Reign Knee Daze (Rainy Days)
A poem, just for the hell of it...127 total reviews
Comment from ragamuffin
Not sure as I should describe this as "beautiful," lol, but it does offer a beautiful and hopeful note of God being there for us- if we want Him. "Sometimes I sense that he's still near," most definitely always is. One of his simplest tools is to just wait until we're wore down, which many of us do quite frequently and easily. Quite an observant piece, frightfully written and presented. Excellent!
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Not sure as I should describe this as "beautiful," lol, but it does offer a beautiful and hopeful note of God being there for us- if we want Him. "Sometimes I sense that he's still near," most definitely always is. One of his simplest tools is to just wait until we're wore down, which many of us do quite frequently and easily. Quite an observant piece, frightfully written and presented. Excellent!
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
Comment from Michaelk
Great poem. It had the feel of the devil take Jesus around in the Bible and showing Him the kingdoms of the world to tempt Him. I also got a bit of a 'Dante's Inferno' vibe. I loved your message, 'Never give up hope'. What a wonderful moral. Your rhythm and rhyme were impeccable as usual, as were your descriptions and characters.
Great job, as usual.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Great poem. It had the feel of the devil take Jesus around in the Bible and showing Him the kingdoms of the world to tempt Him. I also got a bit of a 'Dante's Inferno' vibe. I loved your message, 'Never give up hope'. What a wonderful moral. Your rhythm and rhyme were impeccable as usual, as were your descriptions and characters.
Great job, as usual.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Thanks so much for your fabulous rating and review, my friend. So sorry for the delayed reply! ~Dean
Comment from padumachitta
Hi Well, a great story poem with a good message. I think also, since the winter is coming and rain is going to rain as it wills...that this poem makes me a bit happier to take the dog for a walk under wet skies:-)
padumachitta
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Hi Well, a great story poem with a good message. I think also, since the winter is coming and rain is going to rain as it wills...that this poem makes me a bit happier to take the dog for a walk under wet skies:-)
padumachitta
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Thanks so much for your fabulous rating and review, my friend. So sorry for the delayed reply! ~Dean
Comment from c_lucas
Bravo! Way to go, Dean. This is well worth the sixer. Your poem has so many truths hidden in it. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very strong read.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Bravo! Way to go, Dean. This is well worth the sixer. Your poem has so many truths hidden in it. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very strong read.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Thanks so much for your fabulous rating and review, my friend. So sorry for the delayed reply! ~Dean
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You're welcome, Dean. Charlie.
Comment from Acquired Taste
Okay then, are you channeling one of the Grimm boys? Nah, you're writing for Charlie Daniels ala The Devil Went Down to Georgia....love this, as I do all your work.
I would suspect you dream in BW vs technicolor though your work screams intense red with tinges of lemon-yellow like brimestone.
You must be worn out when you awake from dreams like this - thankfully you can exorcise your demons on the page! Jean
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Okay then, are you channeling one of the Grimm boys? Nah, you're writing for Charlie Daniels ala The Devil Went Down to Georgia....love this, as I do all your work.
I would suspect you dream in BW vs technicolor though your work screams intense red with tinges of lemon-yellow like brimestone.
You must be worn out when you awake from dreams like this - thankfully you can exorcise your demons on the page! Jean
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Thanks so much for your fabulous rating and review, my friend. So sorry for the delayed reply! ~Dean
Comment from adewpearl
stunning presentation of your poem
good steady use of iambic meter makes for strong cadence when read aloud and good use of enjambment lets story flow from line to line
solid use of rhyming couplets
good alliteration in phrases like spews his sermons
great contrast between the ominous, lurking, tempting demon and God, especially in those final lines
Brooke
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stunning presentation of your poem
good steady use of iambic meter makes for strong cadence when read aloud and good use of enjambment lets story flow from line to line
solid use of rhyming couplets
good alliteration in phrases like spews his sermons
great contrast between the ominous, lurking, tempting demon and God, especially in those final lines
Brooke
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
I think maybe you are just too in touch with your inner demons. Lol.
Horrible-truly it is; BUT...as always so perfectly scripted and presented
I feel compelled to read.
Perhaps my problem is that I don't dream enough. A bit of a control freak
who can't let go. Lol.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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I think maybe you are just too in touch with your inner demons. Lol.
Horrible-truly it is; BUT...as always so perfectly scripted and presented
I feel compelled to read.
Perhaps my problem is that I don't dream enough. A bit of a control freak
who can't let go. Lol.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Thanks so much for your fabulous rating and review, my friend. So sorry for the delayed reply! ~Dean
Comment from royowen
Apparently Domino2 Ray, has nightmares, I have hardly any dreams, I think I've explained on my page, I see things in the things around, we're all different. But it looks like you were shown the inevitable covering (I hope) beautifully written, in aabb rhyming, metronomic cadence, well done, Dean, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Apparently Domino2 Ray, has nightmares, I have hardly any dreams, I think I've explained on my page, I see things in the things around, we're all different. But it looks like you were shown the inevitable covering (I hope) beautifully written, in aabb rhyming, metronomic cadence, well done, Dean, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Thanks so much for your fabulous rating and review, my friend. So sorry for the delayed reply! ~Dean
Comment from ravim
This is incredible. Not only is the horror painted so despicably, the poem is rich with meaning and lovely wordings. The dialogue really sets this apart from any that I've seen for a long time. Your indicating of this by light and dark fonts is really creative. So are the demons! One poetry that one should see, read and read again. This is going to be a box office hit. It should. Hats off!! (I'll bookcase it for sure)
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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This is incredible. Not only is the horror painted so despicably, the poem is rich with meaning and lovely wordings. The dialogue really sets this apart from any that I've seen for a long time. Your indicating of this by light and dark fonts is really creative. So are the demons! One poetry that one should see, read and read again. This is going to be a box office hit. It should. Hats off!! (I'll bookcase it for sure)
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Thanks so much for your fabulous rating and review, my friend. So sorry for the delayed reply! ~Dean
Comment from Delahay
That must have been quite a dream you had. It sounds more like a nightmare. You've told quite an interesting and cautionary story in this poem that is also a fun read. Beware the temptations of the one offering so much that is too good to be true.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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That must have been quite a dream you had. It sounds more like a nightmare. You've told quite an interesting and cautionary story in this poem that is also a fun read. Beware the temptations of the one offering so much that is too good to be true.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Thanks so much for your fabulous rating and review, my friend. So sorry for the delayed reply! ~Dean