Behind The Mask - Who I Am
a contest entry, biographical nonfiction35 total reviews
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Dawn, I can feel how hard this was to write, but it does give great insight into your life, which has been quite hard at times. I try to be positive in my reviews and have been fortunate to receive the same in return. Thanks for this glimpse into your life. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
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Dawn, I can feel how hard this was to write, but it does give great insight into your life, which has been quite hard at times. I try to be positive in my reviews and have been fortunate to receive the same in return. Thanks for this glimpse into your life. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
Comment from Treischel
What a perfect introduction to my newest fan. I didn't find anthing that that would put me off. It was a long introduction, but i appreciate the courage of sharing. I know exactly what you mean about pets and why i' m not going to have another either. So, thanks for sharing. I' m sure I'll learn more as time goes on. So, for now, I'll just say. Hello Dawn.
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What a perfect introduction to my newest fan. I didn't find anthing that that would put me off. It was a long introduction, but i appreciate the courage of sharing. I know exactly what you mean about pets and why i' m not going to have another either. So, thanks for sharing. I' m sure I'll learn more as time goes on. So, for now, I'll just say. Hello Dawn.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2015
Comment from rmj09
The content opens with a lesson about writing non-fiction, as a writer it catches ones attention. It draws you the reader in to see what else is written. The reader can clearly identify with the subject. The pace moves along at an even pace. No one could say they don't identify with the writing.
This follows the format of the submission guidelines.
Best of luck with the contest.
Dawn, Have a great weekend, take time to smell the flowers. *J* Rita
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The content opens with a lesson about writing non-fiction, as a writer it catches ones attention. It draws you the reader in to see what else is written. The reader can clearly identify with the subject. The pace moves along at an even pace. No one could say they don't identify with the writing.
This follows the format of the submission guidelines.
Best of luck with the contest.
Dawn, Have a great weekend, take time to smell the flowers. *J* Rita
Comment Written 25-Jun-2015
Comment from mermaids
I love reading memoirs and enjoyed reading your essay. I like your point about how much certain authors write and I am glad you are a prolific writer. I also liked the mention of your kitten and the golden retrievers. I believe too, we grieve for our animals our entire lives and sometimes the grief may actually be over others as well. Excellent writing that held my interest, I see no need for changes but I am a poet and rarely write prose. I wish you well in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2015
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I love reading memoirs and enjoyed reading your essay. I like your point about how much certain authors write and I am glad you are a prolific writer. I also liked the mention of your kitten and the golden retrievers. I believe too, we grieve for our animals our entire lives and sometimes the grief may actually be over others as well. Excellent writing that held my interest, I see no need for changes but I am a poet and rarely write prose. I wish you well in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2015
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Thank you for your kind and generous review. :)
Comment from GWinterwin
I enjoyed this very much Dawn, you have always been a favorite writer of mine on Fanstory. You are a sweetheart in every way as far as I am concerned. I wish you all the best my friend, and pray that you are blesed with health and happiness all the days of your life.
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I enjoyed this very much Dawn, you have always been a favorite writer of mine on Fanstory. You are a sweetheart in every way as far as I am concerned. I wish you all the best my friend, and pray that you are blesed with health and happiness all the days of your life.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2015
Comment from Writingfundimension
'I am Dawn, a childless mother, and an orphan. I am Dawn, the activist who can fight for just causes, for underdogs, but fails miserably at fightint for my own happiness.'
It takes no small amount of courage to put your life out for others to read, and sometimes judge. Thank you for your willingness to share so much of yourself, Dawn. Your contest entry is filled with positive insights coming from a hard-earned place of relative peace and happiness. Good luck in the contest!
Hugs, Bev
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2015
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'I am Dawn, a childless mother, and an orphan. I am Dawn, the activist who can fight for just causes, for underdogs, but fails miserably at fightint for my own happiness.'
It takes no small amount of courage to put your life out for others to read, and sometimes judge. Thank you for your willingness to share so much of yourself, Dawn. Your contest entry is filled with positive insights coming from a hard-earned place of relative peace and happiness. Good luck in the contest!
Hugs, Bev
Comment Written 25-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much, my friend - I appreciate you so much!
