Top of the Mountain
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Comment from Queenise
My heart goes out to you and your wife. This is a very heart-breaking and tender story. It has a lot of pain and suffering in the writing. The story has a lot of love also. I think it has a good message for us who have children and to those who just love children. Would recommend. God can help us survive anything. Good flow and a wonderful tribute and brave and courageous story on your part.My only son is 14. I love him to pieces and tell him and show him every day. Blessings to you. Queenise
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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My heart goes out to you and your wife. This is a very heart-breaking and tender story. It has a lot of pain and suffering in the writing. The story has a lot of love also. I think it has a good message for us who have children and to those who just love children. Would recommend. God can help us survive anything. Good flow and a wonderful tribute and brave and courageous story on your part.My only son is 14. I love him to pieces and tell him and show him every day. Blessings to you. Queenise
Comment Written 27-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Thank you so much, Queenise. I agree with you. You have a big heart, Take care and God bless you and your family always...Bob
Comment from RebelRose
Such a handsome boy and such a sad ending to his young life. What the Priest said about the 'top of the mountain' makes sense and I am going to remember that. I have never heard it put quite like that. I hope you and your wife have found some peace. Just keep remembering the wonderful 14 years you had.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Such a handsome boy and such a sad ending to his young life. What the Priest said about the 'top of the mountain' makes sense and I am going to remember that. I have never heard it put quite like that. I hope you and your wife have found some peace. Just keep remembering the wonderful 14 years you had.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Thanks so much, Rose. I appreciate your kind remarks...Bob
Comment from Bridge
Beautiful and moving and very well written. An excellent piece. Probably one of the most moving pieces I've read on this site.Am new to writing and so can't say much about the technical aspect but it had me hooked from beginning to end. Am very sorry for your loss...I have a nine month old...my first born and am just starting to realise how precious children are to parents
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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Beautiful and moving and very well written. An excellent piece. Probably one of the most moving pieces I've read on this site.Am new to writing and so can't say much about the technical aspect but it had me hooked from beginning to end. Am very sorry for your loss...I have a nine month old...my first born and am just starting to realise how precious children are to parents
Comment Written 27-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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Bless you, Bridge...Hug that baby lots n lots...Thanks for the wonderful review also...Bob
Comment from Jay Squires
A very well-told story, Mastery -- the moreso, knowing how difficult must have been the telling. God bless you, my friend, and your wife.
Just a few comments to make. The first one, looking back, is almost inconsequential, the second I'm not even sure I'm right about.
You've always been a superb story-teller. I hope the telling of this one was one more way of effecting a sense of self-healing -- if that's even possible.
"when we were done I went to put it in the bag, but it was gone." [I don't know, Mastery, but it seems to me if you have your son mention the loss of the bowling bag,he would say, "I went to put my BALL in the bag, but it was gone. My God am I getting nitpicky?]
"laying under sterile white sheets." [LYING, I believe.]
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Bob, this is my response from a previous post. You already made the corrections on that earlier post. Unfortunately, it won't allow me to give you the six I had intended to give.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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A very well-told story, Mastery -- the moreso, knowing how difficult must have been the telling. God bless you, my friend, and your wife.
Just a few comments to make. The first one, looking back, is almost inconsequential, the second I'm not even sure I'm right about.
You've always been a superb story-teller. I hope the telling of this one was one more way of effecting a sense of self-healing -- if that's even possible.
"when we were done I went to put it in the bag, but it was gone." [I don't know, Mastery, but it seems to me if you have your son mention the loss of the bowling bag,he would say, "I went to put my BALL in the bag, but it was gone. My God am I getting nitpicky?]
"laying under sterile white sheets." [LYING, I believe.]
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Bob, this is my response from a previous post. You already made the corrections on that earlier post. Unfortunately, it won't allow me to give you the six I had intended to give.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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Hi, and thanks, Jay. I was stationed in Barstow and 29 Palms while in the Marines by the way. Friend of mine Buck Owens was from there too. Thanks so much for your wonderful review of the story..Bless you, Bob
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Buck Owens? You mean the late singer/songwriter Buck Owens who put Bakersfield on the map with "The Streets of Bakersfield"? How did you know him?
Anyway, it's good to be back to FanStory after a year-plus hiatus. Seems I'm the only one who left.
Good luck to you.
Jay
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Nah...I was gone for two years myself...Just got back six months ago. uck? When I was a DJ at WJJD in Chicago, Buck was on toour with a roadshow. (They didn't call them concerts in those days 1967) the first time I met him..Talked alone with him for about an hour in his dressing room. Johnny Cash, Merle Haggard, Tex Ritter and The Louvin Brothers were on the same bill in Rockford, Illinois....Bob
Comment from Foster
Bob,
I do not like to assume that everything we write is truth, having said that this story really touched me. I think if I had to read more I might have cried, this coming from a man who does not cry easily. I cannot think of anything worse than losing a child. I think this is superb writing and story telling at its best.
Richard
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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Bob,
I do not like to assume that everything we write is truth, having said that this story really touched me. I think if I had to read more I might have cried, this coming from a man who does not cry easily. I cannot think of anything worse than losing a child. I think this is superb writing and story telling at its best.
Richard
Comment Written 27-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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Awww. Thank you Richard! That is a very big compliment and I thank you over and over...Bless you for your heart and understanding....Bob
Comment from Jnetgame
What a sad story. I can see why you chose this to be the event that changed your life. I'm very sorry for your loss. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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What a sad story. I can see why you chose this to be the event that changed your life. I'm very sorry for your loss. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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Thank you so much, Jnetgame. I appreciate your kindness and review...Bob
Comment from joan marie
I am so sorry. I am fighting the tears. I cannot have children and it must have been the worst moment of your life. joan marie
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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I am so sorry. I am fighting the tears. I cannot have children and it must have been the worst moment of your life. joan marie
Comment Written 27-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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Yes, it was, Joan...Thanks for our kindness Bob
Comment from wierdgrace
I had to wait until my tears cleared to write this, I do understand the pain, only that it was my sister and her unborn child. The pain I am sure is a little different, but never leaves, your life changes, you being able to write this is a start. I still after ten years, am trying to but that story and what happened in my book, and I can not finish it. Your writing is wonderful, thank you sharing your tears and heart, I feel the angels are with him and my sister as we read this.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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I had to wait until my tears cleared to write this, I do understand the pain, only that it was my sister and her unborn child. The pain I am sure is a little different, but never leaves, your life changes, you being able to write this is a start. I still after ten years, am trying to but that story and what happened in my book, and I can not finish it. Your writing is wonderful, thank you sharing your tears and heart, I feel the angels are with him and my sister as we read this.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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Awwww. Thanks so much for your kindnessews, Grace...Bob
Comment from PoesyPoet
I am so sorry for the loss of your son. We have to believe that God has a purpose and plan. Please, if you get a chance read BJean's entry. I think you could benefit from it like I did. I loss my daughter many years ago.
Celeste
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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I am so sorry for the loss of your son. We have to believe that God has a purpose and plan. Please, if you get a chance read BJean's entry. I think you could benefit from it like I did. I loss my daughter many years ago.
Celeste
Comment Written 27-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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Thanks so much, Celeste....Bob
Comment from FredCollingwood
What a powerful piece--perhaps the most emotional thing I've read on FanStory. It's so well written. This one sentence sums everything up:
There is nothing -- absolutely nothing worse than losing a child--an only child at that.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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What a powerful piece--perhaps the most emotional thing I've read on FanStory. It's so well written. This one sentence sums everything up:
There is nothing -- absolutely nothing worse than losing a child--an only child at that.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Fred...I am very grateful for your fine comments...Bob