The Wayward Adventurer
Seeking fame on the seven seas.127 total reviews
Comment from GE Parson
Brother Dean,
That has got to be one of, if not your best I'VE READ OF YOUR POETRY.
with the descriptive words you used and the pictures, I could almost feel the fright and panic of the wailers.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2014
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Brother Dean,
That has got to be one of, if not your best I'VE READ OF YOUR POETRY.
with the descriptive words you used and the pictures, I could almost feel the fright and panic of the wailers.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2014
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Hi, Jerry. That's quite a compliment, my dear friend, I really appreciate that! More than that, I am so pleased that you liked it.
Thanks so much again!
Comment from ravenblack
Great rhythm to this one, almost like a long sea shanty. I don't think Ahab ever learned the lesson of obsessively chasing an elusive beast either. Just ask Ishmael. The journey can be a real pain in the albatross. Especially if we wreck along the way.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2014
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Great rhythm to this one, almost like a long sea shanty. I don't think Ahab ever learned the lesson of obsessively chasing an elusive beast either. Just ask Ishmael. The journey can be a real pain in the albatross. Especially if we wreck along the way.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2014
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Yes, it certainly can, RB. I appreciate your kind words and generous rating. I no Christopher Sheldon, rama devi or Rondeno, but I do try to tell a story with a good moral message.
Thanks again.
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And I am glad you are not any of them. We all have different voices and you excel at narrative poetry - something I can't do.
Comment from ArtGal
Wow Dean, I was drawn into this wonderfully written rhyme from the first sentence, and I usually stay away from poems within a story. I actually didn't want it to end, it was that powerful. I'm afraid of the sea, especially when on a boat or ship, so needless to say I was on the edge of my seat while reading. I'm glad I read 'author notes' to understand what you really meant to say about success and greed. How very clever, and you deserve a six for this one. I enjoyed it very much along with your great pictures. . .Sharon
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Wow Dean, I was drawn into this wonderfully written rhyme from the first sentence, and I usually stay away from poems within a story. I actually didn't want it to end, it was that powerful. I'm afraid of the sea, especially when on a boat or ship, so needless to say I was on the edge of my seat while reading. I'm glad I read 'author notes' to understand what you really meant to say about success and greed. How very clever, and you deserve a six for this one. I enjoyed it very much along with your great pictures. . .Sharon
Comment Written 09-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much for the awesome review, Sharon. I'm really glad you took a chance and read this one for me. I'm very grateful!
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You're so very welcome!
Comment from nancyjam
Terrific poem with a great message.
I love the meter and the internal and end rhymes
that enhance the flow.
wonderful imagery and an exciting presentation.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Terrific poem with a great message.
I love the meter and the internal and end rhymes
that enhance the flow.
wonderful imagery and an exciting presentation.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much, Nancy. I truly am grateful for such an outstanding review. Much obliged, my friend!
Comment from ELumpkins
What a story! I was thrilled as I read along. I think the Author must have combined two or three dreams to compose this wonderful piece..Great art presenting this great works.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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What a story! I was thrilled as I read along. I think the Author must have combined two or three dreams to compose this wonderful piece..Great art presenting this great works.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thanks very much, ELumpkins. I'm very pleased that you enjoyed this.
Comment from emrpoems
i admire your imagination and ability to write so eloquently and poetically.
Also your choice of pictures is perfect
Good use of aabb rhymes
Excellent transition of words and thoughts from one line to another
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2014
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i admire your imagination and ability to write so eloquently and poetically.
Also your choice of pictures is perfect
Good use of aabb rhymes
Excellent transition of words and thoughts from one line to another
Comment Written 09-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2014
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Thank you for your kind words, emrpoems. I truly appreciate your warm, receptive review.
Comment from fairy77
That's amazing. I really enjoyed it!The length and beautiful picture and amazing story told. I enjoyed the artwork of octopus and ships:)beth fairy77.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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That's amazing. I really enjoyed it!The length and beautiful picture and amazing story told. I enjoyed the artwork of octopus and ships:)beth fairy77.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thank you very much, Beth. I'm so pleased that you enjoyed reading it!
Comment from Nosha17
That was a lovely tale of a jolly tar who ended up like Robinson Crusoe. I loved the naughty sea monsters, very effective. Your rhymes and rhythm were superb and great choice of language for your salty tale. Most enjoyable. Faye
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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That was a lovely tale of a jolly tar who ended up like Robinson Crusoe. I loved the naughty sea monsters, very effective. Your rhymes and rhythm were superb and great choice of language for your salty tale. Most enjoyable. Faye
Comment Written 09-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much as always, Faye. I always appreciate reading a review from you!
Comment from country ranch writer
STILL IN TODAYS WORLD IT IS STILL FULL OF GREED PUSHING US SMALL FRY OUT OF THE WAY SO THE BIG FISH CAN GOBBLE UP ALL THE GLORY
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2014
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STILL IN TODAYS WORLD IT IS STILL FULL OF GREED PUSHING US SMALL FRY OUT OF THE WAY SO THE BIG FISH CAN GOBBLE UP ALL THE GLORY
Comment Written 09-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2014
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Yep, it happens that way sometimes, country, and it's pretty sad that it does. Everyone feels they have something significant, or entertaining to say in their writing, otherwise, they wouldn't bother saying it at all.
Thanks for the review, I really appreciate it, my friend!
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you are the best so be proud my friend
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I'm proud that you consider me a friend, country. We can never have enough good ones.
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I am impressed you consider me a friend I bow to your dear sir!
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Hey, I think you're the best! You treated me kindly from the first day I came to FanStory, and continue to support what it is I try to do here. A lot of people have turned their back on me, for whatever reason, but not you. You always manage to give me encouragement and support, and that has meant a lot to me.
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You have always been there for me dusting me off and sending me on my way to learn and learn things I really need to know. "TRUE FRIENDS, DO NOT TURN THEIR BACK ON FRIENDS NO MATER HOW HIGH ONE CLIMBS" Some people just seemed to move on and leave us for a different lifestyle of writing. Mostly poems which I must confess I am not too good at. You make me feel my writing is worth while.
Comment from akulkumol
A beautiful imagery, the reader can feel the climax and the suspense of the scene. Nice image matching the description. It felt like a real life situation of despair. Loved reading it, very vivid imagination. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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A beautiful imagery, the reader can feel the climax and the suspense of the scene. Nice image matching the description. It felt like a real life situation of despair. Loved reading it, very vivid imagination. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thank you very much for your compliments and outstanding rating of six stars, akulkumol. I'm humbled and very grateful.