haiku (rogue raindrops)
heavenly tears16 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This three-five-three about water, Rouge Raindrops, seems to elevate the power of water to the extreme that nature can provide and that we can endure. It certainly is a life and death element. Nice poem.
This three-five-three about water, Rouge Raindrops, seems to elevate the power of water to the extreme that nature can provide and that we can endure. It certainly is a life and death element. Nice poem.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2015
Comment from --Turtle.
This 3-5-3 uses every syllable to secure a fun comparison of rain, gone wrong... in a so very right way... comparing it to a potent alcohol, and the play on alcohol, spirits, hudred proof for potency, back to also refreshment. I think it was very effective, and the flow of the phrases was pleasing. really enjoyed this poem.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
This 3-5-3 uses every syllable to secure a fun comparison of rain, gone wrong... in a so very right way... comparing it to a potent alcohol, and the play on alcohol, spirits, hudred proof for potency, back to also refreshment. I think it was very effective, and the flow of the phrases was pleasing. really enjoyed this poem.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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Thank you very much--such kind words.
Comment from ellie6
Good choice of colour in the picture. I like the 'nature's pure spirits' line. The rogue raindrops racing down the window is highly effective. Well thought out.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
Good choice of colour in the picture. I like the 'nature's pure spirits' line. The rogue raindrops racing down the window is highly effective. Well thought out.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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Thanks for the read.
Comment from Jean Lutz
I'll toast that. A delightful word play on how to quench thirst. Nice picture and color to make it look sweet and innocent. Best wishes with your entry.
I'll toast that. A delightful word play on how to quench thirst. Nice picture and color to make it look sweet and innocent. Best wishes with your entry.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2015
Comment from Dean Kuch
Nothing on Planet Earth could survive without life-giving water. And, our old Earth would simply dry up, wither away and die eventually without rain to help replenish her water supplies.
I really enjoyed the imagery you've created for your 3-5-3 contest entry, and I wish you the best of luck in the contest with it.
~Dean
Nothing on Planet Earth could survive without life-giving water. And, our old Earth would simply dry up, wither away and die eventually without rain to help replenish her water supplies.
I really enjoyed the imagery you've created for your 3-5-3 contest entry, and I wish you the best of luck in the contest with it.
~Dean
Comment Written 08-Jul-2015
Comment from jules4jesus
excellent use of the words to compliment the picture and vice versa i can just imagine each raindrop being alive and bringing its life a free will to the trees and flowers and rivers, such a beautiful free feeling. good luck in the contest
excellent use of the words to compliment the picture and vice versa i can just imagine each raindrop being alive and bringing its life a free will to the trees and flowers and rivers, such a beautiful free feeling. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 08-Jul-2015
Comment from danpald
Well the count
The theme is found
With the message
Of water drinks well
To get drunk on water
What a view
For the body needs
This pure drink to be
Well the count
The theme is found
With the message
Of water drinks well
To get drunk on water
What a view
For the body needs
This pure drink to be
Comment Written 08-Jul-2015
Comment from angel123
Excellent poem very well written. I enjoyed reading it and it flows well. Good alliteration of words in your first sentence and beautiful artwork choice. I like the spiritual nature of your poem.
Angel123
Excellent poem very well written. I enjoyed reading it and it flows well. Good alliteration of words in your first sentence and beautiful artwork choice. I like the spiritual nature of your poem.
Angel123
Comment Written 08-Jul-2015
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is a beautiful write, mystery writer, those pure raindrops are the best there is, I enjoyed reading it, love the picture, I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
this is a beautiful write, mystery writer, those pure raindrops are the best there is, I enjoyed reading it, love the picture, I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Thanks so much.
Comment from Glasstruth
Love the alliteration of the first line. Actually, the whole poem is really wonderful. Very creative as you write, "nature's hundred proof" Couldn't agree more. Great job! Les
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
Love the alliteration of the first line. Actually, the whole poem is really wonderful. Very creative as you write, "nature's hundred proof" Couldn't agree more. Great job! Les
Comment Written 07-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Many thanks.