Father's Shoes
A true story.26 total reviews
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This is a very well-written poem about your Father's shoes. It is whimsical to the point of nostalgia. There is quite a bit of that floating around, but it also sings with your rhyming words.
Ralf
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This is a very well-written poem about your Father's shoes. It is whimsical to the point of nostalgia. There is quite a bit of that floating around, but it also sings with your rhyming words.
Ralf
Comment Written 22-Jul-2021
Comment from Senyai
Hi Mystery Writer,
Aww, this is so sweet and I can see those are big shoes to fill, your father's shoes!
With each boy staring down into the closet at those big brown worn out shoes and wondering what the man was like who filled them every day, walking about living his life. I think your mother's tradition was ingenious, frankly!
An original, artfully crafted poem that will do very well in the contest!
Senyai
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Hi Mystery Writer,
Aww, this is so sweet and I can see those are big shoes to fill, your father's shoes!
With each boy staring down into the closet at those big brown worn out shoes and wondering what the man was like who filled them every day, walking about living his life. I think your mother's tradition was ingenious, frankly!
An original, artfully crafted poem that will do very well in the contest!
Senyai
Comment Written 22-Jul-2021
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is an excellent entry for the Shoes contest. Your poem is quirky, but totally believable, and I find it a wonderful tradition that the whole family will include the patriarch in special occasions by the wearing of his shoes.
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This is an excellent entry for the Shoes contest. Your poem is quirky, but totally believable, and I find it a wonderful tradition that the whole family will include the patriarch in special occasions by the wearing of his shoes.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
Comment from zanya
This is truly a gem in the realms of poetic inspiration and rhyming to booth ! Tells tales of family gatherings where 'those old pair of shoes' take pride of place - has to be in the winners enclosure
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This is truly a gem in the realms of poetic inspiration and rhyming to booth ! Tells tales of family gatherings where 'those old pair of shoes' take pride of place - has to be in the winners enclosure
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
Comment from E. Denison
Excellent entry for this contest - a true story poem with an engaging narrative and very smooth rhyme scheme. This was an enjoyable read. Good luck in the competition.
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Excellent entry for this contest - a true story poem with an engaging narrative and very smooth rhyme scheme. This was an enjoyable read. Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
Comment from royowen
You brought back memories that I'd forgotten from my childhood, lacerated feet from protruding nails, hammered flat by something similar to a blacksmith's anvil. Written in very professional style in tetrameter and aabb rhyming, a most fluid poem, not common unfortunately, good luck, blessings Roy
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You brought back memories that I'd forgotten from my childhood, lacerated feet from protruding nails, hammered flat by something similar to a blacksmith's anvil. Written in very professional style in tetrameter and aabb rhyming, a most fluid poem, not common unfortunately, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
What a touching poem about your father's shoes. It was very sentimental to read. I've had several special moments remembering my dad's treasures, too; I'll always remember is his love for horses, tractors.
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What a touching poem about your father's shoes. It was very sentimental to read. I've had several special moments remembering my dad's treasures, too; I'll always remember is his love for horses, tractors.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
Comment from dellsworthpoet
A tale of tradition. Many things go generation to generation, but this is quite touching. And the question becomes will they ever fill grandfather's shoes.
A very nice read. Good rhymes, consistent sentiment, smooth flow.
Thank you for sharing.
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A tale of tradition. Many things go generation to generation, but this is quite touching. And the question becomes will they ever fill grandfather's shoes.
A very nice read. Good rhymes, consistent sentiment, smooth flow.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
Comment from Janet Foor
"Father's Shoes" is a wonderful story to share.
Excellent rhyming couplets.
I enjoyed reading each line.
Powerful message for us all.
Well done and good luck.
Blessings
Janet
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"Father's Shoes" is a wonderful story to share.
Excellent rhyming couplets.
I enjoyed reading each line.
Powerful message for us all.
Well done and good luck.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Father's Shoes
Great entry for the Shoes contest. I like the idea of walking in your father's shoes...that saying comes to mind....
be in another person's shoes
Don't judge me until you walk a mile in my shoes
Cinderella's shoe
Fill in his shoes....
Great topic with a good twist of using dad's shoes for good luck. Loved it!
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Father's Shoes
Great entry for the Shoes contest. I like the idea of walking in your father's shoes...that saying comes to mind....
be in another person's shoes
Don't judge me until you walk a mile in my shoes
Cinderella's shoe
Fill in his shoes....
Great topic with a good twist of using dad's shoes for good luck. Loved it!
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021