Hospice Nursing
My love for hospice!!!20 total reviews
Comment from Terry Broxson
This is a very thought-provoking story for this contest, good luck. The phrase "actively dying" struck me as an oxymoron. But it makes complete sense. It takes special people to do this work, thank you!
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This is a very thought-provoking story for this contest, good luck. The phrase "actively dying" struck me as an oxymoron. But it makes complete sense. It takes special people to do this work, thank you!
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Thank you Terry for reviewing and your fantastic comments.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
i have to commend you for doing a very difficult job and especially having empathy for the family going through such a terrible time.
My dad died in hospice at home and the nurses could not have been more caring and considerate of the family.
When dad died, she asked my new boyfriend, now husband, if he would help clean up dad and the bedding while my brother and I were in a separate room.
Your telling of your work with the dying and family is so well-written and caring.
Good luck in the contest.
Mary
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i have to commend you for doing a very difficult job and especially having empathy for the family going through such a terrible time.
My dad died in hospice at home and the nurses could not have been more caring and considerate of the family.
When dad died, she asked my new boyfriend, now husband, if he would help clean up dad and the bedding while my brother and I were in a separate room.
Your telling of your work with the dying and family is so well-written and caring.
Good luck in the contest.
Mary
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much Mary for reviewing and your amazing comments.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hospice Nursing
by aryr
Hello, Aryr, I didn't know you are a hospice nurse, thank you for your service, it's so necessary. I feel bad for dying people who don't have the privilege to have one.
My aunt died of pancreatic cancer. She had been in a lot of pain for months but the last few days she was out of it due to the medication. Her little body was down to skin and bones. It seemed to be a long process. She did have a hospice nurse and it was as you described. Her son stayed by her side night and day and did not want to let her go, I think that's why my aunt stuck around so long.
I'm learning to be a bhuddism. My thinking about death is that we don't died ... We believe death is a natural part of the life cycle. We believe that death simply leads to rebirth in some source ... Personally, I believe I will go back to nature.. in the sea, earth, sky, in my family and friends....life never ends.
You did an excellent job in expressing yourself. Well done!
Check it out...
Did you know that if ambulances were driving then so would the funeral (divers? ) Something to think about!
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Hospice Nursing
by aryr
Hello, Aryr, I didn't know you are a hospice nurse, thank you for your service, it's so necessary. I feel bad for dying people who don't have the privilege to have one.
My aunt died of pancreatic cancer. She had been in a lot of pain for months but the last few days she was out of it due to the medication. Her little body was down to skin and bones. It seemed to be a long process. She did have a hospice nurse and it was as you described. Her son stayed by her side night and day and did not want to let her go, I think that's why my aunt stuck around so long.
I'm learning to be a bhuddism. My thinking about death is that we don't died ... We believe death is a natural part of the life cycle. We believe that death simply leads to rebirth in some source ... Personally, I believe I will go back to nature.. in the sea, earth, sky, in my family and friends....life never ends.
You did an excellent job in expressing yourself. Well done!
Check it out...
Did you know that if ambulances were driving then so would the funeral (divers? ) Something to think about!
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Wow, Gypsy that was sad but great. I am so glad you are studying buddhism, it is always helpful that we know were we are going after the life we have lived. I really appreciate your reviewing and your amazing comments. Blessed be n hugs!
Comment from damommy
I can see our jobs were very similar. Being a hospice nurse would be hard emotionally, never mind the physical part. But it's another profession that helps the family and their loved one at such a time.
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I can see our jobs were very similar. Being a hospice nurse would be hard emotionally, never mind the physical part. But it's another profession that helps the family and their loved one at such a time.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much Yvonne for reviewing and your fantastic comments.
Comment from Spitfire
The writing prompt says fiction, but this sounds like the real thing to me.
A friend of mine is applying for this kind of work. He currently is a manager at an assisted living home. I enjoyed reading the hardships about this profession.
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The writing prompt says fiction, but this sounds like the real thing to me.
A friend of mine is applying for this kind of work. He currently is a manager at an assisted living home. I enjoyed reading the hardships about this profession.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
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Thank you for reviewing and your great comments.
