Comment from L. Kalere

Excellent

I think you're at your best with children's stories, Sandra. It's totally professional looking and the story-line is like no other (so far anyway). How could kids not love it? You've got me curious and looking forward to the next installment. Congratulations!
Linda

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021

Aw, what a lovely thing to say, Linda. I do enjoy writing for children. I'm delighted you enjoyed reading it. There are three, possibly four more chapters to this story. The children get to have some wild fun while at the same time helping the whale. Thank you so much for your wonderful review! Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx

Comment from JudyE

Excellent

This promises to be very interesting - and intriguing. I couldn't find anything that needed fixing or adjusting. I'm sure your friend's children will be thrilled to receive this in due course

Cheers

Judy

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021

Aw, thanks, Judy! I'm going to have a lot of fun writing this one. I'm really hoping Poppy and Odi like their adventure when I give it to them. Warm hugs, my friend! :)) Sandra xx
Don't think you are going to get away lightly with me from now on. There is another novel waiting in the wings ready for me to get started on in the near future. Lol! xxxx

reply by JudyE on 24-Aug-2021

The poetry will make nice light reading for me and I'll start saving energy for the next novel!! Take care. Judy

Comment from amahra

Excellent

Yes, it was very, very, nice reading. I always enjoy children's entertainment. It reminds me of sitting with my children while they were watching their cartoons. The artwork was stunning. I'm sure your friend will like the book.

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021

Thank you, Amahra, for such a lovely review. I'm so pleased it brought back some nice memories. There will be three more chapter in the story, I hope to see what your thoughts will be on those, as well. :)) Warm hugs, my friend. Sandra xx

Comment from June Sargent

Excellent

What an adorable story in a poem you've created for your grandchildren! And in the cube format no less! You've hooked us in with this adventure. Can't wait to see how the children will help this poor whale in pain...

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021

Thank you, June! There are three more parts to this adventure, so I look forward to reading your thoughts on those, too!! Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

Sandra, This is a well written children's poem you have penned about the whale with a broken tooth. You used great descriptive words and great imagery from the art work you chose. I like the format you used also. I can't wait to read the next one! love and blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021

Thank you so much, Teri, for this fabulous review! I'm delighted you enjoyed reading it. There will be three/four more parts in this adventure. I look forward to reading what your thoughts will be on those! Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from dellsworthpoet

Excellent

This simple poem is good for a beginning reader.

The short lines and simple rhyme scheme add to the reading potential for young children.

I have no suggestions.

Thank you for sharing. Delightful.

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021

This is for five and six year olds. Poppy is beginning to read now, and doing very well. Your comments put a smile on my face as they are really encouraging. Thank you so much! :)) Sandra xx

reply by dellsworthpoet on 24-Aug-2021

You are welcome.

Comment from l.raven

Exceptional

Hi Sandra, took that rest did ya???...LOL...I was wondering where you were those three days...

I love this poem...and story told...
and yeah there will be a few challenges a long the way...breathing being one of them...and of course...they may want too knock him out cold...before sticking their hands in his mouth...and if you think getting your own teeth is a rough pull...HELLoooooo....

that's a wonderful thing your are doing for Alexis...I do remember her...I'm sure her grandchildren will love it...

veryyyyyy well written my amazing friend and writer...
and I love the pictures as well...I so love your poem...
sending much love from across the sea...Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021

I am resting, Linda!!!! Lol. I just love to write for children, so in a way, this is resting. I'm busy editing my novel as well, so the big 'rest' will be end of November when we go on holiday! LOL.
The children are going to have such fun with the whale while trying to pull his tooth out. That is going to be one ginormous tooth!! As for putting just their hands in his mouth..................... Hmm, LOL!!!
The idea for this story came from my own tooth being broken. I'm waiting to see the dentist, but he's ill!! I'm popping the pills nicely!
Thank you, my darling friend, for that golden star! You always put a big smile on my face. Love you lots, sweet one. I'll get on the emails a.s.a.p hugs, love and bunches of sweet things coming your way! :)) Sandra xxx

reply by l.raven on 24-Aug-2021

Hi Sandra, I think it's wonderful you write the kids books for them...it's a gift they'll have a lifetime...

