Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Good alliteration in this short piece. The air reference is to the wind, well described here in the form of a storm. All lines contain great imagery, especially middle line. Marilyn

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016

Thanks. Glad you liked the alliteration and imagery. Appreciate your comments on this windy/stormy piece. Cheers ... ;-)

Comment from dannielleduran

Excellent

Your 3-5-3 syllable structure is perfect. The picture you chose brings out the chaotic fury of your intended meaning. However, the background could use some color to help in bringing out the meaning of your Haiku.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016

Thanks. Appreciate all your comments ... ;)

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Wonderful work. I love the alliteration of F and the wording in the last line because it SOUNDS like what it describes. So do the W and WH sounds. Fine assonance of I as well. The phonetics are fantastic, as is the superb word economy. Bravo.

Good luck in the contest. A strong contender for my vote.
Fine presentation.

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016

Thanks for the wonderful review. Appreciate all your comments. Cheers ... ;o)

reply by rama devi on 02-Aug-2016

:-))

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

The is a very good use of winds for poem
Picture looks like a hurricane
Excellent imagery with the winds and waves
for such a short poem,
I think you have too much alliteration
with four "w" and three "f" sounds
Excellent picture to match
Good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016

Thanks. Appreciate all your comments. I think you're right - I may have overdone it with the alliteration and assonance, as well as a picture that is more than gusty winds. Cheers ... ;-)

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Good image.
-Good format and poem.
-Connection is good between lines one and two.
-Effective alliteration throughout
that nicely emphasizes the wind.
-Good satori line.
-A strong entry for contest; good luck.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016

Thanks. Appreciate your thoughts on this short 'air' poem/haiku. Cheers ... ;-)

reply by Pam (respa) on 02-Aug-2016

You are welcome.

Comment from frogbook

Excellent

Good alliteration in this little play on words. It certainly gave the feeling of a lot of air-I could barely stay on my chair reading it-haha. Best of luck with this great entry.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016

Thanks. Appreciate your comments on this windy piece. Cheers ... ;-)

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Wow, this fine picture poem combination brings back some of those old memories of hurricanes that I've rode out over the years. Great job, and good luck in the contest. :-)

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016

Thanks. Glad this picture could bring back some windy memories. Appreciate your comments. Cheers .... ;-)

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

I love the alliteration in the poem, it marks the wording well. Your whole piece is intriguing.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings!
Rebekka x

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016

Thanks. Glad you found this piece intriguing and you liked the alliteration. Appreciate your comments. Cheers ... ;-)

Comment from Bollie

Excellent

This is a really good poem, with just 11 syllables combined with the perfect picture you were able to describe something so completely. It's so important to make every word count in this format and you did that. I love the three W's in the middle line, that alone is rhythmically poetic. Really very good job. Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016

Thanks. Glad you enjoyed this short poem and the picture. Appreciate all your comments. Cheers ... ;-)

reply by Bollie on 03-Aug-2016

You're very welcome. Have a wonderful day.

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Comment from EricBrady

Excellent

I love stormy weather and you have taken me back down memory lane with your words and this artwork. You have definitely kept to the theme and syllable count for the contest. Vivid descriptions invoke the imagination to see and feel the magnitude and force of the wind pressing against the body. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016

Thanks. Glad this short windy piece took you down memory lane. Appreciate all your comments. Cheers ... ;-)