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Comment from Dana Taylor
Hi Mike, I did enjoy the read for the nightmare that it certainly was. That sounds ambiguous...I enjoyed it for the quality of the description of something that I would not have been able to imagine otherwise. It was a tad long but I can forgive that because to have shortened it would have been to minimize the impact of such nocturnal torture. By coincidence, I'm reading a novel now about Freud, who was totally convinced that dreams have meaning and that they can be analyzed and solutions worked through. I, however, am no Freud and I have no idea why some people go through such nightmares. From a poetic point of view the 'Crown of Sonnets' worked well. Each part revealing some new abyss but I think the first verse is the most powerful in terms of vocabulary - 'befouled beyond obscene'. There is no room for doubt there how bad it is!
I presume from the reference to syringes that the problem is drug based but there is nothing to confirm that really - it could just be a fear of needles, although I doubt it. It was certainly worth the read. Thanks for sharing. Dana
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2011
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Hi Mike, I did enjoy the read for the nightmare that it certainly was. That sounds ambiguous...I enjoyed it for the quality of the description of something that I would not have been able to imagine otherwise. It was a tad long but I can forgive that because to have shortened it would have been to minimize the impact of such nocturnal torture. By coincidence, I'm reading a novel now about Freud, who was totally convinced that dreams have meaning and that they can be analyzed and solutions worked through. I, however, am no Freud and I have no idea why some people go through such nightmares. From a poetic point of view the 'Crown of Sonnets' worked well. Each part revealing some new abyss but I think the first verse is the most powerful in terms of vocabulary - 'befouled beyond obscene'. There is no room for doubt there how bad it is!
I presume from the reference to syringes that the problem is drug based but there is nothing to confirm that really - it could just be a fear of needles, although I doubt it. It was certainly worth the read. Thanks for sharing. Dana
Comment Written 17-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2011
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Thank you, Dana :-). I've been getting this since I was a little child, so hopefully drugs aren;t the issue, but who knows! I did a university module on psychotherapy and lay-analysis, and I absolutely agree that dreams are our minds expressing the taboo, tortured, denied things we can't bring to the fore when awake. Still doesn't help with this though, lol :-)
Mike
Comment from Chris Tee
WOW!! This is extraordinary work we have here old sport.
To say the least this is absolutely exquisite my friend.
We have here a rather splendid piece of poetic art ant it is highly commendable old chap
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WOW!! This is extraordinary work we have here old sport.
To say the least this is absolutely exquisite my friend.
We have here a rather splendid piece of poetic art ant it is highly commendable old chap
Comment Written 17-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2011
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Thank you, Chris, for the awesome review and special rating. I'm so happy you enjoyed it, mate.
Mike
Comment from adewpearl
Excellent composition - steady iambic meter, strong rhymes, good connection from sonnet to sonnet
excellent alliteration in phrases like dark derision, crumpled cardboard
excellent use of phrases that add to the dark mood, such as "that drives a spike of hatred through my soul"
Strong use of high-impact verbs throughout
Destiny lays helpless in its groove - lies
This certainly is one helluva nightmare landscape, my friend :-) Brooke
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Excellent composition - steady iambic meter, strong rhymes, good connection from sonnet to sonnet
excellent alliteration in phrases like dark derision, crumpled cardboard
excellent use of phrases that add to the dark mood, such as "that drives a spike of hatred through my soul"
Strong use of high-impact verbs throughout
Destiny lays helpless in its groove - lies
This certainly is one helluva nightmare landscape, my friend :-) Brooke
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Comment Written 17-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2011
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Thank you, Brooke :-). This one has plagued me for three decades, although it's rarer than it used to be. I'm so happy you liked my poetic interpretation :-)
Mike
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Mike, I'm dazzled. I'm not a poet, and I've never seen anything like this. It's amazing. No comments about your nightmare. No idea what it means. And you make me glad I don't remember mine. I like the way you've slightly altered the repetition between the fourth and fifth sonnets by changing the punctuation, and therefore the meaning, ever so slightly. A crown of sonnets. Wow! :) Nancy
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2011
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Mike, I'm dazzled. I'm not a poet, and I've never seen anything like this. It's amazing. No comments about your nightmare. No idea what it means. And you make me glad I don't remember mine. I like the way you've slightly altered the repetition between the fourth and fifth sonnets by changing the punctuation, and therefore the meaning, ever so slightly. A crown of sonnets. Wow! :) Nancy
Comment Written 17-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2011
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Thank you Nancy - I'm jiggling with happiness in my chair :-). I'm so happy you liked it, and thrilled with the sixer.
Mike
Comment from peggles
You use the English language quite vividly and poetically. You set a scene very well, describing beautifully.
You did a beautiful job with this inspiring work
I enjoyed reading this
well done
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You use the English language quite vividly and poetically. You set a scene very well, describing beautifully.
You did a beautiful job with this inspiring work
I enjoyed reading this
well done
Comment Written 17-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2011
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Wow! Thank you, Peggles - what an awesome review :-). I'm so glad you enjoyed the read.
Mike