Never Saw It Coming
first person flash fiction31 total reviews
Comment from Realist101
Oh my God. G, I sure hope this isn't some omen. I often think, what would I do if I knew something would literally end our existence. I saw a movie call Melancholy. It's like this story... highly depressing. All too possible. And your ending is perfect.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Oh my God. G, I sure hope this isn't some omen. I often think, what would I do if I knew something would literally end our existence. I saw a movie call Melancholy. It's like this story... highly depressing. All too possible. And your ending is perfect.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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All too probable, if you ask me. they may have the right idea depending on how things go down...
Much appreciated, G
Comment from Spitfire
Too busy to look up from their i-phones, etc. Yes, that would be the generation now in their pre-teens, I'm thinking. But the older generation saw it coming and tried to prepare for a world not so pretty as supported by the imagery of slithering snakes. No fornification for sure. Who would want to bring children into the 'new' world. (Actually, that's why my daughter decided not to have children) Interesting how they spent the last days. One would expect the civilized to start praying!
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Too busy to look up from their i-phones, etc. Yes, that would be the generation now in their pre-teens, I'm thinking. But the older generation saw it coming and tried to prepare for a world not so pretty as supported by the imagery of slithering snakes. No fornification for sure. Who would want to bring children into the 'new' world. (Actually, that's why my daughter decided not to have children) Interesting how they spent the last days. One would expect the civilized to start praying!
Comment Written 14-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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I know a lot of folk who seriously consider the parenting issue. I have a 10 year old daughter and I wonder what things will be like for her. Right now has had a massive impact on her.
All the best
G
Comment from aryr
Wow, G this was great. Fantastic and amazing were words that come to mind. I really enjoyed how these people gathered seventeen years ago and were considered lawless those many years. The reversal was now know and the lawless became more lawless. However the end of time is the end of time for all. I agree that one can only wait. Very well done and greatly enjoyed.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Wow, G this was great. Fantastic and amazing were words that come to mind. I really enjoyed how these people gathered seventeen years ago and were considered lawless those many years. The reversal was now know and the lawless became more lawless. However the end of time is the end of time for all. I agree that one can only wait. Very well done and greatly enjoyed.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Many thanks for the great response and rating. G
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You are most welcome, G.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is great. I read two novels when I was growing up about the death of grass and the consequences. One of them featured a small community that had isolated itself, and protected itself from being overrun - this reminds me of these.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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This is great. I read two novels when I was growing up about the death of grass and the consequences. One of them featured a small community that had isolated itself, and protected itself from being overrun - this reminds me of these.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Many thanks once again. G
Comment from Shirley McLain
Great story and very intense. You did a good job writing it. I never saw a mistake. I think it is scary, especially the way our world is now. You just never know. Have a blessed evening. Shirley
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Great story and very intense. You did a good job writing it. I never saw a mistake. I think it is scary, especially the way our world is now. You just never know. Have a blessed evening. Shirley
Comment Written 14-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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It doesn't seem too much of a stretch at times, sadly. Who knows? G
Comment from BethShelby
Interesting scenario. This from a survivor's point of view and all the living in survival mode for seventeen years for nothing only to find the world was ending anyways. However you might want be careful with fornicating. The Bible planned to take a few out alive.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Interesting scenario. This from a survivor's point of view and all the living in survival mode for seventeen years for nothing only to find the world was ending anyways. However you might want be careful with fornicating. The Bible planned to take a few out alive.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Children would be a drain on the limited resources, i guess. Many thanks GMG
Comment from estory
This was a great post. I liked the journalistic, flat emotionless delivery. It gave the story great perspective, as if we were watching this unfold on tv news. You had some great descriptions, and I really liked the part when you describe the clan firing at the people approaching them, no questions asked. You get that sense of desperation there. And then the hopelessness of the last scene, when the mountains crack and the end of the world ends all hope of survival. It is all a pipe dream. It puts life here in perspective. It asks the question, what is it all about? what is it all for? estory
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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This was a great post. I liked the journalistic, flat emotionless delivery. It gave the story great perspective, as if we were watching this unfold on tv news. You had some great descriptions, and I really liked the part when you describe the clan firing at the people approaching them, no questions asked. You get that sense of desperation there. And then the hopelessness of the last scene, when the mountains crack and the end of the world ends all hope of survival. It is all a pipe dream. It puts life here in perspective. It asks the question, what is it all about? what is it all for? estory
Comment Written 14-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Yeah, I tried to think of a monologue or diary entry. That flat bored tonality that Harrison Ford used in the bleak voice-over on some cuts of Blade Runner.. lol many thanks G
Comment from damommy
There are more survivalist groups than we know about. But as you pointed out, in the end, what does it matter when there's nothing to stop it? All the preparation won't change a thing. I wouldn't want to be one of the few last people left.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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There are more survivalist groups than we know about. But as you pointed out, in the end, what does it matter when there's nothing to stop it? All the preparation won't change a thing. I wouldn't want to be one of the few last people left.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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I think I'd want to go in the first wave, without feeling a thing preferably. G
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Good point.
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is very well written, as usual. Your imagery is great. The theme is a sad commentary on the direction our world could be heading. It gives us all something to ponder. Great job.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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This is very well written, as usual. Your imagery is great. The theme is a sad commentary on the direction our world could be heading. It gives us all something to ponder. Great job.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Very sad indeed. Who knows what's around the next bend? Many thanks G
Comment from Earl Corp
Wow waiting seventeen years for the end of the world, and without fornicating. That would definitely suck. Your story was very descriptive and I could picture everything as you wrote it. Very nice job.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Wow waiting seventeen years for the end of the world, and without fornicating. That would definitely suck. Your story was very descriptive and I could picture everything as you wrote it. Very nice job.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Many thanks, Earl. Much appreciated. G