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Comment from Stacia Ann
Hi, Grayness! Thought I'd stop by.
The title itself instills worry, given that so many of us, I suspect, have our negative experiences within our over-medicated society.
Works as excellent satire of the "wonder" drugs that promise so much, deliver so little, and carry powerful side-effects that are worse than the original complaint.
Possibilities for revision:
it's hard to know where verse/poetry leaves off and prose begins (my story poem you recently reviewed may dangerously merge into the prose camp), but this does seem to me really more prose than poetry in that it seems to not have enough poetic devices of rhyme, meter, imagery, alliteration, etc.
Its most striking feature is the irony/satire.
You might consider reclassifying as prose/satire. Just a personal response that is not at all infallible.
Thanks for sharing.
Stacia
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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Hi, Grayness! Thought I'd stop by.
The title itself instills worry, given that so many of us, I suspect, have our negative experiences within our over-medicated society.
Works as excellent satire of the "wonder" drugs that promise so much, deliver so little, and carry powerful side-effects that are worse than the original complaint.
Possibilities for revision:
it's hard to know where verse/poetry leaves off and prose begins (my story poem you recently reviewed may dangerously merge into the prose camp), but this does seem to me really more prose than poetry in that it seems to not have enough poetic devices of rhyme, meter, imagery, alliteration, etc.
Its most striking feature is the irony/satire.
You might consider reclassifying as prose/satire. Just a personal response that is not at all infallible.
Thanks for sharing.
Stacia
Comment Written 18-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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Thanks Stacie Ann for your professional perspectives. I will give this some serious consideration as I generally only write poetry and usually just list my work as such automatically. Many thanks for your guidance here! Vance
Comment from Spitfire
Most clever, my dear. Not only is it on target and a good message, but a spoof of the commercials where side effects take longer to list than the benefits. Love:
Caution is advised for use when standing in moving vehicles LOL
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
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Most clever, my dear. Not only is it on target and a good message, but a spoof of the commercials where side effects take longer to list than the benefits. Love:
Caution is advised for use when standing in moving vehicles LOL
Comment Written 17-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
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Thanks so much Shari, for your always enjoyable and delightful works and messages! You are a true star! HUGS: Vance
Comment from lakeport
New drug breakthrough free for all, indeed this sound like a wonder drug, I think many will welcome it, I could use some of that drug. I enjoyed reading it and the humor about it. God bless you. Lakeport.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
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New drug breakthrough free for all, indeed this sound like a wonder drug, I think many will welcome it, I could use some of that drug. I enjoyed reading it and the humor about it. God bless you. Lakeport.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
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Thanks so much for your kind review and message! Glad to see you again and all the best to you! Hugs! Vance
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you are very welcome. Lakeport.
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God bless you as well dear friend and prayers of thanks for your heartfelt works and gifts of your heart. Vance
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thank you very much, lakeport,
Comment from Alan K Pease
Very clever poetry this advertisement for HUGS. I think it may get a unanimous endorsement although I am not sure about politicians in this political climate and probably ISIS not at all.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Very clever poetry this advertisement for HUGS. I think it may get a unanimous endorsement although I am not sure about politicians in this political climate and probably ISIS not at all.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Thanks Alan for your brilliant review and I'm not at all interested in any political feedback from those who would not get the message anyway! All the best and have a wonderful day! Hugs! Vance
Comment from Dean Kuch
You know, come to think of it I've never had to pay for Laffitoff either, but sometimes it's a bitter pill to swallow, lol...
This is very clever, my funny friend. Thank you for supplying me with me daily laugh. No, if you'll excuse me, I have to run. I now have to renew my prescription thanks to you! Ha-hahahahahaaaaa...
~Dean
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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You know, come to think of it I've never had to pay for Laffitoff either, but sometimes it's a bitter pill to swallow, lol...
This is very clever, my funny friend. Thank you for supplying me with me daily laugh. No, if you'll excuse me, I have to run. I now have to renew my prescription thanks to you! Ha-hahahahahaaaaa...
