Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Tsking with a frown"Musings of an old man - 2022
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Comment from Michele Harber
This is absolutely perfect as an Earth Day poem, and the lovely image enhances it beautifully. Of course, even without the image, your vivid and descriptive phrases, like "fingerlings of deep shadows," "rivers downward flow from frothy creeks," and "rains cascade on lush meadowlands" paint a very clear visual on their own. Your rhyme selection is excellent. I was particularly impressed by "resplendent"/"ascendent" and "ascending"/"rending."
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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This is absolutely perfect as an Earth Day poem, and the lovely image enhances it beautifully. Of course, even without the image, your vivid and descriptive phrases, like "fingerlings of deep shadows," "rivers downward flow from frothy creeks," and "rains cascade on lush meadowlands" paint a very clear visual on their own. Your rhyme selection is excellent. I was particularly impressed by "resplendent"/"ascendent" and "ascending"/"rending."
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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Michele, thank you!
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You're very welcome!
Comment from joann r romei
You did an amazing job with following the prompt and tribute to our beautiful earth. The descriptions were very clear and vivid, I did not see any errors.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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You did an amazing job with following the prompt and tribute to our beautiful earth. The descriptions were very clear and vivid, I did not see any errors.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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Joann, Thank you!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
How does a dictator take hold of anyplace in the world today. Don't the people know they can be in charge. Haiti is a mess, and I think there is no way for it and Venezuela to recover.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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How does a dictator take hold of anyplace in the world today. Don't the people know they can be in charge. Haiti is a mess, and I think there is no way for it and Venezuela to recover.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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Tom so true!
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a smooth and lyrical write, striking in verse and presentation in its entirety - fully compliant with the prompt. Best wishes in the contest...
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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In my opinion, a smooth and lyrical write, striking in verse and presentation in its entirety - fully compliant with the prompt. Best wishes in the contest...
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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Thank you Eve!
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You are very welcome, JLR...Eve
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello JLR a good day to you, I hope this finds you well. I liked your Earth Day writing prompt entry, nice execution. Good job and Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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Hello JLR a good day to you, I hope this finds you well. I liked your Earth Day writing prompt entry, nice execution. Good job and Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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Thank you very much! I truly value your validation.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
It is an abomination what we continue to do to our planet, and you have described it from the viewpoint of Mother Nature herself. Nicely done on this Earth Day 2022.
One question about the last line of the first stanza, not sure what's going on with the punctuation.
Happy Earth Day!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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It is an abomination what we continue to do to our planet, and you have described it from the viewpoint of Mother Nature herself. Nicely done on this Earth Day 2022.
One question about the last line of the first stanza, not sure what's going on with the punctuation.
Happy Earth Day!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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Pam, yep that one was weird, so foxed it, I hope.
Comment from Wendy G
Your poem is a cry from a heart for a small country that is bearing the brunt of a lot of serious issues at every level, both internal and external. Suggestion: change the second "long" to "deep" to avoid repetition.
Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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Your poem is a cry from a heart for a small country that is bearing the brunt of a lot of serious issues at every level, both internal and external. Suggestion: change the second "long" to "deep" to avoid repetition.
Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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Wendy, what a wonderful suggestion! I missed that one :)
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That's good - I am glad you are not offended. Some people don't like suggestions, and sometimes they might intend to repeat a word for emphasis. Cheers. Best wishes.
Wendy
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
' Tsking with a frown', is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. Penned with talent and skill. This poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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' Tsking with a frown', is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. Penned with talent and skill. This poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
Comment Written 21-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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Thank you the good wishes.
You're very welcome.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
You did a nice job with the prompt as this poem is filled with images of nature.
The wildly descriptive language paints a clear picture of what earth day is all about.
The rhymes don't feel forced and they created a pace that is just right.
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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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You did a nice job with the prompt as this poem is filled with images of nature.
The wildly descriptive language paints a clear picture of what earth day is all about.
The rhymes don't feel forced and they created a pace that is just right.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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K.L. Thank you, not my best for certain. twelve stanzas are not enough in my estimate.
Comment from Boogienights
You bring awareness to the Earths problems, in a wonderful poetic way. I like what you say and the picture you chose to go with it. A great contest entry, best of luck. :)
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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You bring awareness to the Earths problems, in a wonderful poetic way. I like what you say and the picture you chose to go with it. A great contest entry, best of luck. :)
Comment Written 21-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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Thank you.