending with the prompt is fine.
Comment Written 01-May-2022
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Many thanks. G
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Wherever I can, I try to use an action tag instead of a speech tag. I hope that helps my readers see what my characters are doing and are like. Thank you, again for helping us become better authors.
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Wherever I can, I try to use an action tag instead of a speech tag. I hope that helps my readers see what my characters are doing and are like. Thank you, again for helping us become better authors.
Comment Written 01-May-2022
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Much appreciated, barbara. G
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
Thank you for continuing these invaluable posts. I have already learned a tremendous amount of writing techniques to explore and put into action. Using the exercises for practice has been challenging, but necessary in becoming a better writer.Thanks for sharing .
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Thank you for continuing these invaluable posts. I have already learned a tremendous amount of writing techniques to explore and put into action. Using the exercises for practice has been challenging, but necessary in becoming a better writer.Thanks for sharing .
Comment Written 01-May-2022
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Glad you're getting something out of them. G
Comment from Ric Myworld
Thanks for sharing more of your very good advice that I'm sure I'll use to improve my tendency of telling no matter how hard I try not to. Thanks for sharing.
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Thanks for sharing more of your very good advice that I'm sure I'll use to improve my tendency of telling no matter how hard I try not to. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-May-2022
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Much appreciated as always, Ric. G
Comment from Shirley McLain
This instruction was great. I have a terrible time showing the body language. You did a wonderful job, and I, for one, appreciate your instruction. Thank you. Shirley
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This instruction was great. I have a terrible time showing the body language. You did a wonderful job, and I, for one, appreciate your instruction. Thank you. Shirley
Comment Written 01-May-2022
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Many thanks for the great response. G
Comment from Wayne Fowler
"Excellent council," I said, my eyebrows stretching to my scalp.
I liked what you said, and how you said it. Great work.
Best wishes and good luck with your book.
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"Excellent council," I said, my eyebrows stretching to my scalp.
I liked what you said, and how you said it. Great work.
Best wishes and good luck with your book.
Comment Written 01-May-2022
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LOL. Many thanks, Wayne. G
Comment from Tom Horonzy
You are always glad to extend your knowledge. Will such advice work on what I see as too many 3-5-3 and 5-7-5 poems? S contest composition of fifty words. Who does that, and why?
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You are always glad to extend your knowledge. Will such advice work on what I see as too many 3-5-3 and 5-7-5 poems? S contest composition of fifty words. Who does that, and why?
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Comment Written 01-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Not a big fan of the short stuff! lol
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We agree.