Comment from royowen
What a very interesting job, you had a great challenge Alie, it would be relatively easy with some of my friends that have passed in recent times, they really looked forward to dying, even in pain, one testified two weeks before he died in church to loving all the people as family in our church but rejoicing in the fact. He had been dying with stage 4 stomach cancer diagnosed only 10 weeks before. Yes, he completely changed from being a cheeky sort of guy, to a loving, joyfilled man during this period, I have seen these people surrounded by angels I believe. Thanks for sharing Alie, blessings Roy
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What a very interesting job, you had a great challenge Alie, it would be relatively easy with some of my friends that have passed in recent times, they really looked forward to dying, even in pain, one testified two weeks before he died in church to loving all the people as family in our church but rejoicing in the fact. He had been dying with stage 4 stomach cancer diagnosed only 10 weeks before. Yes, he completely changed from being a cheeky sort of guy, to a loving, joyfilled man during this period, I have seen these people surrounded by angels I believe. Thanks for sharing Alie, blessings Roy
Typo : So would the funeral (divers) ?
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much Roy for reading, reviewing and your fantastic comments. Sorry but I have retired from hospice! Blessings.
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That?s OK
Comment from robyn corum
Alie,
One of SILs did Hospice care for several years. I could not imagine the patience and love and care and time it took for her to do that and always admired her. I know how those families adored her. *smile* I have to imagine your families feel the same.
To be there at such a difficult time, to answer all the questions and explain all those baffling things, to handle the medication, to ease the transitions ... and so much more. I see those ladies (and gentlemen, too, I'm sure) as angels on Earth. Bless you!
Only one thing - I did not understand the last lines about the ambulance and funeral home drivers. Can you explain that?
Otherwise, there were a few nits, but nothing that disturbed my pleasure. Thank you!
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Alie,
One of SILs did Hospice care for several years. I could not imagine the patience and love and care and time it took for her to do that and always admired her. I know how those families adored her. *smile* I have to imagine your families feel the same.
To be there at such a difficult time, to answer all the questions and explain all those baffling things, to handle the medication, to ease the transitions ... and so much more. I see those ladies (and gentlemen, too, I'm sure) as angels on Earth. Bless you!
Only one thing - I did not understand the last lines about the ambulance and funeral home drivers. Can you explain that?
Otherwise, there were a few nits, but nothing that disturbed my pleasure. Thank you!
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much Robyn for reviewing and your amazing comments. The last line was something I learned, if the ambulance drivers went out in rough weather so did the funeral home drivers.
Comment from karenina
First, love the art you chose to represent this writing. I see it as the release, the letting go... I have profound respect for those who devote their life to hospice care. It is the care of the entire family. You expressed this well! I was engaged with your thoughts on faith. I have attended the death of those who were avowed atheists. It's so difficult to meet them where they are when we see faith as such a comfort. In every case, where possible, I too encouraged the family to say final words of comfort to the dying. It seemed, in my experience, to begin the process of accepting the fate we all must face one day. Moving write, my friend. Karenina
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First, love the art you chose to represent this writing. I see it as the release, the letting go... I have profound respect for those who devote their life to hospice care. It is the care of the entire family. You expressed this well! I was engaged with your thoughts on faith. I have attended the death of those who were avowed atheists. It's so difficult to meet them where they are when we see faith as such a comfort. In every case, where possible, I too encouraged the family to say final words of comfort to the dying. It seemed, in my experience, to begin the process of accepting the fate we all must face one day. Moving write, my friend. Karenina
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Thank you Karenina for reviewing and your amazing comments.
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Thank you for the work you do. It is about the hardest I know!
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Oh dear, Karenina, I have retired from nursing, I know, once a nurse always a nurse but now it is general first aid at which ever park I am at.
Comment from SimianSavant
Hi, thanks for sharing this. I'd like to offer a little help with proofreading.
Many years ago, I gave up the desire to do regular ICU nursing and changed **my career/speciality** to Hospice. <= should hospice be capitalized?
Have you ever met a person that <= should be WHO, not THAT
truly believed in the Bible and all of it's teachings? <= should be ITS, not IT'S
It is difficult to try to force the beliefs <= THE beliefs sounds odd. I would simply write: force belief, or force beliefs
Several times, I would arrive at the patient's home, the family was confused and terrified, the patient was peaceful, confused or even unconscious. <= this reads as a run-on sentence but is easily fixed. Try: sometimes, WHEN I would arrive.. AND the patient..
