On the Edge of Deception Pg 58
And all good things must come to an end...17 total reviews
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Well done. This is a wrap! So Nancy hit the bucket. It's a good thing it wasn't Amanda the main witness. You finished the story with style. You tied all the loose ends together. Maybe your son will produce it as a movie.
Ralf
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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Well done. This is a wrap! So Nancy hit the bucket. It's a good thing it wasn't Amanda the main witness. You finished the story with style. You tied all the loose ends together. Maybe your son will produce it as a movie.
Ralf
Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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Thanks Ralf for all your continued support and generous stars. I am beyond thrilled that the ending of the story gets such a rating. Smiles and hugs as always, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I just loved this ending! It seems that the powers that be decided to get rid of O'Shea after he'd tipped them off. Serves him right. I was worried it was Amanda that went over the edge, but it was Nancy. I think those same powers planned and executed that thinking it was Amanda in the SUV. That must have been hard for Nate but it was good that he was there to see for himself what a slimeball his son is. Now Beth can have a new life with Bert. What a fabulous story, Carol!! Well done, this has to win the All Time Best chapter of the month! Will you write another one with our great FBI characters? Well done again, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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I just loved this ending! It seems that the powers that be decided to get rid of O'Shea after he'd tipped them off. Serves him right. I was worried it was Amanda that went over the edge, but it was Nancy. I think those same powers planned and executed that thinking it was Amanda in the SUV. That must have been hard for Nate but it was good that he was there to see for himself what a slimeball his son is. Now Beth can have a new life with Bert. What a fabulous story, Carol!! Well done, this has to win the All Time Best chapter of the month! Will you write another one with our great FBI characters? Well done again, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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Good morning, Sandra... I posted late last night, hoping you would be able to read this before I got up this morning. My wish came true! i wanted it edgy enough to make the reader wonder who went over the cliff....but only for a moment.
This is the second book I've written with Hank and Garth. I really enjoy them and I do think I will find another story somewhere for them.
Thank you for always supporting me and following the story. I truly appreciate all the kindness you have shown me. It's a bit daunting to realize I have nothing more to tantalize everyone with...It's actually the end of the story. I am thrilled for the gold stars for the final chapter. I feel it validates all the hard work.
Miles of smiles and hugs to you my dear friend, Carol
Comment from karenina
An all encompassing six stars.
This has been a Tour of Force!
I got hooked with Beth's plight and with every plot layer you enticed and intrigued me!
I am astounded that I feel so bad about Nancy's death...
That short interplay between her and Beth made me soften a bit...she expressed regret...that was a poignant moment.
Congratulations Carol!
I am positive Mike and your Mom are looking down at you and beaming with pride!
Who knew your short story would develop a life of its own!?
You are a fine friend.
You are a fine author!
Karenina
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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An all encompassing six stars.
This has been a Tour of Force!
I got hooked with Beth's plight and with every plot layer you enticed and intrigued me!
I am astounded that I feel so bad about Nancy's death...
That short interplay between her and Beth made me soften a bit...she expressed regret...that was a poignant moment.
Congratulations Carol!
I am positive Mike and your Mom are looking down at you and beaming with pride!
Who knew your short story would develop a life of its own!?
You are a fine friend.
You are a fine author!
Karenina
Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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Karenina,
I hoped when I posted this late last night, that I would rise to find you'd left me your thoughts.
I have been blessed by God, my family and by my sweet, wonderful friends and all their support throughout the entire book. I can not thank you enough for always being there and cheering me on...even when you might not have agreed ... but often I discovered a new twist in the story because of things you said or suggested. The book doesn't just belong to me... It's a part of all of us... especially you... that took the journey with me.
I send you a huge thank you and miles of smiles and hugs.
Love ya, Carol
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Oh! What a lovely thing to say! See?
Now I'm all smiley and teary!
Karenina
Comment from Patty Palmer
Wow! You keep me on the edge of my seat with each page. Things are coming together and the brownies really were to die for! LOL
I'll be watching for the next page to come out.
Patty xxoo
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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Wow! You keep me on the edge of my seat with each page. Things are coming together and the brownies really were to die for! LOL
I'll be watching for the next page to come out.
Patty xxoo
Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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Alas, Patty this is the end of the story... It seems wierd. I wanted to get up and write some more, but it's over. Maybe a new story will rise! Thanks for all your support and continued interest in my writing.
The shiny stars on the last chapter validate my writing. Thank you!
Smiles, Carol
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I enjoyed this story immensely! As I've gotten to know you, I'm sure something else will be along when the right idea hits you. Until then I'll continue to enjoy your short stories and poems.
Patty xxoo
Comment from royowen
Wow this story has really has grown from what was only a very short story to what we have at the moment, Poor old O'Shea I'll bet this was never part of his plans, I wonder if anyone will get to him in time? Well done a great story Carol, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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Wow this story has really has grown from what was only a very short story to what we have at the moment, Poor old O'Shea I'll bet this was never part of his plans, I wonder if anyone will get to him in time? Well done a great story Carol, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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Good morning, Roy...And so the story ends....
I wonder if there is a new story hidden here somewhere just waiting for me to find it. Thanks for your support and for always following the story. Smiles and hugs, Carol
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There?s always a sequel, but there?s no end to the creative talent, and He reproduces Himself in you. Well done
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I am feeling soooooo blessed at this moment, Roy. God has given me the ability to complete my dream and a promise I made to my Mom and Mike. He's also given me the support of so many good friends which I am so grateful for. I got up this morning worrying if the final chapter had fallen on it's face and found a sea of shiny stars...
It's Sunday and I praise the Lord for his generosity and blessings.
I can feel my "angels" beside me, sharing this moment. Not everyone will understand how special this is, but I know that you do.
A sequel? Hmmm... I would be so blessed again to find another journey to share with my friends.
Smiles and hugs and THE BIGGEST THANK YOU EVER....
Carol
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You are a talent, I know how you feel, God even more so.
Comment from lyenochka
Wow, you ended with a bang like in the movies. I guess there was no redemption for Nancy or O'Shea. Who killed O'Shea? He must have poisoned the brownies.
I like the last goodbyes that you did between Nancy and Beth, and between Peter and his father.
Great storytelling throughout!
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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Wow, you ended with a bang like in the movies. I guess there was no redemption for Nancy or O'Shea. Who killed O'Shea? He must have poisoned the brownies.
I like the last goodbyes that you did between Nancy and Beth, and between Peter and his father.
Great storytelling throughout!
Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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Thank you, Helen. Even though they were bad people, somewhere beneath I always hope there is a glimmer of good. I can't seem to write without showing that light. Thanks for all your support and for continuing to follow. I appreciate it beyond words and the shiny stars for the final chapter elates me. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
High time for a sssssseries bonussssss! Another gripping episode--masterful narration--vivid rendition of sundry scenes--brilliant dialog. This is pro level! Cheerssssss. LIZ
I wonder who the mystery man is who poisoned O'Shea!
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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High time for a sssssseries bonussssss! Another gripping episode--masterful narration--vivid rendition of sundry scenes--brilliant dialog. This is pro level! Cheerssssss. LIZ
I wonder who the mystery man is who poisoned O'Shea!
Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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Maybe that's the beginning thought for another series...LOL I've had Hank and Garth in two of them now.
thanks for all the support throughout the story. I can not thank you enough. I am thrilled for the shiny stars for the final chapter.
Smiles and hugs, Carol