~Dean
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Dear Dean: Thanks so much for this enlightening and uplifting review! It's an honor to hear from you and I'm feeling pretty puffed up about making you laugh with absolutely not one drop of blood, not one glimmer of a sharp and waiting dagger, nary a pointed tooth, missing eye, lightening bolt...so wow! I'm struttin' over here like a windup tin soldier!! But, hummm' thinking all things over, I might still have to insist on having you patted down before I'd risk giving you a hug in any dark and gloomy environment! OK....here comes a "virtual" hug anyway, because I owe you many for all the great laughs you've given me! Vance
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You're more than welcome, Vance. The pleasure was all mine. ~Dean :}
Comment from Dawny53
A very clever write which brings the reader back to the basics.. right back where he/she belongs! It makes a lot of sense.. I'm glad I stopped to read!
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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A very clever write which brings the reader back to the basics.. right back where he/she belongs! It makes a lot of sense.. I'm glad I stopped to read!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Thanks so much Dawny: Great to hear from you and I truly appreciate the lift! I'll take that as a virtual HUG! and sending one right back to you! Vance
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Vance,
My friend you indeed made me laugh as I was( laughing) I recall the wondrous gift GOD gave us is LAUGHTER.
Love your closure.
Gert
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Hello Vance,
My friend you indeed made me laugh as I was( laughing) I recall the wondrous gift GOD gave us is LAUGHTER.
Love your closure.
Gert
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Hi Gert: wonderful to hear from you and delighted to know I made you laugh! Now you get a BIG virtual (remote control) HUG from your buddy, pal, friend, and GREAT ADMIRER! Vance.....here it comes.................!
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Smiles--got it Vance
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My delight! as well! Many thanks Vance
Comment from GE Parson
Vance this has got to be a 6ix +++ for
ingenuity, originality suspenseology and just plain
oh smileology.
Yor Friend,
Jerryology
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Vance this has got to be a 6ix +++ for
ingenuity, originality suspenseology and just plain
oh smileology.
Yor Friend,
Jerryology
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Hey Jerry: you truly made my day with this gracious six stars and uniquely bright review! Given such a gift, I absolutely MUST indeed reply with the only appropriate action.... A VIRTUAL HUG is on it's way and should be there right about NOW! Wow! felt good...big smile! Blessings and hugs always dear friend! Vance
Comment from val fitchie
someone I know came up with "damitol" (damn it all). A rock group came up with pheneobarbitols (fiend-o Barbie dolls) How fortunate "atime" exists as a medical suffix for YOUR contribution (and a good job of using every "side effect") As an admitted homophobe(mentioned at your 'tale end' /tail end AND as having recently gotten a long hug from the opposite species after a long dry spell) I WHOLELISTICALLY "get" what you are saying here and am relaxedly reviewing (basking in the warmth of your words) instead of analyzing the icyhot applications-in other words, YOU gently applied - and I'm too comfortable to get up and give a sermon on the ingredients label. STILL 200% SATISFACTION WITH YOUR PRESENTATION
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015
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someone I know came up with "damitol" (damn it all). A rock group came up with pheneobarbitols (fiend-o Barbie dolls) How fortunate "atime" exists as a medical suffix for YOUR contribution (and a good job of using every "side effect") As an admitted homophobe(mentioned at your 'tale end' /tail end AND as having recently gotten a long hug from the opposite species after a long dry spell) I WHOLELISTICALLY "get" what you are saying here and am relaxedly reviewing (basking in the warmth of your words) instead of analyzing the icyhot applications-in other words, YOU gently applied - and I'm too comfortable to get up and give a sermon on the ingredients label. STILL 200% SATISFACTION WITH YOUR PRESENTATION
Comment Written 14-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015
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Thanks so much Val for your (always CAPTIVATING AND PONDERABLE) Reviews! You are certainly a master of turning on the contemplation engines in other's minds and doing so in such an elegant and profound way!...Apologies for my somewhat subtle "shot" intended at "some/" generally "non-thinking" members (I've met) (of entities) I would expect to find fault with anything which may be considered "right" under any conditions. Generally, I paint with a micro-fine brush so THEY can know it's origin. Glad you know it's not meant to "splatter" on you! PRECIOUS FRIEND! Vance
Comment from Ronni
Well dear Vance,
Your witty, insightful, not to mention irrefutably physical, emotional, and
psychological benefits of such a simple, yet incomparably powerful act
as hugs, is so true! Human hands were the initially intended as indispensable
forms of contact, protection, comfort and consolation to each other, by our
benevolent Creator. It's the first immediate action when a baby is born, a
stabilizing and reassuring one through childhood and adulthood; and last
tender act upon cessation of life. There is nothing ever equal to it or
beyond it. No comparable replacements.