I would call the office, report that I had an actively dying person <= insert comma
I would at least check on how the family were <= WAS (not were): the word "family" is singular, not plural
If they were alright then I change them to next day. <= this sentence doesn't make any sense; consider reworking it
It is difficult to watch the dying process, <= change comma to semicolon, as it separates two independent clauses
some people can and others can not. <= CANNOT
There is no magikal solution <= magical
that a wave of a wand can make someone die. It takes patience and dedication for both the nurse and the family. <= this might makes it sound like they are trying to make someone die. Perhaps say: that a wave of a wand can end prolonged suffering
I was a firm believer that the family should give the patient whether awake or unconscious permission to go. <=awkward. Try: that regardless of whether they were awake or unconscious, the family should give the patient permission to go towards the light, they would miss them, but it was okay.
>>That it was okay with them to go << this text is redundant and can be eliminated; bridge the remaining part of the sentence with the previous one, as demonstrated above
The family could participate in the bathing. I would inform the funeral home.
**I would suggest ending the piece here. It is a much stronger sentence to end on than the following sentences below, in my opinion.**
Who were very respectful of the deceased. <= this sentence is a fragment and, if kept, could be bridged with the previous sentence.
Did you know that if ambulances were driving then so would the funeral divers? <= drivers
Hope this is helpful to you, and thank you for the read! (Apple just tried to autocorrect *read* to *weed*. Geez, do you give people pot for palliative care? Does Siri know something I don't? Lol.)
Best,
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Hi, thanks for sharing this. I'd like to offer a little help with proofreading.
Many years ago, I gave up the desire to do regular ICU nursing and changed **my career/speciality** to Hospice. <= should hospice be capitalized?
Have you ever met a person that <= should be WHO, not THAT
truly believed in the Bible and all of it's teachings? <= should be ITS, not IT'S
It is difficult to try to force the beliefs <= THE beliefs sounds odd. I would simply write: force belief, or force beliefs
Several times, I would arrive at the patient's home, the family was confused and terrified, the patient was peaceful, confused or even unconscious. <= this reads as a run-on sentence but is easily fixed. Try: sometimes, WHEN I would arrive.. AND the patient..
I would call the office, report that I had an actively dying person <= insert comma
I would at least check on how the family were <= WAS (not were): the word "family" is singular, not plural
If they were alright then I change them to next day. <= this sentence doesn't make any sense; consider reworking it
It is difficult to watch the dying process, <= change comma to semicolon, as it separates two independent clauses
some people can and others can not. <= CANNOT
There is no magikal solution <= magical
that a wave of a wand can make someone die. It takes patience and dedication for both the nurse and the family. <= this might makes it sound like they are trying to make someone die. Perhaps say: that a wave of a wand can end prolonged suffering
I was a firm believer that the family should give the patient whether awake or unconscious permission to go. <=awkward. Try: that regardless of whether they were awake or unconscious, the family should give the patient permission to go towards the light, they would miss them, but it was okay.
>>That it was okay with them to go << this text is redundant and can be eliminated; bridge the remaining part of the sentence with the previous one, as demonstrated above
The family could participate in the bathing. I would inform the funeral home.
**I would suggest ending the piece here. It is a much stronger sentence to end on than the following sentences below, in my opinion.**
Who were very respectful of the deceased. <= this sentence is a fragment and, if kept, could be bridged with the previous sentence.
Did you know that if ambulances were driving then so would the funeral divers? <= drivers
Hope this is helpful to you, and thank you for the read! (Apple just tried to autocorrect *read* to *weed*. Geez, do you give people pot for palliative care? Does Siri know something I don't? Lol.)
Best,
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Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much for reviewing and your great comments.
Comment from Giftedone.Eric Wallace .
Good topic very emotionally Felt thank you for sharing this piece during this piece stay focused and I wish you well but she will keep up the good work thanks for sharing
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Good topic very emotionally Felt thank you for sharing this piece during this piece stay focused and I wish you well but she will keep up the good work thanks for sharing
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Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much for reviewing and your great comments.
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You're welcome