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You're very welcome, buddy. XX Bev
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Dawn,
well here I am... and well, so are you... to think that my shy and guarded friend has in some way shared and bared a piece of herself... I know is a pretty big deal... and really, I can only applaud you in doing so. Here's the thing... one does not need to bare their souls to be a great writer... and you are an exceptional wordsmith regardless or either way. I guess that's left for the tortured... and well, those that wish to have themselves in some spot light... and yes, it is very hard to show your warts to total strangers... but if I'm honest as well... when one bleeds a river revealing themselves from under that mask, a new face appears... one that can't be hurt through retort or ridicule... for the weight lifted through 'the truth shall set you free' is just that, no need to hide, or worry about what other people may or may not think of you... for real, once purged of the hidden guilt one feels in the deepest part of their soul... which by the way is a self imposed scar we carry around as a latent testimony of why we can't except our own forgiveness... go figure we forgive others so quickly, but find it hard to do so for ourselves... the lessons that have come through mistakes and unfortunate experiences to our gained foresight, strength and wisdom... which I also know you have an abundant amount of... I knew it from very early on... first, from your deep and heartfelt poetry, followed by stories laced with truth and fantasy that connected with me so deeply... yes, another sign post to the talent I read and witnessed in your writing... and more than anything... the essence of the real soul that shone through with these glimpses of the 'real' Dawn... and to lay another truth on you, there's not a version of Dawn that I don't have a very soft spot in my heart for... and if I was really honest, I don't think there was any part of this beautifully written essay, or the underneath of your mask that I have not already read, or read between lines in your prolific writing over the years that I have followed you... for me, this essay just cemented what I already know... you my friend are amazing... warts and all!
A truly great write, one that I had to wait to review, so that emotion didn't take over. What... It did? Hell, I'm not very good at hiding stuff, am I?
All the very best in this contest my friend, this write has to be a fore-runner!
With our thoughts we create,
a clear view,
James vx's.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2015
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Hi Dawn,
well here I am... and well, so are you... to think that my shy and guarded friend has in some way shared and bared a piece of herself... I know is a pretty big deal... and really, I can only applaud you in doing so. Here's the thing... one does not need to bare their souls to be a great writer... and you are an exceptional wordsmith regardless or either way. I guess that's left for the tortured... and well, those that wish to have themselves in some spot light... and yes, it is very hard to show your warts to total strangers... but if I'm honest as well... when one bleeds a river revealing themselves from under that mask, a new face appears... one that can't be hurt through retort or ridicule... for the weight lifted through 'the truth shall set you free' is just that, no need to hide, or worry about what other people may or may not think of you... for real, once purged of the hidden guilt one feels in the deepest part of their soul... which by the way is a self imposed scar we carry around as a latent testimony of why we can't except our own forgiveness... go figure we forgive others so quickly, but find it hard to do so for ourselves... the lessons that have come through mistakes and unfortunate experiences to our gained foresight, strength and wisdom... which I also know you have an abundant amount of... I knew it from very early on... first, from your deep and heartfelt poetry, followed by stories laced with truth and fantasy that connected with me so deeply... yes, another sign post to the talent I read and witnessed in your writing... and more than anything... the essence of the real soul that shone through with these glimpses of the 'real' Dawn... and to lay another truth on you, there's not a version of Dawn that I don't have a very soft spot in my heart for... and if I was really honest, I don't think there was any part of this beautifully written essay, or the underneath of your mask that I have not already read, or read between lines in your prolific writing over the years that I have followed you... for me, this essay just cemented what I already know... you my friend are amazing... warts and all!
A truly great write, one that I had to wait to review, so that emotion didn't take over. What... It did? Hell, I'm not very good at hiding stuff, am I?
All the very best in this contest my friend, this write has to be a fore-runner!
With our thoughts we create,
a clear view,
James vx's.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2015
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What? I don't mind emotion, and you know that about me, dear friend. But I understand that there are reasons, and I am just honoured that you've said what you have, honoured and quite honestly, terribly humbled, James. You are simply amazing in your loyalty and support, and truly appreciated far more than I could ever find the words to express - you give me far too much credit! But then, you do read with open eyes, so it doesn't surprise me that you feel I didn't tell you a lot you didn't already know. Blessings my friend, and please know how much you mean to me, you and your lovely Jade. XXDawn
Comment from abbasjoy
You are one brave lady, who decided to throw away the mask, and bare her soul.
