Comment from damommy

Excellent

This is such a sweet story, and I love the photo you chose.

Penguins are very hard-working, loving individuals. They are unequaled as parents.

I especially like that you showed they are monogamous. As you say, people could learn a lot from them and all animals.

God IS good.

I really like this a lot. 8-)

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2016

Thanks again for this wonderful commentary on the Penguin family.
Yes, Penguins could teach humans a lot about faithfulness and values.
Number 4 will be coming soon.
:-) Carolyn

reply by damommy on 07-Feb-2016

Looking forward to it. 8-)

Comment from Colette Breeze.

Average

Hello author,
I liked this piece ,it reminded me of 'Surf's Up' and 'Happy Feet' ,by Disney.Good rounded humour and a touch of tenderness. Thank-you.

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 Comment Written 01-Oct-2015

Comment from Curly Girly

Excellent

It's nice to see that the parents take turns in looking after the egg, or the unborn child. Now it's papa's turn to go and find food for the family. This is an enjoyable chapter to read.

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2015

Thanks Nicole, so glad you enjoyed. :-) Carolyn

Comment from PoemsOfDD

Excellent

Another interesting read notesandmore. I was intrigued to see how this would end and so my attention was kept. As I read it I had visions of 'Happy Feet' so I was right there with the Penguins. Humans do have so much to learn. Thank you again for sharing.

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2015

You are so welcome, I'm delighted you enjoyed the story PoemsOfDD. And thank you for the wonderful review and generous rating. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

Another member wrote something similar to his a while ago. It's a wonderful way to teach children how a different species lives. Peter and Penelope. Are these Phyllis's penguins all grown up? Whoops, I think they were brother and sister. Wonder if these birds practice incest? LOL

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

Hi Shari,
I commented on Phylis's poem. It and the song is fabulous. I guess we were just thinking Penguins at the same time. This is the 2nd installment. Have more to come. I'm not sure they are cousins but maybe. Glad you liked the piece . Thanks for the great R/R. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

I love penguins and so do kids. This is a factual yet cute story that they can understand. Good jumping off point for discussion of penguins. Lots of documentaries and movies for the kids to watch as a follow up, too. :)

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

Hi there,
Still have a few installments to go. I guess we both have Penguins on the brain. LOL. Piper will make his debut soon. Thanks for the great review. I appreciate your fine comments.
:-) Carolyn

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

Hi Carolyn, this reminds me of the movie Happy Feet...LOL...I love the story told...and it's true...it is the way they do it...they take turns sitting on the egg....yes God is truly good...very well written...and I enjoyed reading it...Love Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

Love you too and thanks so much for this fine review. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. Have a few more installments to go.
:-) Carolyn

reply by l.raven on 28-Sep-2015

love back...and you are so welcome...xxoo luff...

Comment from MizKat

Exceptional

Hi Carolyn,

This is the cutest little story. It would be so nice if all husband's and wife's would get along as well as the penguins do. I really enjoyed reading this and hope you'll write more about them.

Kat

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

Hi Kat,
Yes, there will be more tales of Penelope and Peter as their family grows. So glad you enjoyed it.
Love, Carolyn

reply by MizKat on 29-Sep-2015

Hi Carolyn,

I love to read everything you write. I'm so happy you like to end your notes with love. I've always been that way too.

Love, Kat

Comment from Tessa Kay

Excellent

Yes, aren't penguins amazing creatures? To sit faithfully for two weeks out in the icy cold. The things they do for their little ones.
Your story flowed really well and held my attention. Only stumbled a little at the start:

-Penelope Penguin headed out to sea after first telling Peter she would see him in a couple of weeks. - in the previous paragraph the reader already sees her waddling out of sight. I would cut the 'after first telling...', because it's retracting and stops the story from going forward. Maybe start again with 'Peter would guard and keep the egg warm... -You decide. Just a suggestion. Nothing major.

thanks for a lovely story. :)

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

Thanks for the candid review. I really appreciate that Tessa Kay and will take a look at the paragraph. I'm delighted you enjoyed this one.
:-) Carolyn

Comment from Michaelk

Excellent

That was a very cute story and well suited for kids. I loved the way you explained the workings of penguin parents by showing them doing their thing. I think this would translate very well to a children's book, with lots of penguin pictures.
Well done.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

Thanks so much Michaelk,
I have several more installments to post then we'll see. It may be a book soon. I'm so glad you enjoyed the story.
:-) Carolyn