In European countries, such as I am from, (Croatia) hugging is much more
common and eagerly and happily indulged in, by all ages. In US it seems
to be underestimated and many seem to prefer to avoid hugs and hugging,
and are much more aloof and indifferent about it..so it seems to me since
I've lived here. Yet it is so incredibly precious and pleasurable. More than
most realize!
Of course the medical and psychological professions would loose a lot
of business and patients if they endorsed and encouraged such a simple
medicinal effect; calming and comforting effect even if all else fails.
Heaven forbid these supposedly 'human professions' ever try to regulate
or dispense false substitutes for hugs and hugging! They are ever so
anxious to spoil what is free and beneficial beyond their powers or meds
The cures cited hugs and hugging can and do freely provide and enable
benefits of, so HUMOROUSLY enumerated, is priceless and precious!!!!!!!!
By the way, Have you had your hugs today? Gladly share mine!
Blessings and best wishes always, Ronni
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015
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Well dear Vance,
Your witty, insightful, not to mention irrefutably physical, emotional, and
psychological benefits of such a simple, yet incomparably powerful act
as hugs, is so true! Human hands were the initially intended as indispensable
forms of contact, protection, comfort and consolation to each other, by our
benevolent Creator. It's the first immediate action when a baby is born, a
stabilizing and reassuring one through childhood and adulthood; and last
tender act upon cessation of life. There is nothing ever equal to it or
beyond it. No comparable replacements.
In European countries, such as I am from, (Croatia) hugging is much more
common and eagerly and happily indulged in, by all ages. In US it seems
to be underestimated and many seem to prefer to avoid hugs and hugging,
and are much more aloof and indifferent about it..so it seems to me since
I've lived here. Yet it is so incredibly precious and pleasurable. More than
most realize!
Of course the medical and psychological professions would loose a lot
of business and patients if they endorsed and encouraged such a simple
medicinal effect; calming and comforting effect even if all else fails.
Heaven forbid these supposedly 'human professions' ever try to regulate
or dispense false substitutes for hugs and hugging! They are ever so
anxious to spoil what is free and beneficial beyond their powers or meds
The cures cited hugs and hugging can and do freely provide and enable
benefits of, so HUMOROUSLY enumerated, is priceless and precious!!!!!!!!
By the way, Have you had your hugs today? Gladly share mine!
Blessings and best wishes always, Ronni
Comment Written 14-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015
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Thanks Ronni for you wonderful words and also that splendid 'VIRTUAL HUG" By the way....It DID get through and one is on it's way back to you on Angel's wings...Vance
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And they delivered! Thank you!
Have a beautiful evening, with
wondrous dreams!
Gratefully, Ronni
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Dear Nancy: thank you so deeply and sincerely for your lovely thoughts and words..spirit, and beautiful heart! Vance
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Who is 'Nancy" referred to here?
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Who is 'Nancy" referred to here?
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And they delivered! Thank you!
Have a beautiful evening, with
wondrous dreams!
Gratefully, Ronni