If nothing else, I say "hats off to you." It is definitely not easy to do. Most, of us still have some skeletons in the closet, we don't necessarily want to come clanging out, but you threw caution to the wind, and let it rip.
Good on you, girl.
Unless we are liars, many of us have the same issues you have so eloquently described, and in fact, not many have dealt with them. So, to whoever wants to call you pompous, I say, let them. Who cares? You are who you are and we all need to stop hiding behind the FanStory mask, being so full of ourselves, and judging others.
I am here to learn, to have some fun, and perhaps even make a friend or two, which I fortunately have.
God bless you, as you continue to travel this earth, writing, enjoying life and sometimes trying to help others do the same.
Well done!
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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You are one brave lady, who decided to throw away the mask, and bare her soul.
If nothing else, I say "hats off to you." It is definitely not easy to do. Most, of us still have some skeletons in the closet, we don't necessarily want to come clanging out, but you threw caution to the wind, and let it rip.
Good on you, girl.
Unless we are liars, many of us have the same issues you have so eloquently described, and in fact, not many have dealt with them. So, to whoever wants to call you pompous, I say, let them. Who cares? You are who you are and we all need to stop hiding behind the FanStory mask, being so full of ourselves, and judging others.
I am here to learn, to have some fun, and perhaps even make a friend or two, which I fortunately have.
God bless you, as you continue to travel this earth, writing, enjoying life and sometimes trying to help others do the same.
Well done!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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This has to be about the kindest, most generous review - thank you. I'm not sure I deserve to be called brave, though it was difficult to write, but I thank you anyway. Blessings - Dawn
Comment from dmt1967
This is good and, last time I looked, this was a writing site, not a reviewers thank you site. The best thanks I can get is someone reviewing my work and giving me critique. It is hard to bare all and I find it hard also. I value animals more than humanity as animals tend to be kinder and more loving than people. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2015
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This is good and, last time I looked, this was a writing site, not a reviewers thank you site. The best thanks I can get is someone reviewing my work and giving me critique. It is hard to bare all and I find it hard also. I value animals more than humanity as animals tend to be kinder and more loving than people. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2015
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Bless you for your generous and kind review, and for the comfort your words offer - it's always nice to know our views are shared. Thank you very much!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
OH, Dawn, there is nothing I would like more to do than come and give you a hug. You are a writer and a bloody good one too! There is nothing anyone can say nasty about this really open and honest and at times, heart-breaking piece of non-fiction. You are a soft, sensitive, kind, loving, and just plain lovely lady. I am so desperately sorry that you lost your child, I didn't know. I must have missed that one. That must have been the worst moment in your life. I feel devastated for you. Your love for your animals and the grief you feel when they go to Heaven is how I feel whenever I've lost one of mine. They are our children too, and just as loving and loved. There is nothing you could say that would have me say anything against you. I wish I could write as much about my life, perhaps one day. Good luck in the contest, my dear friend, you deserve to win this one. :) Sandra. xxxx
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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OH, Dawn, there is nothing I would like more to do than come and give you a hug. You are a writer and a bloody good one too! There is nothing anyone can say nasty about this really open and honest and at times, heart-breaking piece of non-fiction. You are a soft, sensitive, kind, loving, and just plain lovely lady. I am so desperately sorry that you lost your child, I didn't know. I must have missed that one. That must have been the worst moment in your life. I feel devastated for you. Your love for your animals and the grief you feel when they go to Heaven is how I feel whenever I've lost one of mine. They are our children too, and just as loving and loved. There is nothing you could say that would have me say anything against you. I wish I could write as much about my life, perhaps one day. Good luck in the contest, my dear friend, you deserve to win this one. :) Sandra. xxxx
Comment Written 23-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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I could certainly use one tonight. I must catch up on some of the replies staring at me, but I am again in such a mood! Thank you so, so much my gentle friend - I wish I were as kind as you think I am...
Blessings and hugs to a truly sweet soul. Thank you for such a tremendously generous and considerate review, Sandra.