Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
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Comment from Tpa
A very courageous endeavor of writing a mysterious story in thirty-three words. I enjoyed the ending of the bright light we hope to walk through one day. GOOD LUCK IN THE CONTEST.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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A very courageous endeavor of writing a mysterious story in thirty-three words. I enjoyed the ending of the bright light we hope to walk through one day. GOOD LUCK IN THE CONTEST.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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Tpa, thank you, I agree that would be quite acceptable.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
You did a very good job with those few words, and it made me have goose-bumps. The imagery in your words are vivid, putting me there at the scene. Very well done, and good luck in the contest :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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You did a very good job with those few words, and it made me have goose-bumps. The imagery in your words are vivid, putting me there at the scene. Very well done, and good luck in the contest :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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thank you very much!
Comment from Melodie Michelle
You sure said a whole lot in those 33 words my friend! The storyline was very interesting and the imagery was awesome;-)The storyline held my attention throughout the piece!
Thanks so much for sharing this well written piece with us and many blessings to you;-)
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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You sure said a whole lot in those 33 words my friend! The storyline was very interesting and the imagery was awesome;-)The storyline held my attention throughout the piece!
Thanks so much for sharing this well written piece with us and many blessings to you;-)
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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Thank you, very much I value your validation.
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;-)
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of your work reminisces the process of dying.
The work highlights a prelude to the process, which begins with a diminishing candour of the five senses; an opened doorway; and an illumination of brilliant white light that navigates heavenwards.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of transition anecdotes.
Excellent work. Bravo.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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The objective correlative of your work reminisces the process of dying.
The work highlights a prelude to the process, which begins with a diminishing candour of the five senses; an opened doorway; and an illumination of brilliant white light that navigates heavenwards.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of transition anecdotes.
Excellent work. Bravo.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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Thank you
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Life after death? I pray it is so. Have I read this to be what is written of?
And please, since thirty-three words limit us how is what is penned a dampening versus an enlightening?
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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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Life after death? I pray it is so. Have I read this to be what is written of?
And please, since thirty-three words limit us how is what is penned a dampening versus an enlightening?
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Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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Yes the process of death and life afterwards is mysterious. Is it or isn't it? We know not. Is life just a diminishment of self or the beginning of enlightenment?
Comment from Thatguypk
Very nice piece, with a beautiful and appropriate photo to accompany. I'm assuming the transition is from this life to the spiritual world at the moment of death? I like the notion that the doorway is set within a beautiful forest. An enjoyable read. Thanks.
PK
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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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Very nice piece, with a beautiful and appropriate photo to accompany. I'm assuming the transition is from this life to the spiritual world at the moment of death? I like the notion that the doorway is set within a beautiful forest. An enjoyable read. Thanks.
PK
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Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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PK thanks, yes I agree the title might best be At Transition... I appreciate how you read this.