and I really love the story behind this one
...it's going to be great...

no wonder you keep going like a Duracell battery...your on speed...get that tooth fix...

love this story told my beautiful you...can't wait to see how they get the tooth out...and you are soooooooooo welcome...love you in bunches...smiling the biggest hugs back at you...Linda xxoo

reply by l.raven on 24-Aug-2021

Hi Sandra, I think it's wonderful you write the kids books for them...it's a gift they'll have a lifetime...

and I really love the story behind this one
...it's going to be great...

no wonder you keep going like a Duracell battery...your on speed...get that tooth fix...

love this story told my beautiful you...can't wait to see how they get the tooth out...and you are soooooooooo welcome...love you in bunches...smiling the biggest hugs back at you...Linda xxoo

Comment from 8upchef

Excellent

This is absolutely fantastic! You have really created a wonderful flow, that lends itself to the storyline very well. I love the subject, it takes me back to the children's books that I enjoyed as a kid and then read to my kids. Super job!

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021

What a fabulous review! Thank you so much. I'm delighted you have enjoyed reading this first chapter. There are three more parts, so I hope you will return to read them each week. :)) Lol. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx

Comment from Robert Zimmerman

Exceptional

Hi Sandra.

This is outstanding. The story is well written about the poor whale with a broken tooth. The children now get to help. This is well-conceived as they are going to help the whale to relieve his pain. You are teaching about the creature and the children's concern for him.

The illustrations are wonderful for the story line. You do an outstanding job with the CUBE16 style. I appreciate your attribution in the notes.

I'm working on a chap book with exclusively CUBE16 poetry. I have a bunch that need rewritten and edited.

Robert

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021

AW, thank you so much, Robert! Your Cube 16 is such a brilliant format for my children's stories. Especially for those starting to read. It's simple with short lines and verses. I've listened to some children reading my last story of Scout and the Unicorn. I think this Cube 16 will be the way to go with my future children's rhymed books. Thank you for inventing it! Of course I shall also acknowlege you in each book. That way you will become as famous as Shakespeare and his sonnets! :))
I'm glad you have enjoyed part one, there are three more to come. Thank you, also, for the golden sixth star, my friend! Warm hugs. Sandra xxx

reply by Robert Zimmerman on 24-Aug-2021

Hi Sandra.

You are very welcome for the six stars. I enjoyed not only the narrative, but the premise up the whale with a broken tooth. That's very creative.

Thank you for your very kind and complimentary words about the CUBE16 style. I am working on a chapbook of CUBE poetry. Doing a lot of re reading and editing when necessary. In case I don't make it to the lofty heights of Will Shakespeare, thank you for that anyway. I do have one other piece of work that has done extremely well, and I will send you a private message about that.

Robert

reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021

I will look out for it. It does sound very interesting! Sandra xx

Comment from rspoet

Exceptional

Hello Sandra,
A wonderful story for the kids with excellent rhymes and meter.
The best poetry is bested upon personal experience.
A broken tooth? Hmmmm. I wonder where that came from. :)
While many whales have teeth, there aren't many whale dentists
and fewer orcadontists, as orca-oral surgery is quite dangerous.
Hopefully, the mermaid is related to Flossie and can preform a bit of magic.
Perhaps they can tie some dental Flossie around the tooth,
attach it to a dolphins tail and yell, SHARK!.
Works all the time.
Best wishes to all including the whale.
Robert

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021

LOL!! LOL!! You are too funny!! Liz suggested I feed Rapier to the whale, and now you want to bring in Flossie! Can you imagine a book with all my heroes in it together, Mildred, Flossie, Rapier (has to be the baddie) to name a few. Perhaps Sir John could put in an appearance! Lol.
I love the idea of shouting Shark! LOL, but don't forget, a shark is one of their friends!
Thank you so much for this super fabulous review, Robert, and the sixth golden star. Warm hugs, my fun friend. :)) Sandra xxx