Vulnerable
High and low mood swings every nerve exposed.8 total reviews
Comment from angel123
I enjoyed reading your interesting poem. It flows well with an interesting message and I like your artwork choice. Best Wishes!
angel123
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2017
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I enjoyed reading your interesting poem. It flows well with an interesting message and I like your artwork choice. Best Wishes!
angel123
Comment Written 08-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2017
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Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Your 3-5-3-Lune is an interesting observation on the Autumn season, DALLAS. It leaves you feeling a bit chilly after you've read it.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2017
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Your 3-5-3-Lune is an interesting observation on the Autumn season, DALLAS. It leaves you feeling a bit chilly after you've read it.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2017
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Thanks, Dean
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Lune Poem. Each season changes, leave us vulnerable to the visible changes of time that make us realize time doesn't stand still and we grow older with every transition of the seasons.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2017
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A very well-written Lune Poem. Each season changes, leave us vulnerable to the visible changes of time that make us realize time doesn't stand still and we grow older with every transition of the seasons.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2017
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from kahpot
What an excellent poem and format, your great use of words opens up many visions while reading this write very well done great artwork, good luck in your competition****kahpot
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2017
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What an excellent poem and format, your great use of words opens up many visions while reading this write very well done great artwork, good luck in your competition****kahpot
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rama devi
Great personification. true to form and well presented. This feels metaphorical for a declining relationship...and the artwork and title enhance that interpretation.
Superb phonetics with consonance of S in three words and assonance of A as well. Bravo.
Great word economy.
Vulnerability can be harrowing. Sending loving light.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2017
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Great personification. true to form and well presented. This feels metaphorical for a declining relationship...and the artwork and title enhance that interpretation.
Superb phonetics with consonance of S in three words and assonance of A as well. Bravo.
Great word economy.
Vulnerability can be harrowing. Sending loving light.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 04-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2017
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Thanks or the great review, rd.
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Comment from Joan E.
I admired your Loon, format and artwork selection. The title is intriguing as is your choice of the word "incision". Thanks for including the notes of the history of this short form. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2017
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I admired your Loon, format and artwork selection. The title is intriguing as is your choice of the word "incision". Thanks for including the notes of the history of this short form. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 04-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2017
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Thanks for reviewing joan
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day mate.
It's been ages since I've seen your name pop up, I hope you've been well.
This is a great little piece written in a form that is way too hard for me to write in, but you've got it nailed here.
A great contest entry and I wish you the best of luck in it.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2017
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G'day mate.
It's been ages since I've seen your name pop up, I hope you've been well.
This is a great little piece written in a form that is way too hard for me to write in, but you've got it nailed here.
A great contest entry and I wish you the best of luck in it.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 04-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2017
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Thanks Feral . Been busy trying to promote my book. Really tough since it is written anonymously. My ability to promote is limited.
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Ah, that's great news out having the book ready. Why is it written anonymously? I think marketing will be the hardest thing. I'm almost through editing mine now and getting horribly nervous.
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it is a personal memoir with poetry interjected and it is about my journey from addiction to recovery, focusing on the genetic predisposition. It is written anonymously in keeping with the tenets of the aa program and other twelve step programs. I also did not want to expose the anonymity of family members even though the names have been changed. so I can't do book signings in my area.
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Ah, well done. All the best of luck with it, mate.
Comment from JanPerry
The painting looks a bit like you and is colourful and purposeful. I didn't get the purpose of your three lines however. I fail to assimilate autumn and being stark naked. In Perth, its so hot that Summer would be the one to be stark naked in!
I can't see how being vulnerable relates to being stark naked. I have met many men myself who love to be naked and seem impenetrable!!
Jan
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2017
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The painting looks a bit like you and is colourful and purposeful. I didn't get the purpose of your three lines however. I fail to assimilate autumn and being stark naked. In Perth, its so hot that Summer would be the one to be stark naked in!
I can't see how being vulnerable relates to being stark naked. I have met many men myself who love to be naked and seem impenetrable!!
Jan
Comment Written 04-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2017
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It's a metaphor for feeling exposed.. thanks for reviewing.