Farewell, TV Dog
Another good-bye16 total reviews
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, this is an interesting short. Is it really family fiction or something else. I wonder if this is 3rd or 2nd person narration. I think 3rd because we are told what Janice is thinking as she burns the TV dog.
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Hmm, this is an interesting short. Is it really family fiction or something else. I wonder if this is 3rd or 2nd person narration. I think 3rd because we are told what Janice is thinking as she burns the TV dog.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2021
Comment from prettybluebirds
I found this rather interesting and certainly different. I remember the TV animals and always wanted one when I was a kid. This is nicely written and I didn't spot any errors.
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I found this rather interesting and certainly different. I remember the TV animals and always wanted one when I was a kid. This is nicely written and I didn't spot any errors.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2021
Comment from lauralumummu
This is a very well-written story and something I can really relate to. I feel like that about inanimate objects that invoke memories for me. One thing if you could make the font a little bigger it would be easier to read and you will get more reviews. You can do so in the advanced editor. All the best, Laura.
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This is a very well-written story and something I can really relate to. I feel like that about inanimate objects that invoke memories for me. One thing if you could make the font a little bigger it would be easier to read and you will get more reviews. You can do so in the advanced editor. All the best, Laura.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2021
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
The title of the story is crystal clear, still I am sorry, I could not make out the order of expressiveness of the theme and plot development, my weakness reveals, anyway, I need some flesh in the plot development to make the story appreciable, interesting and your purpose of achievement of writing; well said, well done; keep writing. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR
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The title of the story is crystal clear, still I am sorry, I could not make out the order of expressiveness of the theme and plot development, my weakness reveals, anyway, I need some flesh in the plot development to make the story appreciable, interesting and your purpose of achievement of writing; well said, well done; keep writing. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR
Comment Written 14-Dec-2021
Comment from Earl Corp
When I first started posting on Fanstory I learned you need to double space between paragraphs to make it easier for reviewers to read. This was shortv enough that it wasn't hard to read. Very nice job.
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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2021
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When I first started posting on Fanstory I learned you need to double space between paragraphs to make it easier for reviewers to read. This was shortv enough that it wasn't hard to read. Very nice job.
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Comment Written 14-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2021
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I'll try to remember to double space when I post to fanstory. Thank you.
Comment from Sherry Asbury
Poor tv dog! Poor Janice. How heartwrenching...as I was sure she would see his determination in that one eye and spare his life... It is a very touching story, well told. I respect everyone's right to rid their life of needed objects, but this saddened me. Merry Christmas, dear Poet.
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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2021
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Poor tv dog! Poor Janice. How heartwrenching...as I was sure she would see his determination in that one eye and spare his life... It is a very touching story, well told. I respect everyone's right to rid their life of needed objects, but this saddened me. Merry Christmas, dear Poet.
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Comment Written 14-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2021
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Thank you. It's tough to end things.