Sun-baked Prairie Cowboy
weather beaten face21 total reviews
Comment from Earl Corp
This reminds me of the Tom T. Hall song "Faster Horses (The Cowboy and the Poet.)" If you listen to it, the words in your poem come to life. Nice job, great graphic!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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This reminds me of the Tom T. Hall song "Faster Horses (The Cowboy and the Poet.)" If you listen to it, the words in your poem come to life. Nice job, great graphic!
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Thanks again Earl! I wonder if I can rope you in with my short ones. LOL
More likely the cowpoke wears a sombrero, than a ten gallon hat, or a battered Stetson (-:
Mark
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Sun-baked Prairie Cowboy, has the right set up and imagines the weather-worn cow poke out on the plains with the longhorn. Neat.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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This 5-7-5, Sun-baked Prairie Cowboy, has the right set up and imagines the weather-worn cow poke out on the plains with the longhorn. Neat.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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glad you liked this Bill.
the cowboy probably is wearing a sombrero and not a 10 gallon hat or a battered hat or Stetson.
mark
Comment from trimple
Good morning, Mark
This is an interesting little poem. A slight contradiction though as you say:
[the sun] and wind [etch]
[leathered lines in cowboy's face --]
[ten gallon shades him?]
I assume that the 'hat' on his head is referred to as a 'ten gallon? If so, I wondered at first why that is, but presume that the average human holds about ten gallons in their body?
An interesting poem, though I'm not sure about that mentioned above :) Clearly with all those deep lines in his fizzog, it suggests that these hats still aren't quite big enough! lol
kind regards
tracey
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Good morning, Mark
This is an interesting little poem. A slight contradiction though as you say:
[the sun] and wind [etch]
[leathered lines in cowboy's face --]
[ten gallon shades him?]
I assume that the 'hat' on his head is referred to as a 'ten gallon? If so, I wondered at first why that is, but presume that the average human holds about ten gallons in their body?
An interesting poem, though I'm not sure about that mentioned above :) Clearly with all those deep lines in his fizzog, it suggests that these hats still aren't quite big enough! lol
kind regards
tracey
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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tracey,
yep, it was a ten gallon hat
even with that big hat, the sun's etching would only be lessened a bit
too rigid with my 575s, otherwise, it might have been 'ten gallon hat' or 'battered Stetson'
the 'ten gallon hat' is an old Western myth, which I knew
so I googled it for its backstory - very interesting
in reality, the hat may only hold a few quarts - imagine 10 gallons of liquid in any one's hat, except maybe Paul Bunyan
depending on the size of the human, about 10 gallons or 40 liters is the fluid capacity - but your good assumption doesn't fit with the reality of the myth. LOL
THANKS for your review and stars.
mark
Comment from Bicpen
Cool ... I like being a cowboy. It is succinct with a very inductive feel to it which dwells on a classic formation of the ten gallon hat being described this time in its appropriate fashion and the piece has a long picturesque intention whereby we feel the almost draining burning sun upon the poor cowboy ... its a classic worthy to be praised !!!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Cool ... I like being a cowboy. It is succinct with a very inductive feel to it which dwells on a classic formation of the ten gallon hat being described this time in its appropriate fashion and the piece has a long picturesque intention whereby we feel the almost draining burning sun upon the poor cowboy ... its a classic worthy to be praised !!!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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THANKS bicpen for your detailed review and stars.
If you Google the myth about the 10 gallon hat back story, you will find that the hat may hold only a few quarts, unless you were Paul Bunyan! That's another tale.
Mark
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excellent ... will do !!!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and
presentation,Mark.
-Good imagery that
paints a word picture
of this cowboy's face.
-Effective alliteration with
"leathered lines."
-The concluding line
is very good, too.
-Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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-Nice artwork and
presentation,Mark.
-Good imagery that
paints a word picture
of this cowboy's face.
-Effective alliteration with
"leathered lines."
-The concluding line
is very good, too.
-Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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Jan,
THANKS for your review and stars!
If I wasn't so religious about my 5-7-5, the last line might have said 'ten gallon hat...' or 'battered old Stetson ...'. LOL of course, those would be acceptable as a verse IF not entered in a 5-7-5 or Haiku-like FS contest.
Pleased you liked my overall presentation.
Mark
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You are very welcome for the review, Mark. Thanks for sharing,
~Pam
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great poem, Mark. Good job with the syllable count per line. The picture is a perfect pairing with your well-chosen words. I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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This is a great poem, Mark. Good job with the syllable count per line. The picture is a perfect pairing with your well-chosen words. I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 16-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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Jan,
Thanks for your compliments. So is the cowboy rolling the paper for his next cigarette, or looking at his scribbles for his latest poem?
Mark
Comment from Rmocruz
I 'm wondering what cowboy's about to roll-up with that paper.
Seriously, you have selected the perfect visual art to compliment
your well chosen words.
Well crafted overall Mark, a pleasure to have read.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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I 'm wondering what cowboy's about to roll-up with that paper.
Seriously, you have selected the perfect visual art to compliment
your well chosen words.
Well crafted overall Mark, a pleasure to have read.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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Your assumed pseudo Marlboro Man may actually be reading his newly written poem on a small piece of paper (-; Pleased that you enjoyed the overall presentation.
Mark
Mark
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You're cracking me up Mark, my pleasure.
Comment from clsandau
This is a well described 5-7-5. Perfect picture for your poem too. I always enjoy reading (and writing) cowboy poetry and found your descriptions of this cowboy to be quite accurate. They usually are rather wind blown with weathered lines etched on their face. Thank you, Carol
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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This is a well described 5-7-5. Perfect picture for your poem too. I always enjoy reading (and writing) cowboy poetry and found your descriptions of this cowboy to be quite accurate. They usually are rather wind blown with weathered lines etched on their face. Thank you, Carol
Comment Written 16-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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Carol,
The inspiration for this verse was a description of a man's face etched in deep tanned lines, which I recently read in a book. The question is: Is the cowboy rolling the paper for a cigarette or looking at his scribbles of a poem he just wrote? Hahah!
Thanks for your complimentary review and stars. This 5-7-5 post is my go-to format, longer verses are just not my style.
Mark
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You are welcome. We attend some cowboy poetry events, so it could well be a poem, but probably rolling a smoke. It amazes me how some tough cowboys come up with some pretty interesting stuff! Carol
Comment from Sandra Elizabeth Williams
I love this 5-7-5, Mark. I must admit though, that I do not understand the last line.
The artwork is quite appropriate and I like the slate font colour you used.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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I love this 5-7-5, Mark. I must admit though, that I do not understand the last line.
The artwork is quite appropriate and I like the slate font colour you used.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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Sandra,
Because I am syllabled restricted, I could not write 'ten gallon hat' or 'battered Stetson.' I chose to use that old western phrase to reflect what the cowboy wears even today to shade him/her from the broiling hot sun.
Mark
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Ah, I see. Rightly so!
Love it!
Comment from James Upshaw
Great poem! I love the imagery here of the cowboy. And done so well in the 5-7-5 format. It really painted a vivid mental picture of what a cowboy might look like.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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Great poem! I love the imagery here of the cowboy. And done so well in the 5-7-5 format. It really painted a vivid mental picture of what a cowboy might look like.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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Thanks James for those generous comments and stars.
This is my only style. In another lifetime, maybe I will write poetry. Since I try to stick strictly to a 5-7-5 count, 'battered Stetson' instead of my 'ten gallon' (hat) would have added an extra syllable (-;
Mark